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Hello.
If you're reading this thread it can mean one of 12 things.

Listed in terms of likelyhood
A. You've clicked here accidentally looking for Gunner's webcomic thread.
B. You've clicked here accidentally looking for the Off topic... topic.
C.You've clicked here looking for Picture Fight, In which case you're in the wrong Fourm.
D. You're clicked here Looking for My Key. Sorry Guys, Keep looking.
E.You're eigther LadyM or Oviraptor looking over the thread to make sure everything is okay. (And perhaps to do some of Choice J. Hopefully.)
F.You're back here looking for my key because you think that choice D was just to throw you off. It wasn't. Try somewhere else.
G.You're a Walter Mondale Impersonator
H.You're A Maxis representative come to tell me how much you love ripple but are unable to Pm me and cannot find the ripple thread.
I. You're a Deranged Millionare come to offer me a chance to save Brooklyn from himself. I know that's you John Hodgeman. I know that's you.
J.You're a member of the Gamingsteve site actually interested in reading the webcomic I've attempted to make.
K.You're a guest on the Gamingsteve site actually interested in reading the webcomic I've attempted to make. (Which in that case I recommend regestering so that you may catagorize yourself in the choice J area)
L. You are Walter Mondale.

Anyway If you are here to read My attempt at a web comic: "All Bussed Up And Nowhere To Go"
All 17 strips are now readable here:
http://allbussedup.smackjeeves.com/
If there's enough demand for me continue, I shall.
Until then, I hope you enjoy these.
« Last Edit: September 06, 2008, 11:02:16 am by sgore »


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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #1 on: September 13, 2006, 01:19:12 pm »
Lol, My favourite is the first one. These are hilarious. Bravo!
No way dude, you're trolling me.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #2 on: September 13, 2006, 01:22:13 pm »
Thanks.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #3 on: September 13, 2006, 01:29:58 pm »
Mambo #7 was pretty funny.
How does he type with no hands...

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #4 on: September 13, 2006, 02:05:06 pm »
Mambo #7 was pretty funny.
How does he type with no hands...
Thats a good question, you see what he does is hDELETED!
Sam is basically right, he's just cranky.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #5 on: September 13, 2006, 04:17:09 pm »
I liked Mambo #7 as well. Almost worthy of professional comics, if it were better drawn and presented at least. It's a good style you've got there almost, just that the pixels are cutting my eyes.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #6 on: September 13, 2006, 04:22:43 pm »
By the process of elimination, I am Walter Mondale.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #7 on: September 13, 2006, 04:27:10 pm »
pretty cool but i am just surfing choice
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #8 on: September 13, 2006, 05:16:39 pm »
Ah the ext it so small, my eyes they hurt!

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #9 on: September 13, 2006, 05:57:05 pm »
Perhaps I should make the text bigger if I make more...
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #10 on: September 13, 2006, 05:59:53 pm »
OH NO!
I CREATED A MONSTER.....
THE WEBCOMIC MONSTER!
NOOOOOO!
:P
But seriously,
I liked it.
Keep on the Good work.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #11 on: September 16, 2006, 12:24:55 pm »
these aren't bad. I like #3 the best. You do a really good job with facial expressions for being a stick figure. The font is too small. Just make the whole thing bigger so you can zoom in maybe... or use a better font or something. make more. They are funnier than that OTHER web comic...

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #12 on: September 16, 2006, 12:31:29 pm »
these aren't bad. I like #3 the best. You do a really good job with facial expressions for being a stick figure. The font is too small. Just make the whole thing bigger so you can zoom in maybe... or use a better font or something. make more. They are funnier than that OTHER web comic...
......
[size=0pt]I find that...... slightly offensive.... :([/size]
:O
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #13 on: September 16, 2006, 12:42:14 pm »
Choice #E  ;)

Good job sgore, it would be easier to read with bigger text but they were funny.

Gunner.. don't be sad, yours are good too and remember, you are doing a different style of comic. You can't compare the two.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #14 on: September 16, 2006, 01:00:01 pm »
i wish my school had hallway pirates... :(
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« Reply #15 on: September 16, 2006, 02:21:02 pm »
That should make things easier to read.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #16 on: September 16, 2006, 03:48:54 pm »
I liked it, I thought they were pretty funny.
I like the last one... HALLWAY NINJAS, ATTACK!

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #17 on: September 16, 2006, 06:03:36 pm »
I like, keep it up, or else...!
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« Reply #18 on: September 16, 2006, 07:10:13 pm »
i like it also. i will be unveiling my webcomic in a week or so

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #19 on: September 17, 2006, 04:31:20 pm »
I think it's pretty good.

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« Reply #20 on: September 22, 2006, 08:13:48 pm »
#6 is up. (And The comic's been somewhat revamped slightly.)
It doesn't show up well when posted so Instead I'll just provide the link.
http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=250176431&size=o
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took me a second to realize that last frame was a close-up. I liked that one.

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My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #22 on: October 11, 2006, 01:48:02 pm »
Just to let people know, It's not that this has faded into oblivion and I myself have completely forgotten it, It's just that, with school and such I don't really have enough free time to give a webcomic consistant updates. (You can expect an occasional one every once in a while though  ;))
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« Reply #23 on: January 23, 2007, 02:56:18 pm »
Samog's not being a Nazi reminded me:
http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=367395822&size=o
#7
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« Reply #24 on: January 26, 2007, 09:09:26 pm »
I liked the hallway hazzards :D keep it going
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Good Grief!

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #25 on: January 27, 2007, 04:14:27 pm »
HA!
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« Reply #26 on: January 27, 2007, 09:03:12 pm »
More! More!

You'll never know why.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #27 on: January 28, 2007, 06:21:22 am »
Frankly, I don't like them.
But don't you let yourself down because of me, it's just another opinion you can as well ignore.
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« Reply #28 on: January 28, 2007, 02:36:49 pm »
*pulls out knife* Come here GrapeFruit I got something to show you.

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« Reply #29 on: January 28, 2007, 02:37:58 pm »
But don't you let yourself down because of me, it's just another opinion you will ignore.

fixed

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« Reply #30 on: January 28, 2007, 02:41:30 pm »
Please, Don't get into knife fights over my web comic.
Or Light Saber Fights.
(Don't pretend I can't see you Darth. Just don't.)

GrapeFruit shared his opinion in a kind manner, and I thank him for that.

I also thank everyone that has offered their comments on the webcomic so far.
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« Reply #31 on: April 29, 2007, 12:39:26 pm »
And to everyone's surprise the 8th comic was revealed:
http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=477180742&size=o

That's right, the next one is up!

To be honest I had pretty much finished this a month or two ago, however some save complications caused me to lose some of it...that plus school work and other such things has postponed completion until now.

Hope you guys enjoy it.
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« Reply #32 on: April 29, 2007, 12:54:07 pm »
Ha he is naked! :)

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« Reply #33 on: April 29, 2007, 01:29:50 pm »
Ha he is naked! :)
Well...not necessarily...Read the comic and draw from it what conclusions you may though I suppose
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« Reply #34 on: April 29, 2007, 04:48:42 pm »
 :D  niiiice
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« Reply #35 on: April 29, 2007, 04:52:53 pm »
Hillarious. :)
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #36 on: April 29, 2007, 05:46:02 pm »
Actually, I don't find it that funny. But well done for trying.

Maybe I just don't get it.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #37 on: April 29, 2007, 06:33:32 pm »
I didnt find it that funny either...too many words, not enough substance. Oh well. Some people liked it so it can't be bad.
Sam is basically right, he's just cranky.

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« Reply #38 on: April 29, 2007, 07:27:38 pm »
Well, thanks to everyone for the kind words. Krakow and Daxx, I'll try to do better on the next outing.  :)
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« Reply #39 on: April 29, 2007, 07:28:22 pm »
Yay! Someone who can take criticism!  :D
Sam is basically right, he's just cranky.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #40 on: April 29, 2007, 11:17:49 pm »
It was alright, I suppose. But some of your earlier works were funnier.

Oh well. Some people liked it so it can't be bad.

Out of context I thought that sounded almost funny.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #41 on: April 30, 2007, 05:28:33 pm »
I like it so far. A couple were 'meh' but you are at least willing to stick it out there and see what people think of it.

Good job.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #42 on: May 02, 2007, 02:13:26 am »
Not bad at all.

I'm thinking the next one will be better though

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #43 on: May 02, 2007, 08:28:58 am »
but you are at least willing to stick it out there and see what people think of it.

Teehee!
No way dude, you're trolling me.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #44 on: May 05, 2007, 08:25:44 am »
but you are at least willing to stick it out there and see what people think of it.

I believe that's illegal... in public.

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« Reply #45 on: May 05, 2007, 10:33:01 am »
All Right, Newest Comic!
http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=485258983&size=o
And once again, I thank everyone for their comments so far.
Hope you guys enjoy it.
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« Reply #46 on: May 05, 2007, 11:15:20 am »
That made me giggle.

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« Reply #47 on: May 05, 2007, 12:06:10 pm »
Heh, I liked it. :)
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #48 on: May 05, 2007, 04:08:04 pm »
Much better.

However, your word balloon positioning could do with a little work. If you can't put a balloon to the left, it needs to be visibly raised above the one it precedes.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #49 on: May 06, 2007, 12:15:51 am »
yeah I read that left balloon first, then realized it was the 2nd balloon. It was pretty good. I like the "Hyrule stay in school" poster.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #50 on: May 06, 2007, 07:05:28 am »
I liked it, good job.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #51 on: May 06, 2007, 07:22:04 am »
I liked the comic, but I agree with the others, you need to work on speech bubble placement. Either add a fourth panel (making #3 dramatic pause with 1 and 2 being the conversation) or consider placing a narritive box in or above the first panel like, "Once again Nate is held after class..." kind of like this :

http://www.adherents.com/lit/comics/image/Superman_funeral_sermon.jpg

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« Reply #52 on: May 06, 2007, 09:45:39 am »
Why are there two superman? 0-o

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #53 on: May 06, 2007, 10:12:47 am »
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Offline Danzik

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #54 on: May 06, 2007, 03:12:06 pm »
I liked this one too.
Is it possible to make the panels larger?

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #55 on: May 07, 2007, 04:29:35 pm »
Haha, I love it. May favourite is Newcomer: Franklyn...or whatever.

You have a brilliantly random mind. Keep making them

Edit: i had an idea:  Nate and someone else in a corridor. Huge pirate ship goes past. Nate says "this hallway pirates problem has got to be fixed...."
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #56 on: May 08, 2007, 02:31:39 am »
Why are there two superman? 0-o

Earth 1 Superman and Earth 2 superman [/nerd]

Also I agree on bubble placement.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #57 on: August 04, 2007, 09:56:00 pm »
Huzza! the 10th Strip!
*Commence the Balloons and Streamers!*
http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=1013412031&size=o
I tried taking some of the suggestions you guys gave. Mainly danzik and Lego's.
Hope you enjoy it!
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #58 on: August 04, 2007, 10:11:14 pm »
hehe nice
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #59 on: August 04, 2007, 10:54:59 pm »
Pretty good.
The "Mystery Class" poster is a nice touch.

I went through them again
and I think the one below is the best so far.
Clever and well thought out.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #60 on: August 04, 2007, 11:13:26 pm »
Everythign is far to small to read.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #61 on: August 04, 2007, 11:52:51 pm »
Penguins, they are what? vanishing? I can't read that. The rest I can kinda read.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #62 on: August 05, 2007, 03:04:40 am »
Watching, they are watching.
No way dude, you're trolling me.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go.
« Reply #63 on: August 05, 2007, 03:53:49 am »
they like to watch
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Thanks for everyone's comments so far. And the link to the comic danzik posted (The 7th one), With bigger text, Is right here: http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=367395822&size=o
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Heh, the bigger just made me notice the Penguin  :D

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And now My attempt at non-sequitur Characters that may or may not occasionally make an appearance in the webcomic: Chef Bri... I mean Catsb...I mean...er...Perhaps Trouser Lad?

Nah. Scott Ramsoomair would probably catch on and send his legion of Bowler hat wearing Vampire Robots after me. He has them you know. 12 of them.

Anyway, I present for the 11th ABUANWTG: Rupert and Myron!
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LOL!

Look at his noteborad.

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My favorite is the "Are you studying civilization, or playing it" one.
Warning: Hot.  Choking Hazard for children under 3.  Please do not exit until the vehicle comes to a complete stop.  EULA removes all human rights.  Special features are not rated.  Side effects include  cardiac arrest and spontaneous falling off of body parts.  May contain nuts.  Acts are being performed by trained proffesionals.  Results not typical.  Thank you for flying with United Airlines.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 12th Comic done!
« Reply #71 on: September 15, 2007, 08:26:39 pm »
It's the 12th all bussed up and nowhere to go...
http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=1389835112&size=o

Hope you guys like it!
P.S. (Fun Fact: The Stock Tickers are actually initials of actors from The West Wing!)
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 12th Comic done!
« Reply #72 on: September 16, 2007, 06:58:28 pm »
Funny, made me laugh. :)
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 12th Comic done!
« Reply #73 on: September 18, 2007, 04:43:45 pm »
Absurd.
Everyone knows Canada isn't real.
Imagine, a culture of people that finish every sentence with a question.

Anyway, great comics man.
At what point are you going to start hosting them on their own site and develop the rabid fanbase other web comics have?

Seriously, Bussedup-con isn't going to happen on it's own.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 12th Comic done!
« Reply #74 on: September 20, 2007, 12:35:10 pm »
Absurd.
Everyone knows Canada isn't real.
Imagine, a culture of people that finish every sentence with a question.

Anyway, great comics man.
At what point are you going to start hosting them on their own site and develop the rabid fanbase other web comics have?

Seriously, Bussedup-con isn't going to happen on it's own.


I unfortunately wouldn't know where to start with something like that...
Does anyone?
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 12th Comic done!
« Reply #75 on: September 25, 2007, 02:09:35 pm »
You could just buy a domain name,
upload your comics to tumblr
and have your domain redirect to the tumblr page.

If you need more detail, PM me and I'll walk you through it on gabbly or something.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 12th Comic done!
« Reply #76 on: November 09, 2007, 12:08:54 pm »
I still haven't gotten the OK from my dad to regester a Tumblr page, but I'll see tonight.

Until then, 2 new comics!

Why two you ask?

Because I had started the 13th one in response to a news story that was dated by the time I finished it, and rather than just upload a semi-dated comic, I decided to go onto the 14th and finish that one.

So for those of you that don't mind jokes that are a tad dated:
#13: http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=1935841605&context=set-72157601373571753&size=o
And for the rest of you:
#14: http://www.flickr.com/photo_zoom.gne?id=1936677908&context=set-72157601373571753&size=o

Hope you guys enjoy them.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 14th Comic done!
« Reply #77 on: November 09, 2007, 04:34:53 pm »
:P
Made me laugh.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #78 on: September 05, 2008, 08:56:39 pm »
So, I took Danzik's advice (sort of) and got the comic it's own website (sort of).
http://allbussedup.smackjeeves.com/

I've updated a couple times since getting the page, so it's on comic #16 now.
Also it's a lot easier to sift through the archive... Partially because I now have an archive to sift through.
It's all starting to look a little more professional! (sort of).

As always input and commentary are much appreciated from anyone interested in providing it.
(Also I have another comic done which I'll be uploading tomorrow.)

Edit: It's up.

I actually meant to post in this thread a few weeks ago but for some reason I kept procrastinating.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #79 on: September 07, 2008, 03:24:28 pm »
Skyward Wood?
LadySam?

Dear god. D:


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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #80 on: September 07, 2008, 03:36:11 pm »
Want some criticism on that latest comic?
-First of all, the joke itself is not too bad. The delivery could've been neater but precision like that just takes experience
-The text is kind of small, and it's a little too close to the edges of the balloons. Make sure to keep the text the same distance from each side of every balloon when possible.
-In the third panel, that sentence is kind of run-on and gets hard to understand. Add some commas, maybe a period and it'll look more professional.
-That last panel should be in the form of dialogue, IMO. If you're having trouble fitting all that text, don't be afraid to up the comic's size a tad.
-Finally, the art style itself looks unprofessional, but if the writing is good enough that won't be a problem.

Also, remember that I'm not exactly an expert on webcomics. These are mostly just my opinion.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #81 on: September 08, 2008, 05:59:00 am »
I must admit I avoided this thread after seeing the first couple of comics, and I generally avoid "look at my webcomic" threads like the plague since they inevitably turn out to be crap. However, looking at yours again I'm pleasantly surprised. You've improved a lot.

I am a big fan of your writing, though it could stand to be a little less wordy (though that could be difficult considering the jokes). Just be careful not to Buckley up your dialogue too much. You've genuinely made me laugh, which is better than 90% of webcomics I've come across. In addition to what MD said above, I think you could increase the size of the comic slightly. You should never be too afraid to break out of your format when necessary - not every joke can be told in 250 pixels of height.

The art is okay for paint, but I think it's ultimately what'll be holding you back. Have you considered pairing up with someone else, Penny-Arcade style?

EDIT: One other neat touch are the signs and things in the background. Keep those up, they're brilliant.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #82 on: September 11, 2008, 01:04:34 pm »
The newest 3 made me lol.
No way dude, you're trolling me.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #83 on: September 13, 2008, 01:39:04 pm »
You...have porn ads on your webcomic. If you cannot get your dad to give you the go-ahead for the new site. Then I suggest you mention that there are naked women on your website and ONLY A NEW WEBSITE WILL MAKE THEM GO AWAY!

It'll probably backfire. But your webcomic has some good jokes. And it was nice knowing you if you lose your internets.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #84 on: September 13, 2008, 03:02:40 pm »
First off I want to thank Metallic Dragon and Daxx for their suggestions. They should prove to be very helpful. Second I'd like to thank alwayswatching for his compliments. Third I'd like to thank Plank of Wood for his interesting (albeit disturbing) suggestions.

And fourth:

You...have porn ads on your webcomic. If you cannot get your dad to give you the go-ahead for the new site. Then I suggest you mention that there are naked women on your website and ONLY A NEW WEBSITE WILL MAKE THEM GO AWAY!

It'll probably backfire. But your webcomic has some good jokes. And it was nice knowing you if you lose your internets.

This is news to me. Could you PM me the banner ad in question. I think the system there is set up similarly to the one on this website, so I have no control over what is put on there.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #85 on: September 13, 2008, 10:31:38 pm »
No, I will not PM you the banner. I don't collect pictures of naked or even partially naked women.

It looked like your ads are fairly random, there were ones linking to Britney Spears sex videos and the ones specifically of another girl showing herself topless except for her hands and advertising her videos, or something. I wasn't paying that much attention to the ad, I made a mental note of the degree of nudity for you and was trying to finish reading the comic so I could get outta there.
You might see it if you refresh the page a couple times or look through your various comics. It was one time that I saw it.

The ads here only go as far as singles ads which aren't particularly racy here. This one ad was partial/suggested(?) nudity. I don't know exactly what it was called but it was pretty bad.

And please remove the white letters from your quote.
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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #86 on: September 14, 2008, 12:50:09 pm »
No, I will not PM you the banner. I don't collect pictures of naked or even partially naked women.
I wasn't suggesting that you...er...never mind.

The ads here only go as far as singles ads which aren't particularly racy here. This one ad was partial/suggested(?) nudity. I don't know exactly what it was called but it was pretty bad.
I wasn't comparing what you described to the content of the ads on this site, only saying that the system is set up in the same way.

Well anyway thank you for at least informing me of them. I'll try to email the people who run the website soon and see if they can prevent those from showing up. They've got some hundreds of other webcomics on there, so I can imagine I probably won't be the only one with this complaint.
If anyone else does come across the ads in question, please do PM them. I would like to know what they are before sending off an email.

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Re: My attempt at a webcomic. All Bussed up and Nowhere to go. 17th Comic done!
« Reply #87 on: September 14, 2008, 08:52:25 pm »
No, I will not PM you the banner. I don't collect pictures of naked or even partially naked women.
I wasn't suggesting that you...er...never mind.
Owned!

It never occurred to me to save a copy, okay? Sorry to put you in a bad spot, but you did ask for it. All in good fun my friend.

It could have gone worse. Imagine if LadyM had come in here, imagine how awkward that would be >.>
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