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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #15 on: November 27, 2009, 05:38:03 pm »
Just some ideas for the future, instead of cheaping out with the THWAP bubble, have a quick panel in there of him getting thwapped. Or even use the middle panel, have him saying "Quit your whining! Ju--THWAP"
Otherwise, it doesn't read very well. Like we get the idea alright, but it still comes across as kinda jarring.
Consider the timing. There is a certain degree of finesse needed to carry ideas across, but you can get it. Just be careful that if you do manage to nail that down, you don't use the same basic gag again and again. In that situation a half-decent gag that might have otherwise always been funny would be cast in doubt in the reader's mind. It will retroactively become lame.
It's a toony sort of style too, so you could probably get away with a more extreme injury on the hunter guy's head. Like have a big lump poking from his head or something.

Also, you could try a nonstandard panel layout if you were feeling especially brave.

So how come Guilmon doesn't post these?
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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #16 on: November 27, 2009, 05:40:48 pm »
Thanks for the critique and I seriously do not know. Her excuse is that she would forget to update it regularly, I suppose. That and I have better grammar/formatting skills.

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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #17 on: November 27, 2009, 06:11:18 pm »
It's because I don't have the time to post these up since I'm drawing and experimenting 24-7. And because I sometimes fear someone coming along and crushing my confidence... So I have Darth Grievi reply to everything...And if it makes you all feel better... Gordon WILL be a mute..even if it messes up every comic I had planned so far.... And the original panel did show him getting hit... But I was too lazy to draw it in... And about the damage... Arick doesn't take to damage all that much... X3
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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #18 on: November 28, 2009, 07:28:11 pm »
Testing out Art Styles: Part 1



"I was messing around with a new coloring/ outlining style... Just bored... So I had to think of a little joke to go along with it... So apparently, Alex spiked the plazmids. I lol so hard when I look at this... But any way, just testing and messing, but it ended up getting Jack a little spaced out."

((Note: In case you can't read the text:

Cole: Did you put something in his plasmids again?
Alex: Depends... I forgot to put it in the bees.

According to Guilmon, she plans on doing more of these sort of "style tests". I figured I might as well put them here.))
« Last Edit: November 29, 2009, 07:37:45 pm by Darth Grievi »

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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #19 on: November 28, 2009, 08:21:16 pm »
Interesting... I like it, but the text is a bit hard to read.
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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #20 on: November 28, 2009, 08:27:26 pm »
Just the latest one or on all of them?

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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #21 on: November 28, 2009, 08:28:38 pm »
the newest one.
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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #22 on: November 28, 2009, 08:33:33 pm »
I'll inform her of such. She can't free-hand the text in MS Paint style.

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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #23 on: November 29, 2009, 06:55:22 pm »
Chapter 3: Curse You, Bacteria


"That bacteria also depleted his books smarts and cause occasional lapses in logic... Poor Arick sometimes forget how to breath even... He has passed out before.... But anyway, giving Gordon a three second head start is more like a 10 second one. It also sucks for Gordon that he can't call for help since he's a mute... But anyway! The next comic in the Eclectic series."

((This comic was originally much longer, with a different punch-line, but then Gordon was made mute and threw a monkey-wrench into the entire operation.))
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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #24 on: January 10, 2010, 03:00:18 pm »
Chapter 4: Heere's Jack!


"It's back and going, baby! Now in black and white slightly manga style! Hope you guys enjoy the next entry in the Eclectic story!"

((Brand New style, though I'm not sure if she'll keep the black and white))

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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #25 on: January 11, 2010, 02:51:49 am »
To be honest, I'm not entirely sure what's going on :-\
Also, why are they all missing their pupils? It looks especially weird in the last panel.

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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #26 on: January 12, 2010, 04:19:51 pm »
I'll answer that. =3

1. Sorry that you can't figure out whats going on. *Goes back to add action marks* Basically, Arick((The zombie that you all call a hunter)) is trying to get back at Gordon for hitting him, now that he's had his *three second head start.* He's pouncing him((Like a hunter)) when suddenly Jack((Our favorite dude from Bioshock)) releases the bees to keep an innocent man from getting hurt. Arick glares back, ready to kill his next victim. Then Jack begs for his saftey.

2.It's style. I have a style and I'm sticking with it until I find a better one or one I like better. Ask DG. Shes seen me go through quite a few.
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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #27 on: January 12, 2010, 04:44:52 pm »
Who is SilverKit 1138?

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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #28 on: January 12, 2010, 04:48:47 pm »
That's her username on DeviantArt.

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Re: Eclectic: A Webcomic by Guilmon
« Reply #29 on: January 12, 2010, 04:50:52 pm »
I see,thanks.