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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #90 on: July 10, 2010, 12:50:49 am »
I just managed to put my finger on it.  Hydro, you're writing in the present tense.  The general convention for RPs is to do all descriptive text in past tense, like a book.
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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #91 on: July 10, 2010, 02:23:11 am »
I just managed to put my finger on it.  Hydro, you're writing in the present tense.  The general convention for RPs is to do all descriptive text in past tense, like a book.

Ok. I will try using past tense next time. Thanks for the pointers. Like I said I am not use to RPing so any suggestions is greatly appreciated.

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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #92 on: July 10, 2010, 09:33:58 am »
That last post of yours was much better Hydro! :)

Bagder, why would your family bring loads of slaves to a party?

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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #93 on: July 10, 2010, 02:57:32 pm »
When is the game starting?
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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #94 on: July 10, 2010, 03:17:14 pm »
Today or tomorrow.

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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #95 on: July 10, 2010, 03:26:59 pm »
Bagder, why would your family bring loads of slaves to a party?
Alphaeus likes money and takes every chance he gets to sell the slaves. Including parties.
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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #96 on: July 10, 2010, 03:29:16 pm »
Yes because people are totally there to buy slaves. If they want to buy slaves, they'll visit your place. You know, that's why you set up a business. So people come there.

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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #97 on: July 10, 2010, 03:31:19 pm »
Bagder I think you need to do better then that actually in the RP-sense. The post just feels out of place and uninteresting. Also, I will not advise you on your actions in-game, but yes, bringing the slaves seems wierd.
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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #98 on: July 10, 2010, 03:41:23 pm »
Alphaeus is old and senile, all he knows is that there is alcohol and people there. That seems like a great place to sell slaves in his mind.
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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #99 on: July 10, 2010, 05:24:34 pm »
Don't making excuses, badger.

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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #100 on: July 10, 2010, 05:30:03 pm »
Excuses are the waters upon which continents of lies float.
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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #101 on: July 10, 2010, 05:33:16 pm »
Continents don't float  :P

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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #102 on: July 10, 2010, 06:03:31 pm »
Bagder I am serious, you really have to show that you can RP better then that if you want to be in on this. I give you until tomorrow because that is when the game starts.

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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #103 on: July 10, 2010, 07:13:43 pm »
Dude, I'm still asleep. Whatever I'll fix it.
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Re: Cunae ((Planning and sign-ups)) -Yet another civ game by Huckbuck-
« Reply #104 on: July 11, 2010, 04:12:06 pm »
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