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2048-A Serial Story
« on: January 02, 2008, 06:54:12 pm »
Part 1:

At 10:00 PM, June 3 of 2048, the scientist put some carbon into the jar.  He then put the nanobot in.  The scientist quickly screwed on the lid.  The nanobot quickly sucked in one molecule of the chemical.  It sucked in another one, and another one, until, within 5 seconds, it created a new nanobot.  They consumed the carbon together, and soon there were 4 nanobots.  Within 1 minute, there were more than 4000 nanobots.  There was a little bit of metal at the bottom of the tank, dead nanobots, and about an eighth of the nanobots could get a little energy from this as well.  About one hundredth of these, about 5, actually began to get one third of their energy from the metal at the bottom.  These reproduced, and soon a good portion of the nanobots could get one third of their energy from the nanobot corpses.  Within five minutes of the start, some of them could even get one half of their energy from the corpses, and within ten minutes they could get all their energy from this source.  The nanobots still getting energy from the carbon ate away at the last of the carbon, and began a mass dying.  At first, it was a feast for the metal-eating ones, as they ate the corpses.  Some weak and dying chemical-eaters could be eaten as easily as the corpses for some, and soon it became a common behavior.  The scientist dropped in some more carbon, and then went to bed.   Now the chemical-eaters were strong again, but by the fifteen minute mark the metal-eaters could eat the chemical-eaters, even the strong and healthy ones.  Very few of the metal-eaters were strong enough to also eat metal-eaters, and they became top-predators by the sixteenth minute mark.  The metal-eaters had to escape from the top-predators, so they hid by making tiny burrows in the glass.  At first, they only could eat tiny bits of the glass, and still had to leave to hunt chemical-eaters.  Soon, however, they were replacing the chemical-eaters with the jar’s glass.  By the eighteen minute mark, they only burrowed, and did not need to leave for chemical-eaters, becoming glass-diggers.  By the nineteenth minute mark, the top-predators had driven the metal-eaters to extinction, and by the twentieth minute mark, the chemical eaters were extinct too.  The top-predators went extinct from lack of food.  The glass-diggers were like a grey plaque.  They spread over the entire glass, rotting away at it.  Slowly, the previously 1-inch thick glass wavered away, and by the twentieth minute mark, it was only 7/8 of an inch.  By the 21-minute-mark, it was only 11/16 thick.  By the 22-minute mark, the glass was only 7/16 thick.  By the 23-minute mark, the glass was only 1/8 of an inch.  By the 24-minute mark, the glass was gone.  The glass-diggers quickly spread to the glass table that the jar was on, and eliminated it by the 30-minute mark.  They quickly re-gained their metal-eating ability, as tiny bits of the remnants of the code to eat metal drifted up, and they ate at the metal walls by the 32-minute mark.  They completely covered the ceiling, walls, and floor, and some began to twist over the metal bed legs and frame by the thirty three-minute mark.  They found their way to the scientist, and, at this new food source, quickly regained their carbon-eating code as well, and they dissolved the scientist before the thirty five-minute mark.  All this switching of food-souces had allowed the nanobots to eat more than one food.  They could now eat glass, metal, and carbon.  Now, these nanobots that could eat glass, metal, and carbon swarmed into the main nanobot swarm, eating all the mere metal-eating nanobots by the forty-minute mark.  They dissolved the walls now, and they made passages through the entire building.  They made holes when they got next to the next room.  This room had several scientists sleeping, several glass vials, and many, many metal things such as paper clips, computers, wires, etc.  The nanobots swarmed through the room, dissolving everything by the forty five-minute mark.  They spread through the building, making holes in every room, dissolving everything.  They ate at the walls, combining rooms, combining floors, and soon the building had no internal walls, floors, or ceilings, by the 50-minute mark. The nanobots proceeded to eat away very quickly at the external walls, floors, and ceilings, until the building was gone at the hour mark.  They swept through the Mojave Desert, developing the other ability to now eat sand.  They also ate the desert animals, and any vehicles that they caught going by.  They soon swept through much of Nevada.  They took over many big cities in Nevada, including Las Vegas, in secret, ambushing the city, by the one day mark.  They ate everything in the cities, and few, cryptic hints were dropped, via people who were already on the Internet or telephone, as to what had happened.  The Government was not even aware of the lab’s failure in the first place, as it was a private laboratory.  Using many hints, including descriptions of “monstrous smoke”, the government pieced together what must have happened.  But it was too late.  The nanobots quickly took over Nevada completely, and began moving to California, Oregon, Idaho, Utah, and Arizona.  More hints were dropped to the government what was happening with each city it ate.  Soon, they spread to Washington, New Mexico, Montana, Wyoming, and Colorado by the 2-days mark.  The United States Government had to take action.  First, they tried to use every weapon avaliable.  They used their nuclear bombs, but a fraction of the nanobots could survive each successively stronger impact, thus adapting nuclear resistance, and they quickly regained their territory.  Second, they made NASA make one hundred large spaceships and send them to England.  Evacuation began, to the spaceships in England, though only 50 people could fit on each large ship, so only 5000 people would be evacuated  The Nanobots began spreading through the Canadian border, and then to Texas, Oklahoma, Kansas, Nebraska, and South and North Dakota, by the 3-days mark.  They spread through the Mexican border, and to Lousiana, Arkansas, Missouri, Iowa, and Minnesota, by the 4-days mark.  NASA finished making the ships and sent them to England with evacuated people.  The ships were sent into orbit, awaiting directions on where to go.  Mexico was completely taken over, and New England was all that was left of the 48 contiguous states.  Canada was near taken over, with only some of the Eastern parts left.  Alaska was taken over.  The 5-days mark had been reached.  NASA made 400 more large ships and sent them as well, meaning that 25000 people would be evacuated.  These ships were sent into orbit.  Washington DC was the last large city left in America, and the President was evacuated to the next 500 ships being made in England.  When these 500 ships reached orbit, there were a total of 1000 ships, and 50000 people, in space.  The Nanobots took over Canada, and most of Central America, by the 6-days mark.  The Nanobots had to cross a brief distance over the Panama Canal.  Many were shortcircuited.  Some of the ones that were not went to South America, but some of them stayed in the ocean.  South America had been taken over by the 10 days-mark.  The Ocean-dwellers were filling up the Pacific and Atlantic oceans.  Some got to Africa, and others got to Japan.  Taking over Africa happened by the 2 weeks-mark.  Taking over Asia happend by the 18 days-mark.  Europe was taken over by the three weeks-mark.  The world’s oceans were completely taken over by the 25-days mark, and Antartica by the 4 4 weeks-mark.  By the 1-month (31-day) mark, the water-level was depleting fast as the Nanobots were quickly consuming it.  Most mountains had been consumed already.  By the 5-week mark,  the oceans were gone, transformed into a large metal basin of dead ocean-dwellers.  Some Land-dwellers went into the basin and began eating at the metal.  The metal was gone by the 40 day-mark.  By the 6 week-mark, the Earth’s air was nearly gone.  By the 45 day-mark, the Earth’s air was gone, leaving a planet uninhabitable to life.  By the 7 week-mark, only Earth’s core was left.  As the Earth’s core dissappeared, some Nanobots got tiny bits of their energy from space dust.  The 1000 ships left for Mars.  Each one started a colony, though the ship was kept in case they would need it again.  They would.  The Nanobots that could eat space dust gave birth to nanobots that could get the majority of their energy from space dust.  These gave birth to Nanobots that could, in fact, get all their energy from space dust.  As the core-eaters ate away at the core, the core eventually was gone, by the 8-week mark, killing the core-eaters.  The dust-eaters, on the other hand, were more successful.  They spread through space, eating asteroids when found, but usually simply eating space dust.  The dust-eaters got to The Moon by the 2-month mark, and consumed it by the 10 week mark.  They then spread out to Venus by the 72 day-mark, and consumed it by the 75-day mark.  By the 76-day mark they had gotten to Mercury, and it had been consumed by the 78-day mark.  At all the places they had spread to, massive belts were formed of nanobots, consuming any space dust in the area, and any asteroids coming to it.  Some nanobots spread, going to Mars by the 79-day mark.  The people, naturally had to move, as Mars was destroyed by the 80-day mark.  The people moved all the way to Jupiter’s moons.  The Nanobots moved to the Asteroid belt by the 80-day mark, consuiming it by the 12-week mark.  The Nanobots then moved in on Jupiter by the 85-day mark, forcing the more then 48000 people (many died of the cold, despite heaters) to leave for Pluto.  The Nanobots then consumed Jupiter by the 88-day mark.  They spread to Uranus and Neptune, and consumed them, by the 3-month mark.  Pluto and the surrounding asteroids were gotten upon and consumed by the 95-day mark, forcing the Humans to move into futher space.  Then, some of the Nanobots closest to the sun moved closer to the sun, and a few survived.  These began living closer to the Sun their entire lives, and reproduced, making many more.  Some of these actually moved closer, and closer, until a few could, in fact, survive excruciatingly close to the sun.  Some moved closer, until they could actually survive next to the sun.  These reproduced, and reproduced, and by the 14-week mark, the sun was surrounded by the Nanobots.  The nanobots actually slowly developed the ability to touch the sun, and then to survive inside the sun.  These extracted lots of energy from the sun, rotting away at the sun like previous planets.  The sun got smaller and smaller, until by the 4-month mark, was gone.  The huge swarm began to sweep across the entire galaxy, getting bigger with each solar system it ate, which was easier due to it’s current size.  Fortunately, it was not growing towards the humans.  The humans were forced to freeze their bodies and send their ships in different directions.  Some, unfortunately, were eaten by the growing swarm quickly, but the majority were luckily pointed in an opposite direction from the growth of the swarm.  These got far, far away, and, using scientists who had not frozen their minds, faster than light speed travel was developed in the next few years, and by the five-year mark, a suitable planet had been found.  The scientists, however had not been able to support all information with the fuel avaliable.  Thus, after the fast travel was developed, all memory was deleted.

Part 2 coming soon!


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Re: 2048-A Serial Story
« Reply #1 on: January 02, 2008, 06:56:32 pm »
OH GOD WHAT TH- AAAAAAHH*crushed under huge wall of text*

Paragraphs dude, seriously.

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Re: 2048-A Serial Story
« Reply #2 on: January 02, 2008, 07:10:56 pm »
What the hell?  I think up nanobots, try to make sure I don't reveal it to the forum, and a few days later, everyone seems to be crazy about them!  Does the god of fads hate me or something?
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Re: 2048-A Serial Story
« Reply #3 on: January 02, 2008, 07:15:27 pm »
Yeah, I wasn't trying to say that you guys were stealing my ideas, it's just uncanny that three people on the forum all decide to apply the concept at once.  Perhaps its the Michael Crichton thread, or the AI awakes music...
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Re: 2048-A Serial Story
« Reply #4 on: January 02, 2008, 07:21:39 pm »
My 9-pre are essentially a rip-off of the ones in Prey... so yeah, that thread might have had something to do with it, though I was planning on them for a while now.

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Re: 2048-A Serial Story
« Reply #5 on: January 02, 2008, 07:57:01 pm »
I do believe that was a cross between tl;dr and bleeding eye lack of structure.

Either way, I'm sure it needs to be rewritten.

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Re: 2048-A Serial Story
« Reply #6 on: January 02, 2008, 08:00:25 pm »
Anyway, good story  :D
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Re: 2048-A Serial Story
« Reply #7 on: January 02, 2008, 08:32:04 pm »
Why save the president?
The best person ever.  She should have won the Peace Prize.

What? No full control over children? You do realize that some of us have particular plans for those children.

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Re: 2048-A Serial Story
« Reply #8 on: January 03, 2008, 03:36:56 am »
Metal is denser than most of the stuff the nanobots are 'eating'. A nuclear blast is way too extreme for any of the nanobots to survive. If it was a gradual rise of nuclear radiation it would make sense. The nanobots would have to use nuclear fusion to change the other materials to metal and the massive amount of energy that it would give out would quickly overload/fry/vaporize the nanobot doing the fusing. Not to mention that it is an intensely ridiculous leap for such a fusion device to be small enough to fit in a nanobot. It would also take a phenomenal amount of energy to start the fusion

And of course the only way for your cloud of nanobots there to move from planet to planet like that is if the planets were in alignment, which is a very rare event. And you totally forgot about the asteroid belt. And comets. Plus, your nanobots have no form of propulsion in the void of space. And theres the size issue for any sort of propulsion device. Especially with the fusion device packed in there already.

And the original metal eaters in the jar would never have died out since the energy and matter would be constantly recycled. The glass eaters would also not be protected from the 'predators' as there is nothing stopping the predators from following them into their 'burrows'. Only being able to 'eat' carbon would not allow the nanobots to eat the scientist, not to mention that theres no way they could have done so without waking the poor guy.

This is a prime example of Science Fiction not containing any actual Science.

And yeah i know that there is no way i could know that these things are possible, but i only have to be right on one thing for your whole nanobot conglomerate to disappear in a puff of poor writing.

Seriously, take a physical science class (at least) and you would never look at these kinds of stories the same way again.

But do carry on, i'd like to see if you can actually show the tiniest degree of restraint in one of your RPs.

« Last Edit: January 03, 2008, 03:40:34 am by Neoskel »

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Re: 2048-A Serial Story
« Reply #9 on: January 03, 2008, 10:40:00 am »
Although it was interesting, I agree with Neoskel. This is a serious case of science fiction without any trace of science. You only described the nano-bots as 'nano-bots', minuscule robots. Still, apparently they can devour things and process energy from near anything, with no waste products and have a means of aerial propulsion. Also, they must have artificial intelligence and some sort of core memory drive, to function as genetic code. Also, they're evidently made out of some material that is present in pure elements, which makes absolutely no sense at all. They can reproduce themselves from carbon, as well as metal? They 'drink' water? I'm no nano-bot expert, but this is going against the ground rules of science.
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Re: 2048-A Serial Story
« Reply #10 on: January 03, 2008, 01:28:46 pm »
Also, I have two things to say.


To Neoskel, Ionic propulsion could be possible, but only in places where there isn't void.


The nanobots would not be able to survive nuclear blasts, center of the sun (if they are made of any element on the periodic table- Think of the gravity!), and even if they were to take over the solar system, the rest of the galaxy would be safe.  If they could survive distances across vacuum, it will only be as much as the "fuel" they store, and being able to cross such vast distances across vacuum would be preposterous...
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Re: 2048-A Serial Story
« Reply #11 on: January 03, 2008, 05:19:11 pm »
All that stuff aside, please do continue writing this. I'd like to see if theres any sort of actual story here.