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Offline Tesla

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Re: I wrote a story, constructive criticism welcome.
« Reply #1 on: April 08, 2009, 03:52:14 pm »
Hmmm, pretty good but I must say the story is a little... cliche and unoriginal for my taste.
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Re: I wrote a story, constructive criticism welcome.
« Reply #2 on: April 08, 2009, 03:59:42 pm »
You're cliche and unoriginal! You are!

Plus I plan to make it more interesting.
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Re: I wrote a story, constructive criticism welcome.
« Reply #3 on: April 08, 2009, 04:06:45 pm »
How are you going to go about making it more interesting?

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Re: I wrote a story, constructive criticism welcome.
« Reply #4 on: April 08, 2009, 04:46:12 pm »
Part 2 will mainly revolve around what Dill changes... But I usually just improvise as I write so I can't be specific.
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Re: I wrote a story, constructive criticism welcome.
« Reply #5 on: April 08, 2009, 04:50:15 pm »
Try to put a plan of some sort together and mull over it for a while. Your idea can only get better from there.