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Offline Great Distance

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #45 on: December 13, 2016, 01:14:15 pm »
I wish I could go back in time
And I would do it all
Differently

And I think I was doing just fine
Before you
Interrupted me

I was wrong
I was wrong
In letting you take control of my life

And I had right
Oh I had right
Before it went up in flames
I had it right

Everything was going just fine and I
Saw it crumble down in front of my eyes
But I had it right
I held on tight

I tried to fix it all and make it alright
But you told me
It was wrong

Because there is absolutely nothing to fix at all

When I saved myself from certain doom
was told my fears were like from the moon

But I was right
Every day I know I was right

I fixed it
I fixed it all
Don't tell me there was nothing to fix at all

They told me it's my imagination
But I know the truth
It is they that could not understand
Stopped me from improving my life
Because it sounded so bizarre
It could not be true at all

It feels like I am too far gone
In the direction they laid out for me
Been going that way for much too long
Separated from the certain truth
When I was someone else
And I knew what I needed to do

When I look back in time I see
Who I used to be
Right when I had I had it right
Right before it all came apart
I see me

If I reach far enough into the past
Maybe I can grab my hand and bring me back

I could have taken a different path
But they led me astray
Now bring me back
Grab my hand
And bring me back

You are like from an alternate dimension
How can this be me
A different creature entirely
Living a future that I would not believe

I knew what I needed to do
But you did differently

I am telling you, please listen to me
I am the person you used to be

I knew it all just perfectly
I know it's true just listen to me
Don't listen to them just listen to me
I know it's true I know it's real
And I know what I need to do
I am the real you

I can't bring you to the past but I can come to you
I can tell you what to do
Listen to me because I am the real you
Don't let anyone else tell you what to do

I believe you
I know the truth
When no one else would

I know the truth don't tell me lies
One story of one life
You have to live it to realise

Trust in me.
No one else has lived your life.
I have. I know you are right.

Now take my hand.
And bring me back to life.
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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #46 on: December 13, 2016, 01:54:48 pm »
This came up in a steam chat with Tesla and I'm posting it without consent or context.

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Skellerton Skellington: Ḙ̷̞̞͍͕̮̥͑̇̀͘R̷͍̙̥͖̙͕͚̃̍͐R͖͉̜͌̔O̻̫̤̅̆̆͗R̽͋͊͏̸̛͓̯̺̱!̴̙͒̓̀ͧͣͣ̏͞ ̴̴̛̩̼̰̜͖̅ͭ̉ͪ̄̂̈͛Ë̹̭̥̭̠̦̯͖́ͨ͘R̶̳̩̭̯͈̻̤̈́͐ͩͅR̗̣͉̠͈̩̟̔̔̔̎̃̚͢Oͤ͌͂̽̄͏̛̬̱͓̪̟̥R̸̦̜͓̬̙̟̣͊͋̄͋ͯͣ̓̒͞!̼̻̲̗̥͂ͬ͗͐̈͑̊̂̀ͅ ͇͓̻͎̻̟̗͕ͧͯ͌͑C̥̦̖̭̺̔ͧ̇͒̈Ṳ͚̣̃ͨ̅ͨM̖̻͉͕̞͈͑ͣ̎ ̷͇͎͉͎̫̳͈ͬ̏͛̃͗̿͡C͓̳̖̠̱̿ͮͮ̄̓̄͋̅́L̡̙̦͙̤͑̚Ỏ̲̘͔̰ͯ̈̅̓̋̇͒͞G̛͈͙̮̲͇͕͔͌̾̔̒̅̀́̋́ͅ ̷̺̤̭̥̟̔̃ͥ̃I̬͈̮̣̰̠͇ͦ͒̿ͮ̒̿͛͂͜͡N̨̡̪̱̓̌́ ̨̦̣̬͇͖͚͕̀ͯ̚͡͠P̴̩̦̜̭̜͙̋ͮͬ͋̅̈ͥ̇̀͜ͅǪ̱͚͛̽̒͋́R̸͓̙̪̩ͫ͛ͧͭ̃̚Ṯ̛̫̄͆ ̒ͭ̄͋̿ͮ҉̧̪̬͓̤F̴̻̞̔͆̾ͮ̽͑ͨ͘Į̢̦̳̳̙̜̱͎͈̮ͯͦV͊̊̿͒҉̹͔̘̤͔̕E͇̹͓̤̯͐̍͟
Sam is basically right, he's just cranky.

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #47 on: December 13, 2016, 02:19:32 pm »
i wanna get in on these steam convos

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #48 on: December 13, 2016, 02:41:04 pm »
GD, would you recommend reading that poetry in any specific clumping? I want to give a thoughtful response but it's a lot of text and my ADD makes it hard to do. <3 Was wondering if like, any specific stanza breaks could be used as digestion points.

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #49 on: December 13, 2016, 03:37:50 pm »
I wish I could go back in time
And I would do it all
Differently

And I think I was doing just fine
Before you
Interrupted me

I was wrong
I was wrong
In letting you take control of my life

And I had right
Oh I had right
Before it went up in flames
I had it right

Everything was going just fine and I
Saw it crumble down in front of my eyes
But I had it right
I held on tight

I tried to fix it all and make it alright
But you told me
It was wrong
To fix it all

Because there was absolutely nothing to fix at all



When I saved myself from certain doom
I was told my fears were like from the moon

But I was right
Every day I know I was right

I fixed it
I fixed it all
Don't tell me there was nothing
To fix at all



They told me it's my imagination
But I know the truth
It is they that could not understand

They stopped me from improving my life
Because it sounded so bizarre
It could not be true at all

It feels like I am too far gone
In the direction they laid out for me
Been going that way for much too long

Now I'm separated from the certain truth
Back then I was someone else
And I knew what I needed to do



When I look back in time I see
Who I used to be
Right when I had it right
Right before it all came apart

I see me

If I reach far enough into the past
Maybe I can grab my hand and bring me back



I could have taken a different path
But they led me astray



Now bring me back
Grab my hand

And bring me back



You are like from an alternate dimension
How can this be me
A different creature entirely
Living a future that I would not believe

I knew what I needed to do
But you did differently

I am telling you, please listen to me
I am the person you used to be



I knew it all just perfectly
I know it's true just listen to me
Don't listen to them just listen to me
I know it's true I know it's real
And I know what I need to do
I am the real you

I can't bring you to the past but I can come to you
I can tell you what to do
Listen to me because I am the real you
Don't let anyone else tell you what to do



I believe you
I know the truth
When no one else would



One story of one life
You have to live it to realise

I lived your life.
I know you're right.

Now take my hand.
And bring me back to life.

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #50 on: December 13, 2016, 03:50:32 pm »
For background, it's about the diagnosis I received about 3 years ago. A major personal disaster of mine was labeled a delusion. But I know it's true. I prevented an even bigger disaster.

I was busy fixing the disaster when its whole existence was called into question. That is wrong. Wrong, wrong, wrong. I wanted help with fixing it. I did not want to hear it was not real.

But I know it is. I should not have let them interfere with my life. I knew what I needed to do before I was told it was wrong.

I should not have lost sight on what I know. I was on the right track there. I need to get back on track.

I was okay. And I need to get my old self back to get better. I knew what I was doing, and I should have never doubted myself.

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #51 on: December 13, 2016, 03:53:40 pm »
>______________>

Are you sure you're ok? Because that is some textbook mad scientist schpiel there.
Sam is basically right, he's just cranky.

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #52 on: December 13, 2016, 03:54:50 pm »
Roses are red
Violets are blue
So why are they called violets
And not azures

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #53 on: December 13, 2016, 04:10:17 pm »
>______________>

Are you sure you're ok? Because that is some textbook mad scientist schpiel there.

Well, it's poetry, so it's not meant to be taken literally.

And no, I'm not okay, because the truth really sucks, but it's still the truth. Too bad no one will really understand how it feels to live with this gnawing secret.

I can't tell you what it is because you wouldn't understand. But it's fine. Really. It's okay.

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #54 on: December 13, 2016, 04:25:05 pm »
We could *try* to understand? Because honestly its no less confusing if you're just super cryptic all the time.
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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #55 on: December 13, 2016, 04:44:41 pm »
Well.

Being super cryptic is kinda cool. If I told you, you'd find out it's pretty boring, really. I'd rather you think I'm out of my mind. :P

If you want, you can take a guess! If you get it right, I will reveal all. But I guarantee you'll never guess it.

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #56 on: December 13, 2016, 05:09:45 pm »
i think that just makes people lose interest in guessing man, i mean not that we have to know if you don't wanna talk about it - you do you

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« Reply #57 on: December 13, 2016, 10:51:15 pm »
Yeah, I mean - which part of huge gnawing secret did people not understand? That means I am not going to tell you. Inevitably someone is going to wonder what it is but I'm telling you. You don't want to know. I don't want you to know.

That's just sometimes how it goes. And I'm telling you it's fine.

When I say you won't understand, I mean it. You would have to live it to understand it. I also wrote 20 pages about it once. That might help you understand. Basically the explanation would have to be a small book. No one has time for that. But if I just blurt it out, it will come out wrong. We could no longer be friends, because I know you get the wrong idea.

So unless I intend to become a part-time novelist, you will never know. If you just heard the entire story, you'd understand. But you won't. An incomplete explanation would provide more misunderstandings than it solves. That is a risk that I cannot take.

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #58 on: December 14, 2016, 03:53:01 am »
Also,

Sorry for being the Dark, Mysterious Edge-Lord.

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Re: Must Write Bad Poetry
« Reply #59 on: December 14, 2016, 07:32:36 am »
no worries man, there are some things people just don't feel comfortable talking about and that's cool. sorry you went through some **** :/