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Offline Tesla

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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #15 on: January 31, 2009, 02:10:29 pm »
Hey Opera, write more NOW!
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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #16 on: January 31, 2009, 11:05:28 pm »
Should I post them in this thread?

where did you post them originally?

Storytelling section, look under Little Story.
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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #17 on: February 01, 2009, 06:10:34 pm »
alright, here are a few doodles I made when I was thinking up the story...nothing too special...


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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #18 on: February 03, 2009, 07:05:15 pm »
Grammar could use work, but I really enjoyed the story. The idea of other creatures dominating humans seems like a common theme...although I can't remember where I'd read something like that before..

I'm sure you could get it published somewhere..well, I dunno, I'm no writer.

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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #19 on: February 04, 2009, 07:56:53 am »
I still don't get what the robot lion is.
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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #20 on: February 04, 2009, 10:02:56 am »
Grammar could use work, but I really enjoyed the story. The idea of other creatures dominating humans seems like a common theme...although I can't remember where I'd read something like that before..

I'm sure you could get it published somewhere..well, I dunno, I'm no writer.

dammit, and I had 2 or 3 proofreaders  :-\  :D but thank you! I'm sure plenty of other stories have similar themes...

I still don't get what the robot lion is.

well I pretty much imagined it to be like a watchdog, just roaming around the wastelands in case anyone escapes from the camps...that way the nags wouldn't have to really worry about anyone that got away from them...although to be honest, that last part was based on a dream (the majority of the story based on another dream) where I was being chased through an abandoned city by said robot lion (at one point I climbed a wall made of empty aquariums...it was fun)  :D
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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #21 on: February 04, 2009, 01:03:17 pm »
How long did it take to write anyway?
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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #22 on: February 04, 2009, 01:35:20 pm »
well I wrote this as a final for one of my classes, which I knew about since the beginning of the semester, so I had a few months to plan it out/get around to actually writing...after that it probably took me a week or two of actual writing to get my thoughts onto the paper...
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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #23 on: February 04, 2009, 02:09:59 pm »
Did you get a grade for it?

If so, what was it?

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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #24 on: February 04, 2009, 02:13:27 pm »
I emailed it to my professor after the the class was done meeting (they weren't due until the day of the final), so I never got an individual grade for it...B for the class, though  :-\
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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #25 on: February 04, 2009, 04:11:03 pm »
Hmmm, this reminds me of the story I'm currently writing. I can't post it though, considering that my current draft is 35 pages long.  :P
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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #26 on: February 07, 2009, 12:30:40 pm »
Wow, just wow.  :o

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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #27 on: February 07, 2009, 05:02:04 pm »
What? I hope to get it published one day.
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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #28 on: February 08, 2009, 04:50:34 am »
What? I hope to get it published one day.

I was referring to Operaghost's story

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Re: Short story of mine, if anyone wants a read
« Reply #29 on: February 08, 2009, 11:54:33 am »
oh...  :o thank you!
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