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Title: GD's comics
Post by: Great Distance on July 01, 2010, 01:28:52 am
Last year I took an art class that involved making comics. One of the tasks was to make your own comic or comics. If you made just one, it should be at least 10 pages long. Mine ended up being 15 pages. I based it on a character that I planned to make the sidekick in some other comic that I never ended up doing. I thought that the other comic would be too long for this particular assignment, so instead I made a story about Mr. Horkkanen. I can't come up with a good name for the translation at this time, so I'll just use the original Finnish name for now. (Seeing that I made this for school, I of course wrote it in my native language originally.)

I sketched these on A4 paper and then inked them with pens. Made a lot of mistakes and it took me forever to get it done. Towards the end it got easier, though, I think.

(http://i254.photobucket.com/albums/hh107/GD_/Comics/firstcomic1st.jpg)

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Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Flisch on July 01, 2010, 01:38:45 am
Page 14, first two panels: Cutest. Thing. Ever.

Seriously, I enjoyed reading that comic. It's pretty cool.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Person21 on July 01, 2010, 01:46:50 am
I liked it too.

Now you should totally do a sequel. Preferably where they team up to fight crime. >_>
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Gauphastus on July 01, 2010, 03:56:55 am
I enjoyed that. Simple but interesting.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Yokto on July 01, 2010, 04:54:39 am
It is a good introduction and leave someone wanting for more. It has nice art. I think you really pulled off the paneling to. Very easy to follow. I hate when people make confusing panels. This of course extends to the speech, though and monologue bubbles to.

The only thing that might be made different would maybe have a bit more action or conflict that captures readers. That is always a hard part to solve however. Why some put the introduction of characters a bit in to the series in a flashback or smiler. A other thing that could also work to hock reader in a bit is leave a bit more mystery. Of course that only matter if one wants to make a follow up and grab the attrition of the readers form start. Slow starts are not the same as bad starts. ;)
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Lush City on July 01, 2010, 05:52:57 am
Nice Calvin and Hobs-esque musing on the universe. The shifting between cordial and scary face on the Pumpkin man is nice. It's rather tragic, but in a melancholy sort of way; kind of like taking ether. The only thing I would change is their names. I would prefer them to go unnamed for the rest of the run (if there is such a run.) It is a very good and nice comic Mr. Distance.)
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: MetallicDragon on July 01, 2010, 08:38:41 am
That was really good! Great little short story, good art and excellent panel/dialogue construction flow. Nice going!
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Rysworld on July 01, 2010, 08:53:00 am
That comic was really good!

Have you ever thought about doing a webcomic?
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: UFO King on July 01, 2010, 05:00:59 pm
This is splendid! I agree that the only thing I didn't like was the fact that you gave them names at the end. But this would make a good webcomic. And a good comic book.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Inkling on July 01, 2010, 06:34:28 pm
Awesome, GD.  I like how the scarecrow guy keeps going from sympathetic to terrifying.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Skyward on July 01, 2010, 09:08:30 pm
That was very well done!
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Great Distance on July 02, 2010, 05:32:14 am
I agree that the only thing I didn't like was the fact that you gave them names at the end.

Well, I had come up with names for them early in the character designing progress, and I thought it would be a shame to leave them unused. I'm still thinking about what the names should be in the English version, though, if I'm going to use them in the future. I might change them later. Anyway, towards the end of the comic I realised the characters' names hadn't been introduced to the audience yet, so I figured that if they were moving in together, they'd probably want to know each other's names at that point. But perhaps I'm wrong and it would have been cooler if they didn't even know such things as "names" existed or wouldn't have at least cared about such things. After all, they used to be lifeless and most likely nameless objects. I think Viglu, however, would have had a name even before he came to life, seeing that he used to be some child's favourite doll. I'm thinking that the creatures would have had some kind of a pre-conciousness even before they were brought to life, so Viglu might be able to remember what his beloved "master" used to call him. Horkkanen, however, would have come up with his name on his own, probably after he heard other people talking to each other by names. He would think a name would make his existence more acceptable, as if he belonged to this world now that he had a name. Though perhaps I made a mistake phrasing Horkkanen's question as "What is your name?" instead of "Do you have name?", for example. Because if he used to not have a name, it would make more sense that he doesn't automatically assume that everyone has a name.

Anyway, I think that what the names are isn't really as important as the fact they told each other their names, meaning that they were ready to get to know each other more. Flisch suggested that I could have even ended it after Horkkanen's question, before the characters told each other their names.

But it is what it is and I'm not going to change it now. Well, except for maybe the names, to make them sound better for an English audience. If anyone's got any suggestions, that'd be great.

In other news, I have indeed considered continuing this as a webcomic. I have thought quite a bit about the future plotlines, but I'm not sure if I'm ever going to find the time to make such large updates again. We'll see.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Lush City on July 02, 2010, 05:51:27 am
Try to make it this big existentialist humour thing. All black and white and H.G. Wells.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Didero on July 02, 2010, 05:59:21 am
At the risk of repeating everybody else, great comic! Good story, nice art (but that was to be expected from you :))

How long did it take you to make?
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Great Distance on July 02, 2010, 06:13:15 am
Well, it was in the planning stages for about 3 months, during which time I finalised the character designs and practised drawing the characters with different expressions and poses. I also practised drawing the environments somewhat and made a very rough sketch of what each page should look like and what the characters should be saying. After that I started drawing the actual version in pencil, which took me a few of weeks on Christmas vacation. And finally the inking took about a week. And that was me spending the most of each day working on the comic (except in the early planning stages, when I drew mostly on the weekends). So, with a busy school schedule it would take a long while before I could update this comic, if I were to continue it the same way as before.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Flisch on July 02, 2010, 06:46:35 am
I am not entirely sure, if this works as a webcomic. I mean, it looks great as a one-off, but I am unsure if this has potential for more. However, I would be more than glad to be proven wrong. :)
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Yokto on July 02, 2010, 08:38:20 am
Well the good thing is that if is just a one piece comic then it was at least self contained leaving not major questions unanswered.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Great Distance on July 02, 2010, 08:47:28 am
Except how some random objects would suddenly turn alive, of course.

Which is something I would plan to at some point answer if I decided to continue the comic.

Some other questions I've been thinking about are what actually happened to the family that lived in that house, and how would these two survive in the real world if they ever had to start dealing with humans, and if there are others like them. You know, stuff like that.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Yokto on July 02, 2010, 09:46:29 am
Some other questions I've been thinking about are what actually happened to the family that lived in that house...

They all when insane. Ended up in a Asylum. Very sad story.  :'(
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: gec05 on July 02, 2010, 09:48:17 am
Well they had to have been involved in some form of occult for these characters to be "alive."
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Yokto on July 02, 2010, 10:55:07 am
Yeah. They where messing with dark rituals and eldritch deities of undescribable nature just for the fun of it. Was not so fun when it turned a bit to real form the.

Darn GD! You have a sick mind!
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Lush City on July 02, 2010, 04:03:59 pm
Wow. One comic and the Epileptic Trees are already stating to sprout. You must be really good. ;D
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Krakow Sam on July 02, 2010, 04:59:07 pm
You're both wrong, they came alive because of government experiments with nanomachines!

*Deedly Deedly*

COLONEL!
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Lush City on July 02, 2010, 05:48:17 pm
They're Time Lords!
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: gec05 on July 02, 2010, 05:50:11 pm
Hey GD. Don't listen to any of these guys, including me.

You don't have to explain it if you don't wan to.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Yokto on July 02, 2010, 05:53:32 pm
She do not need to explain it! It is all so clear! Just read the comic! Is not like we are speculating or anything! It is all there in the comic!
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Flisch on July 03, 2010, 03:52:10 pm
Hey GD. Don't listen to any of these guys, including me.
Did you seriously think she was even considering it? I mean, this is the internet. :P
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Yokto on July 03, 2010, 05:46:37 pm
Hey GD. Don't listen to any of these guys, including me.
Did you seriously think she was even considering it? I mean, this is the internet. :P

What? Your telling me this is not my house?!?
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: gec05 on July 03, 2010, 05:48:35 pm
And you have a terrible sense of housekeeping Yokto.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Yuu on July 03, 2010, 09:51:15 pm
 :'(

11/10


They may not find their original masters, but at least they have each other. :) And who's to say they might not meet another "animated" being, eh?

Who knows? Maybe, eventually, they might form one big happy family of their own kind, and then some humans. ;)


Loved it GD, and I wouldn't be surprised if the others feel the same! :)
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Krakow Sam on July 04, 2010, 03:28:01 am
Yeah, and then maybe they'll move in with a bunch of giggling well-endowed schoolgirls, and they'll find an ancient cache of giant robots in the basement and use them to fight ghosts!
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Flisch on July 04, 2010, 05:01:09 am
I'm glad Sam doesn't make webcomics.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Yuu on July 05, 2010, 04:35:40 am
I'm saddened by the fact that he apparently doesn't.  D :
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Huckbuck on July 06, 2010, 06:24:36 am
I liked it quite a lot, though the ending somehow feels kinda hasty and anticlimatic.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Great Distance on January 24, 2015, 05:00:18 am
Bet you thought I'd never make another comic again!

https://helenetremula.wordpress.com/

Read on as Helene gives you terrible social advice.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Inkling on January 24, 2015, 10:31:15 am
I don't know what you're talking about this all seems like sound advice to me.
Title: Re: GD's comics
Post by: Slinky on January 24, 2015, 11:42:13 am
"Frog Mail" is definitely one of my favorites so far.