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Offline Danzik

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 12th Comic done!
« Reply #75 on: September 25, 2007, 02:09:35 pm »
You could just buy a domain name,
upload your comics to tumblr
and have your domain redirect to the tumblr page.

If you need more detail, PM me and I'll walk you through it on gabbly or something.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 12th Comic done!
« Reply #76 on: November 09, 2007, 12:08:54 pm »
I still haven't gotten the OK from my dad to regester a Tumblr page, but I'll see tonight.

Until then, 2 new comics!

Why two you ask?

Because I had started the 13th one in response to a news story that was dated by the time I finished it, and rather than just upload a semi-dated comic, I decided to go onto the 14th and finish that one.

So for those of you that don't mind jokes that are a tad dated:
#13: http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=1935841605&context=set-72157601373571753&size=o
And for the rest of you:
#14: http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=1936677908&context=set-72157601373571753&size=o

Hope you guys enjoy them.
« Last Edit: November 09, 2007, 12:10:29 pm by sgore »
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 14th Comic done!
« Reply #77 on: November 09, 2007, 04:34:53 pm »
:P
Made me laugh.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #78 on: September 05, 2008, 08:56:39 pm »
So, I took Danzik's advice (sort of) and got the comic it's own website (sort of).
http://allbussedup.smackjeeves.com/

I've updated a couple times since getting the page, so it's on comic #16 now.
Also it's a lot easier to sift through the archive... Partially because I now have an archive to sift through.
It's all starting to look a little more professional! (sort of).

As always input and commentary are much appreciated from anyone interested in providing it.
(Also I have another comic done which I'll be uploading tomorrow.)

Edit: It's up.

I actually meant to post in this thread a few weeks ago but for some reason I kept procrastinating.
« Last Edit: September 06, 2008, 11:01:58 am by sgore »
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #79 on: September 07, 2008, 03:24:28 pm »
Skyward Wood?
LadySam?

Dear god. D:


EDIT: I'VE GOT ANOTHER ONE: Keno Ryan!
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #80 on: September 07, 2008, 03:36:11 pm »
Want some criticism on that latest comic?
-First of all, the joke itself is not too bad. The delivery could've been neater but precision like that just takes experience
-The text is kind of small, and it's a little too close to the edges of the balloons. Make sure to keep the text the same distance from each side of every balloon when possible.
-In the third panel, that sentence is kind of run-on and gets hard to understand. Add some commas, maybe a period and it'll look more professional.
-That last panel should be in the form of dialogue, IMO. If you're having trouble fitting all that text, don't be afraid to up the comic's size a tad.
-Finally, the art style itself looks unprofessional, but if the writing is good enough that won't be a problem.

Also, remember that I'm not exactly an expert on webcomics. These are mostly just my opinion.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #81 on: September 08, 2008, 05:59:00 am »
I must admit I avoided this thread after seeing the first couple of comics, and I generally avoid "look at my webcomic" threads like the plague since they inevitably turn out to be crap. However, looking at yours again I'm pleasantly surprised. You've improved a lot.

I am a big fan of your writing, though it could stand to be a little less wordy (though that could be difficult considering the jokes). Just be careful not to Buckley up your dialogue too much. You've genuinely made me laugh, which is better than 90% of webcomics I've come across. In addition to what MD said above, I think you could increase the size of the comic slightly. You should never be too afraid to break out of your format when necessary - not every joke can be told in 250 pixels of height.

The art is okay for paint, but I think it's ultimately what'll be holding you back. Have you considered pairing up with someone else, Penny-Arcade style?

EDIT: One other neat touch are the signs and things in the background. Keep those up, they're brilliant.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #82 on: September 11, 2008, 01:04:34 pm »
The newest 3 made me lol.
No way dude, you're trolling me.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #83 on: September 13, 2008, 01:39:04 pm »
You...have porn ads on your webcomic. If you cannot get your dad to give you the go-ahead for the new site. Then I suggest you mention that there are naked women on your website and ONLY A NEW WEBSITE WILL MAKE THEM GO AWAY!

It'll probably backfire. But your webcomic has some good jokes. And it was nice knowing you if you lose your internets.
« Last Edit: September 13, 2008, 10:32:06 pm by Allch Chcar »
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #84 on: September 13, 2008, 03:02:40 pm »
First off I want to thank Metallic Dragon and Daxx for their suggestions. They should prove to be very helpful. Second I'd like to thank alwayswatching for his compliments. Third I'd like to thank Plank of Wood for his interesting (albeit disturbing) suggestions.

And fourth:

You...have porn ads on your webcomic. If you cannot get your dad to give you the go-ahead for the new site. Then I suggest you mention that there are naked women on your website and ONLY A NEW WEBSITE WILL MAKE THEM GO AWAY!

It'll probably backfire. But your webcomic has some good jokes. And it was nice knowing you if you lose your internets.

This is news to me. Could you PM me the banner ad in question. I think the system there is set up similarly to the one on this website, so I have no control over what is put on there.
« Last Edit: September 14, 2008, 12:39:32 pm by sgore »
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #85 on: September 13, 2008, 10:31:38 pm »
No, I will not PM you the banner. I don't collect pictures of naked or even partially naked women.

It looked like your ads are fairly random, there were ones linking to Britney Spears sex videos and the ones specifically of another girl showing herself topless except for her hands and advertising her videos, or something. I wasn't paying that much attention to the ad, I made a mental note of the degree of nudity for you and was trying to finish reading the comic so I could get outta there.
You might see it if you refresh the page a couple times or look through your various comics. It was one time that I saw it.

The ads here only go as far as singles ads which aren't particularly racy here. This one ad was partial/suggested(?) nudity. I don't know exactly what it was called but it was pretty bad.

And please remove the white letters from your quote.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #86 on: September 14, 2008, 12:50:09 pm »
No, I will not PM you the banner. I don't collect pictures of naked or even partially naked women.
I wasn't suggesting that you...er...never mind.

The ads here only go as far as singles ads which aren't particularly racy here. This one ad was partial/suggested(?) nudity. I don't know exactly what it was called but it was pretty bad.
I wasn't comparing what you described to the content of the ads on this site, only saying that the system is set up in the same way.

Well anyway thank you for at least informing me of them. I'll try to email the people who run the website soon and see if they can prevent those from showing up. They've got some hundreds of other webcomics on there, so I can imagine I probably won't be the only one with this complaint.
If anyone else does come across the ads in question, please do PM them. I would like to know what they are before sending off an email.

« Last Edit: September 14, 2008, 12:52:24 pm by sgore »
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #87 on: September 14, 2008, 08:52:25 pm »
No, I will not PM you the banner. I don't collect pictures of naked or even partially naked women.
I wasn't suggesting that you...er...never mind.
Owned!

It never occurred to me to save a copy, okay? Sorry to put you in a bad spot, but you did ask for it. All in good fun my friend.

It could have gone worse. Imagine if LadyM had come in here, imagine how awkward that would be >.>
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