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The Haldoran: Now with 10% more Conspiracy!
« on: August 08, 2006, 10:02:37 am »
I've been working on this idea for a while now, trying to make not just a creative creature, but a whole new culture and civilization thats different from the norm.  Since I first developed the idea I've rebuilt the entire Haldoran culture from the ground up at least twice, and now I'm posting the most complete image I have of them before I change it again.

I now submit for your approval, the Haldoran:

The above picture is by Operaghost21.


Biology Overview:  Each Haldoran has six tentacle like projections on their upper body, each of which is tipped with an eye and a grasper.  Each of these projections has a spine like structure running through their center to provide support and protect the optic nerve.  The mouth is on a similar but shorter and thicker projection to the front.  Their main system of movement are twelve small legs along their under side, these allow them to move surprisingly fast but were evolved primarily for clinging to trees.  The average Haldoran is only about one and a half meters tall (roughly five feet for those who don't use metric) but are between four and five meters long (twelve to fifteen feet) when fully extended.  Most of their skeletal structure is composed of small bones similar to the vertebrates in the spinal column of other creatures.  The only rigid structures in their entire body's are the jaw, the "skull cage" which houses the brain and other vital organs, and each of the twelve legs along their under belies.  As mentioned earlier most of the vital organs including the brain, heart, lungs and some of the digestive tract are housed in the "skull cage" which is basically a reinforced rib cage with thicker ribs which fuse together early in life.  This makes fatally wounding them exceedingly difficult, you would have to either crush their thick skull or slash at them until they bleed to death.  They are completely carnivorous and it is difficult for them to take nourishment from anything besides raw meat.

Cultural Overview:  The Haldoran government can be summed up like this:  They are ruled by pyramid of lords.  At the top is the Supreme Lord who's name is always Haldora, below him are six High Lords who each have a similar name that they always have.  Each of the High Lords have six Lords (same naming system) below them and each Lord has six Low Lords below them.  I will elaborate on the powers and duty's of each later.  As you can probably tell they have a small obssession with the number six, this is because unlike the base ten system most species use they use a base six system.  The biggest thing that most outside observers would notice (they don't notice this because Haldora refuses to give away the location of the home world) about Haldorans is that for the last three thousand years the Haldorans have believed that they are gods.  Scientific revelations in the last few centuries combined with the discovery of other intelligent life in the universe and the progressive policies of the last few Supreme Lords have acted to errode this belief and it is even rumored that the current Supreme Lord plans to make a public statement on this subject soon.

The Conspiracy starts on page 2.
« Last Edit: August 28, 2006, 09:23:44 am by neoadept »


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Re: Haldoran
« Reply #1 on: August 08, 2006, 10:08:29 am »
Nice ;D I just wonder whether their upper body would not collapse forward.

Also, do the Haldoran wish to ally with the Yunimius, whose new dictator has worked itself into a bit of trouble?

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Re: Haldoran
« Reply #2 on: August 08, 2006, 10:09:13 am »
sounds interesting...but you said that they will have a special and original culture...did you mean the system with the 6-lords or will you tell another time?

and the counting system of the most species isnt always ten...its often based on the amount of fingers they have

but sounds very good...more infos are desired  :)
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Re: Haldoran
« Reply #3 on: August 08, 2006, 10:13:23 am »
Nice ;D I just wonder whether their upper body would not collapse forward.

Also, do the Haldoran wish to ally with the Yunimius, whose new dictator has worked itself into a bit of trouble?

I'm already a member of your GEC, the recent kidnapping of my ambassador means that relations will be strained at best.

Flisch:  There is definitely more to them than that, just give it some time.
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« Reply #4 on: August 08, 2006, 12:27:14 pm »
Civilization Begins

Even Haldoran historians have a hard time interpreting how their race achieved civilization, their best guess is that it went something like this: 

The first form of communication developed by the Haldorans appears to have been, strangely, the written word.  It was not by any means a language, but that doesn't change the fact that they wrote before they spoke.  It started simply enough, a symbol or two scratched into the bark of trees to mark the territories of packs, but over the course of centuries grew more complex, with one symbol for danger, one for directions to the nearest water source, one to mark a place where packs could meet peacefully.  It is believed that sometime during the development of the symbols they developed a verbal language to go with it.

Although their way of communicating changed greatly, their way of life remained essentially unchanged.  The Haldorans lived in packs of seven with one leader and six followers (the number is a genetic memory kind of thing).  The packs followed herds of Shrakes which acted as their primary food source.  Even before they developed language the packs showed a remarkable level of teamwork in hunting the Shrakes.  They began with three pack members chasing a small group of shrakes away from the herd and guiding them through the forest and into an ambush staged by the other four, the ambushers would hide motionless in the trees until the shrakes were directly bellow them and drop onto one.  they would then wrap themselves around the shrake and twist until the spine snapped and the shrake collapsed.  They would eat and then go weeks before attacking again (as reptiles they only need to eat a big meal about once a month to survive).

They lived like this for thousands of years before a change occurred.  A pack had accidentally caused the shrake herd to stampede into a wide shallow canyon with a narrow entrance and which conveniently had large amounts of the vegetation shrakes preferred to eat growing in it.  The shrakes stopped there to graze and that night a thunder storm hit and caused several large trees to fall and block the canyons entrance, when morning came they found themselves trapped and the Haldorans found them easy prey.  For a month or so things continued like this until the shrakes consumed all the vegetation in the canyon, a week later they began to die.  One Haldoran, through a mixture of intuition and luck, figured out the problem and gathered some of the plant to throw to the shrakes.  Soon his pack and the other packs following the herd had caught on and began to harvest the plant as well.  Over time they learned the best way to harvest enough of the plant to keep the herd alive without depleting the plants.  The packs began to work together and build simple shelters now that they were no longer on the move.  Soon the first tribe had formed and word had spread to other packs who followed similar courses, and since these packs had to cut down the trees themselves the first stone axes were developed.

That's how civilization began on Haldora, it also explains why a planet ruled by carnivores has just as much farmland as a herbivore world.
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« Reply #5 on: August 08, 2006, 04:17:48 pm »
Very cool ;D

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Re: Haldoran
« Reply #6 on: August 08, 2006, 04:25:07 pm »
ooh nifty :)

i think i'd like to draw them ;)
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« Reply #7 on: August 08, 2006, 05:43:21 pm »
ooh nifty :)

i think i'd like to draw them ;)

That would be great, thanks alot.

The next part is going to be about how the belief that they are gods got started.
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« Reply #8 on: August 09, 2006, 11:36:17 am »
Creation of The God-Hood

If anything this era of Haldoran history is even more obscure than its beginning.  For more than two thousand years the Supreme Lords have hid the origin of their beliefs from the public so that those beliefs would never be called into question.  Even with the help of the more progressive recent Supreme Lords the records which allowed this report to be created were nearly impossible to find.

To understand the origin of the Haldorans beliefs, one must first understand their world view.  Despite the amount of religion in their culture Haldorans are essentially atheists.  They do not believe in an all powerfull being, even in the form of themselves.  The universe exists and, for the Haldorans, thats enough.  They have a hard time understanding the concept of god that other races use in their religions.  Technically they don't even have a word for god in their language, a more literal translation of the word they use is "powerfull one", or in the case of the formal word which they use only for the Lords* "eternally strong one".  In this light the belief in their own god-hood is not surprising for the dominant species of a planet.

Originally the Haldorans believed in another god, a powerfull predator called the Jaroke.  Originally the Jaroke hunted Shrakes like the Haldorans, but after the herds were coralled it had to find new prey:  The Haldorans themselves.  Before the Jaroke began attacking Haldoran settlements the two species had hardly seen eachother, so to the Haldorans saw the Jaroke as a legend from their days living in the packs come to life.  This alone didn't create their belief in it as a god, the largest factor in the creation of that belief was that the Jarokre appeared to be immortal.  This was because of two things:  First the Jarokes powerfull muscles and thick skin made it impossible for the Haldorans to kill it even with their primitive tools, and second any Jaroke that died on its own did so far away from the settlements and was completely consumed** within days by scavengers.

Then the Haldorans discovered how to extract metals from ores and quickly replaced their stone axes and knives with tin and bronze ones.  One fatefull day a group of Haldorans was cutting down a tree to repair a section of the corrals fence when a Jaroke attacked.  Most of the Haldorans followed the age old instinct to climb up a tree where the Jaroke couldn't reach them, but one was to slow and was taken into the Jarokes jaws.  The Haldoran clawed at the Jaroke with its graspers, trying to escape, when the Jaroke stumbled.  The Haldoran had still been holding the axe and where the stone axes of the past had barely scratched the skin, the bronze one sliced cleanly through flesh and severed a tendon near one of the Jarokes legs.  The Jaroke bellowed in rage and pain as blood flowed from its wound, and the other Haldorans whatched and understood what it meant.  They had seen it hundreds of times when the Shrakes were butchered, it meant that the Jaroke could be killed.  They fell upon it with their axes and when they returned home with the bodys of both their friend and the Jaroke the fallen Haldoran received a heros funeral followed by celebration that they had finally found a way to kill their old enemy.

Within a generation the Jarokes were hunted to extinction.  In another generation they decided that killing the unkillable killer*** had made them gods.  Within a decade the first Supreme Lord Hadria was crowned and it was decided that he was immortal and that when his body died his soul and name would pass to one his children, usually of the Supreme Lords choosing before death, and they would then rule.  This became the basis of the nation which would one day rule the world and name it Hadria for its Lord.

Thats how the self worship started, next is the Great War which brings this nation to power over the globe.

*This includes Low Lords, Lords, High Lords, and Supreme Lords.
**The Jaroke has a cartillage skeleton so not even bones were left.
***Try saying that five times fast.
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« Reply #9 on: August 11, 2006, 01:36:59 pm »
The Great War and The Blood Waltz

In the history of Haldora there has only been one true war, the Great War.  The Great War lasted three hundred years an is directly responsible for the culture of the modern Haldoran military.

The tribe of Haldora prospered and grew from a village to a city, and as the surrounding villages did the same and joined Haldora, it became a nation.  The nation looked to the horizon and wondered what was on the other side, and sent exploration missions to find out.  They discovered five other nations who had risen in similar ways to the the nation of Haldora, although none of them had come to believe that they were gods.  The nation was faced with a dilemma, these new people were Haldorans, but they did not follow the way of Haldora, could they be considered gods?  The Supreme Lord decided no, but they could if they submitted to the way of Haldora, which basically meant they had to make him their ruler.  The other nations refused and the Supreme Lord declared a holy war to "save the souls of the unbelievers".

The war began with simple technology:  Swords and shields, bows and arrows and simple armor, but ,as is often the case in war, technology advanced quickly on all sides.  The long bow came shortly after the war began, and the crossbow less than two decades later.  Of course none of this helped the nation of Haldora win a war where the enemy outnumbered them five to one, the only reason they had lasted as long as had was because of the amount of time it took for troops and information to travel between nations, but even with that they were steadily losing ground.  Then they discovered explosives.  The first explosives were little more than bright, loud fires that burned out quickly and were usefull only as an intimidation device, but even that was enough to hold off the other nations for a while.  By the end of the first century of war they had advanced the explosives to the point where they could chose between a powerfull explosion or an intense and all consuming flame.  The other nations were beginning to discover explosives as well, but it was too late, the tides of war were turning and the nation of Haldora was still advancing its technology.  Over the next two centuries they advanced from cannons and muskets to grenades and rifles and even simple missiles.  It was during this time that they discovered their ultimate strategy:  The Blood Waltz.

The Blood Waltz is as much a philosophy as it is strategy and in theory can be applied to any battle, from the smallest dual to the largest war, from the simplest skirmish to the most complex space conflict.  It is built around the belief that all conflict has a rhythm to it, thus the name Blood Waltz, and that if you can control that rhythm you can force the enemy into any move you want.  The rhythm is determined by a number of factors, including the number and type of units on the field and in reserve, the terrain, and the types of strategies employed by both sides.  You need not control these factors to control the rhythm, but merely use them to your advantage.  Using the Blood Waltz allowed the nation of Haldora to not only drive back their enemies but, through a clever series of three sided battles, turn them against eachother.  With the advantage of more advaced technology and better strategies the nation of Haldora pushed their enemies to the edge of defeat and with one final development won the war.

The final development that led to victory was a weapon that seemed perfectly suited to Haldorans:  The pistol.  Their six eyes allowed them to sight along the barrel perfectly and made every shot almost perfectly, they could hold one in each of their six graspers, and a few modifications allowed them to reload in a few seconds.  The development of the pistol had been delayed until the end of the war for several reasons, the largest of which were that early pistols were extremely inaccurate and that later more accurate versions were revovers and took to long to reload.  Because of this it took until the development of magazines for the Haldorans to find them usefull in battle.  Once they were developed and implemented in battle the other nations fell and were forced into the Haldoran god-Hood one by one.

Hope you liked the new addition, I won't be here to update again until Monday, but once I'm back I'll post on the events leading up to the present and possibly on their technology.
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Re: Haldoran
« Reply #10 on: August 11, 2006, 03:23:07 pm »
oooh the 'blood waltz'
i like it :)
plus it sounds totaly cool :D
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« Reply #11 on: August 11, 2006, 09:13:34 pm »
These hydra-like creatures are nice.

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« Reply #12 on: August 11, 2006, 11:32:55 pm »
i liked drawing these guys; it was really fun! ;D

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« Reply #13 on: August 12, 2006, 07:52:20 am »
it looks like sombody replaced his hands with cyclops mr zoidberg faces.
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« Reply #14 on: August 12, 2006, 08:51:41 am »
it looks like sombody replaced his hands with cyclops mr zoidberg faces.
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