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Title: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 02, 2010, 04:47:13 pm
Voyage of the Sidereal Hour
-An Experiment in Galactic Travel-

Voyage of the Sidereal Hour (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17260.0) - Information Station (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg791811#msg791811)


Here we are, the first test of the unified RP community. Let's start off with some general info! First and foremost, you can read our guidelines here (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17191.msg791537#msg791537). For the time being things are going to be in a bit of disarray but it'll be fine during this testing period. Should this RP prove successful, we'll continue it! Right now though, all we have to worry about is getting some character bios up! Just fill out the following form and you'll be ready to play once things start! We will need a...

Name:
Age:
Species: (Also include a short description of your character's appearance - pictures welcome!)
Bio:

As far as your species is concerned, feel free to bring over one of your old creatures or start a whole new one if that's your idea. The thing with preexisting creatures is that they're starting off with a blank slate. As well, it isn't required that you write up an entire history of the species up front. In fact, it might be better if you didn't. Play the character first and develop some insights... keep the rest of us in suspense as to why your creature is the way it is. Finally, on the topic of humans... there are humans! They're just another species out there to play as, if you feel inclined to do so. The one thing I was advised to make clear though was that we don't mention Earth. It's been lost for years or something, I dunno. Just avoid it.

We'll do character bios for the next couple days and I'll throw a basic outline of the story up for everyone to familiarize themselves with. A person to play the antagonist's role will be selected in the coming days. If there are any questions feel free to ask them in this topic. Otherwise, remember that we're all working together on this so keep it respectful and keep it clean! Move out!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 02, 2010, 04:52:13 pm
Voyage of the Sidereal Hour - Information Station


The Story
Prologue (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17260.msg791810#msg791810)
Arc I - Of Orbs and Octane (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17260.msg792281#msg792281) - Summary
Arc II - Resurgence (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17260.msg797345#msg797345) - Summary

Sidereal Hour Lore (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg791827#msg791827)

Voyage of the Perihelion (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17258.0) - Information Station (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17257.msg791653#msg791653)
Voyage of the Sidereal Hour (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17260.0) - Information Station


The Primary Characters
art_is_a_mathform: Obfuscated Beneficence (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg798011#msg798011)
Darth Grievi: Inya Olus (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg791817#msg791817)*
Dr.Octagonapus: Irkkuf (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg791819#msg791819)*
Flisch: Kean Fost (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg792615#msg792615)*
Gec: Keel (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg797857#msg797857)
Inkling: Yas Colvero (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg792695#msg792695)*
Kitkat: Khalendin Veriames Laokkhal (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg792187#msg792187)*
Krakow Sam: ADVISOR (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg791834#msg791834)*, Dapplings of Heliotrope (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg797444#msg797444)
Lush City: Dubhglas Hay (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg792133#msg792133)*
Martyk: Terik Dern (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg791949#msg791949)*
MetallicDragon: Isaak Turend (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg797753#msg797753)
PatMan33: Zori (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg791908#msg791908)*, Asglot (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg794850#msg794850)
SimplyNecro: R5 (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg791875#msg791875)*

The Secondary Characters
-None-

Inactive Characters
-None-

Key
* Asterisks denote characters that were created when the RP started, be warned, they may have a lot of back story.
Crosses denote a character that is currently not playing a major role in the story; this can include, but is not limited to: user inactivity, that character's death, or the character's creator turning that character into an NPC.
x The 'x' denotes a character that has not had an impact on the story due to a player dropping out or being inactive.
M An 'M' denotes a character that has minions, and if you click on the 'M' you will be taken to a description of those minions.



Other Things...
Villain Slots
Arc I - PatMan33
Arc II - Darth Grievi
Arc III - OPEN

Vote Results (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg791814#msg791814)


News and Updates
6/2/10
Got the RP topic up and running. The game will start in a few days!


Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 02, 2010, 04:55:57 pm
Vote Results
Return to Information Station (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg791811#msg791811)

Vote I - 6/2/10 - Who do you want for a villain?
Darth Grievi - 5 (31.3%)
PatMan33 - 11 (68.8%)

Total Voters: 16

Vote II - 6/25/10 -  YES or NO - Should Lush City be removed from the Voyage of the Sidereal Hour RP?
      YES or NO - Should Lush City be removed from the Voyage of the Sidereal Hour RP?
YES    - 6 (75%)
NO    - 2 (25%)

Total Voters: 8

VOTE PUT ON HOLD - Offender given a second chance to show improvement.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 02, 2010, 04:58:05 pm
Well this one starts with three people anyway, so it needs four or five more people.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on June 02, 2010, 05:00:14 pm
Name: Inya Olus
Role: Token shapeshifter / diplomat
Age: 219 (approximately 30 in "human years")
Species: Angalesh

Angalesh are a near-extinct race of shapeshifters, capable of mimicking any organic lifeform, as well as creating new forms for themselves based on efficiency and personal taste. They are able to preform this feat by altering their genetic code and rapidly growing new cells with the modified genes while equally rapidly decomposing the old cells. Due to this, they tend to have very energetic metabolisms, and endurance is always something of an issue for them, though they can at least partially overcome this with age and training. Because they are shapeshifters, they have no set appearance, and even a single individual may not look the same from one day to the next.

They were a fairly large figure in galactic politics until relatively recently. A stray ship on a scouting mission happened to stumble across the Angalesh homeworld. Since the race was not in any database, the Angalesh took it upon themselves to welcome the newcomers to the galactic community. Unfortunately, the moment the scouts learned that the diplomats were shapeshifters, they immediately opened fire and killed the diplomats on board, before promptly calling in the rest of the fleet, waiting just outside the system, to begin orbitally bombarding the planet with anti-matter charges. Evacuations began immediately, but only about 3,000 Angalesh escaped both the planet and the attacks of the alien fleet. Who the species was that committed the genocide remains a mystery, as they have not been heard from since, nor has any existing government stepped up and taken responsibility.


Bio: Inya, even before the genocide that nearly wiped out her people, had been a renowned diplomat, utilizing her skills and abilities to successfully pull off countless first contacts. She was assigned to the Sidereal Hour for the obvious reason that, should any new species be encountered, she would take over negotiations, or at least act as a representative. She tends to be quiet and reserved, but can show almost frightening passion when called upon. If she deems it necessary, she will be as brutal as any warrior-race in order to ensure that whoever she's representing doesn't get blown out of the sky. Unusually for an Angalesh, she will sometimes take this into the realm of "aggressive negotiations," which usually involves the other diplomat getting his ass handed to him.

In what she considers her "default form," Inya is a vaguely mammalian, quadrupedal centauroid. She typically has four arms, though this number may change at any given moment. Her face is framed by three eyestalks and a pair of large, bat-like ears, and her mouth possesses a small, usually useless trunk. In all cases, however, no matter her appearance, she is always wearing a set of ash-grey robes, which seem to be able to adapt to her many changes in form.


(http://i192.photobucket.com/albums/z83/Darth_Grievi/Spore/Creatures/AngaleshScale.png)

((Its not totally accurate, but it was the only thing I had on hand at the moment.))
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on June 02, 2010, 05:02:26 pm
Name: Irkkuf
Age: 20 Galfibri years (5 human years)
Species: Gribarif

The Gribarif are a race of crablike, silicon-based creatures from the planet Galfibri. The planet's rotation being quite fast, the creatures there have had to adapt to a life of high winds and heavy waves. Most mobile life lives underground or in the oceans, whereas the life on the mostly desert land area is immobile. http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj310/StickBomber/Gribarif.jpg
(Warning: large image) They feed mainly on the small creatures that swim around them. It is to be noted that they occasionally venture onto land for food. When doing this, their immense weight becomes not a liability, but an advantage. With this adaptation, they can move freely on land without falling prey to the winds. Eventually, they built small cities in the shallows using stones gathered from land. This was the beginning of their civilization. The cities were built because a new predator species had arisen in the oceans, much larger than them. However, it could not enter water shallower than 300 feet deep. The cities were at only about 150 feet, keeping them safe. It was only natural that they would, using materials from the land, learn to tame the great deserts. Inside a ring of mountains, a small group found an oasis. The water was just right for them; not too fresh, not too salty, and far enough from the sea that depth was not an issue. They settled there, and built a great, peaceful civilization. They never grew tired or bored, for their lives were short and filled with purpose. They managed to find, within their wall of mountains, a strange object that had fallen from the sky. Thus began their mission to return this thing, which they thought to be alive, to its home. (It was a scouting drone.) They succeeded, and eventually, they began to expand. It is still unknown which race sent the drone. They have colonized their planet's more stable, but smaller, dual moons and set up a mining station on its closest neighbor, Ckhnilfs. An interesting note: all Gribarif are, by comparison to other species, male. The race that sent the drone to Galfibri is entirely female. This has led to disputes neither would like to talk about these days.

Bio: Irkkuf, being a mostly aquatic being, was not entirely thrilled upon recieving news that he had been selected to go on a mission into space. However, as he got used to his role as a sanitation worker, he became proud of the Sidereal Hour. He also noted that it was a lot easier to clean than the things he had to work with at home. Despite his seemingly innocuous role, he has also been trained extensively, as all Gribarif are, in hand-to-hand combat.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 02, 2010, 05:30:21 pm
Voyage of the Sidereal Hour - Lore


Lore
Advisor's Report - Arc I (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg796586#msg796586)
Corporations Are OUT OF CONTROL (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg796984#msg796984)


Other Stuff

Voyage of the Perihelion (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17258.0) - Information Station (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17257.msg791653#msg791653)
Voyage of the Sidereal Hour (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17260.0) - Information Station (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg791811#msg791811)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Hydromancerx on June 02, 2010, 05:32:40 pm
For the time being, join the RP that most interests you. In a few hours after everyone that wants to move has moved, we're going to divide the remainder of the groups up.

Hmm maybe i will pic the other then ...
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 02, 2010, 05:36:02 pm
It's all up to you, man. But the window to make the decision isn't going to be open forever.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on June 02, 2010, 05:45:40 pm
Name: ADVISOR (Autonomously Determined Virtual Intelligence for problem-Solving, Organisation and Really difficult arithmetic)

Role: Ship's Artificial Intelligence

Model number:  7b2b34

Manufacturer: DiRossi Experimental Technology Concern

Bio: ADVISOR is a supplementary AI assigned to the ship's archives and tech labs with the plainly stated directive of advising crew at their request. ADVISOR is, however a civilian application and has no authority to give advice on military aspects of the ship such as tactical situations. ADVISOR also devotes any spare cycles to mundane shipboard affairs such as crew assignments, refit schedules, debug sweeps and laundry rotas.
ADVISOR is fitted with an adaptive personality core, the stated purpose of which was meant to allow AIs to gradually alter their behavior to become a cohesive part of the crew. The model in question was actually discontinued several years ago, but political forces acting on behalf of DiRossi mandated ADIVSOR be fitted with one as a means of shifting surplus units gathering dust in warehouses.

(http://i111.photobucket.com/albums/n125/Krakowsam/Animated20Gif20Figures20Geometric20.gif)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 02, 2010, 05:53:38 pm
Looks good! The numbers right now are saying about 8 people per game.

Also, I edited the intro for this RP to make it more... personalized. You may be working for a rival company now! :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on June 02, 2010, 06:00:11 pm
We will surely prosper under the sound backing of DiRossi Poly-Concern.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 02, 2010, 08:04:37 pm
Okay, if you haven't seen already I got the player lists done. Both sides are on as even a skill level as I could manage and each has nine players. It's a bit much but we should be able to manage it.

The Perihelion group is as follows: Clarke, Gec, Haseri, Hydro, Neoadept, PatMan33, Razonatair, Tesla, Yossitaru, Yuu
They don't really matter in this topic.

The Sidereal Hour group is as follows: Darth Grievi, Dr.Octagonapus, GroxGlitch, Kitkat, Krakow Sam, Lush City, Martyk, PatMan33, SimplyNecro
If your name is listed and you haven't done so already, copy your bio and paste it here. Then remove the duplicate bio from the Perihelion topic.

I apologize if you didn't end up where you wanted. We had a lot more people jump into this than we expected so we had to do some unorthodox things. Still, I expect both RPs to be fantastic! Two crews working (unknowingly) for two rival companies! FUN! If we keep the story going long enough we may even have to do some crossovers! Anyway, get yourselves situated. We'll do an assessment tomorrow, decide on a person to play the villain in each game, and maybe even open them up! Otherwise, start date is this Friday. :)

Also, if Inkling decides to join us, he'll be the wild card. He's good so try to woo him over to your side. ;)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on June 02, 2010, 08:07:43 pm
Name: R5-D657394 (Though nicknames include but are not limited to: Rust Bucket, Mr. Handy, Bob, and the ever so popular SHUT UP!)

Role: Obnoxious Protocol Droid/Killing Machine in Disguise

Age: Unknown

Species: Advanced Assassination Droid

Starting from the head, R5 has a very streamlined, insectoid appearance; the most notable feature of his head is his single eye, which alternates from a simple white light, to a deep shade of crimson depending on which protocol he is following. Standing a good six feet, R5 looks like a hunched over humanoid with two long arms with three fingered hands and two legs with three clawed toes. His chassis color is dull gray with yellow markings on it.

http://www.primotechnology.com/wp-content/uploads/2007/08/thdate.jpg (Pretty much something to give a good idea to what he looks like until I finish his DOGA model.)

Bio: R5 was created by Rezoid Industries on one of their many secret robotics design facilities. Rezoid was preparing to unveil a brand new line of "handy droids" highly versatile assistance machines capable of a variety of different tasks from Alien relations to small scale engineering. What the public did not know however was that underneath a rather shady section of Rezoid took the new schematics and the new A.I and modified them into a new assassination model.

It was a complete, utter, failure.

The new droids proved to be too intelligent for their own good, always having some form of "glitch" "malfunction" or sometimes attaining some form of self awareness which always resulted in some "accidents" in the form of psychotic rampages. Needless to say the unscrupulous employees and designers soon decided to cut their losses and scrap the project, along with all of the prototype assassin droids.

R5, long having seen this coming after all of the previous units escape attempts decided it was finally his time to get the heck out of there, learning from the mistakes of the others he managed to escape the facility and get off world.

R5 then travelled from world to world, owner to owner, master to master, ending up in the possession of criminals, crime lords, and corrupt politician, and dutifully following his programming, assassinated many…many fleshy targets for them.

Many assassination, mutilated bodies, and at least one Perrachi with post traumatic stress disorder later, R5 realized that certain elements of Rezoid, as well as several other groups where in hot pursuit of him. Accepting his killing spree had a good run, he decided that it was time to slip into the shadows and as luck would have it a certain ship had presented him with the perfect opportunity.

R5 is a quick replacement for the last protocol droid, who was destroyed enroute to the ship by a well timed, but completely coincidental explosion.

Personality: On the outside R5 is rather cheerful, optimistic, and always ready to serve a crew member on the ship, however most of the crew find that if they talk to him for more than five minutes they feel the need to take the nearest firearm and just end their torment there, mainly because the damn trash compactor never shuts up. R5 will ask countless questions upon meeting someone he has not seen before, even if he knows the answer to half of them, giving some crew members the suspicion that droid actually enjoys annoying them. In fact inside, R5 constantly mocks everyone in the ship, but he rarely goes public with these remarks.

As an assassin however, he is a complete sociopathic killer who has no problem killing Xerga, Moon men, Martians, puppies, kittens, or anything that moves really…

As for skills: R5 has proven to be quite the engineer as well as a very effective Alien relations droid, having a good grasp on most of the alien cultures of the species aboard the Sidereal Hour. R5 is also very skilled with many manners of explosives, computer systems, as well as alien autonomy (it’s good to research whether a headshot on a certain species is really a headshot). R5’s armor plating is also notably stronger than that of the “regular” models and if a very good technician was to open him up and take a look at him they would find a very large amount of upgrades and modifications, these, like his skills are things that his model usually do not possess. (Though he would just state that he is a custom model)



Oh yes… I was playing KOTOR II thanks for asking…

If no one likes this I could go with my Core Combine sleeper agent idea.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 02, 2010, 08:15:19 pm
Name: ALikA[CLASSIFIED] (Alika, or Ali suffices)
Age: [UNKNOWN]
Species: [UNKNOWN]
Bio: Alika is a rather mysterious figure. When most lay eyes on him, he seems to be similar to a huge robotic computing structure [(Similar to HAL-9000 or GLaDOS)If it would be acceptible this would be installed into the mainframe systems of the Perihelion], and that indeed he is. However, inside it is contained a much smaller module, a highly variable mass of components capable of transforming shape. Normally this module takes on a shape similar to a human, and, to make others more comforable around it, he will often assume an almost completely human structure, a liquid-metal-like material covering the outside, acting, essentially, as flesh and skin. (Thimk of him looking a bit like Commander Data, but with a metallic skin tone.)

On to his personality. Generally, he is calculating about many thing, often showing little or no emotion. He doesn't even seem to quite grasp the concept of emotion, as it was worked out of him long ago after[ERROR: INFORMATION CLASSIFIED]. That's another thing, when anyone tries to ask him anything, he will often spit out a sort of error code and move on like it never happened. No one knows exactly why this is, but it may have to do with his heritage. it's impossible to find ANYTHING about any of his activities farther than 100 years into the past, and there is evidence of him being thousands, if not hundreds of thousands, of years old. He doesn't even seem to know, or at least, doesn't want to disgorge any of that information. Anyway, he is often seen as unapproachable by most, but can be quite nice, if a bit lacking in terms of emotion. He serves as Engineering and Helm officer, as he is particularly educated in those categories.

How exactly do you get pictures to display to the side like you guys did?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 02, 2010, 08:18:05 pm
They set up the post with a table. If you want to try it, quote one of their posts and just swap out their information and picture with your own information and picture.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 02, 2010, 09:34:51 pm
Name: Hezorifo "Zori" Sseh

Age: 4

Species: Faiclori

Zori is in the early years of her Sta'peggrri years, having mutated out of her Sta'morza stage four years ago. It is the third stage of her life and she has been gifted with a beautiful pair of wings that allow her to fly at will, but only for short periods of time. She's like any other Faiclori in their third stage and has the boosted ego to prove it. Taking into account her past mutations, Zori has accumulated about 120 years of memories.

Bio: Zori considers herself very competent at the game of life. She has, so far, never failed to mutate to the next stage and has been able to trigger her mutations precisely on schedule. Her first mutation was at 40 years. Her second mutation was 80 years later. Exactly as the scholars say they should be. And if all goes well, she will be able to undergo her third mutation in 96 years. Zori is well aware that she needs to be careful though. Such high and mighty thinking leads only to failure. She used to work as a middle manager in an aid agency, helping to get shipments of medicine and food to the most desolate places in the galaxy. Since her mutation; however, she has decided to take it even further by going to the less-fortunate planets and colonies and adding a personal touch. It was this attitude that attracted the DiRossi Experimental Science Concern. They were intrigued by Zori's optimism and thought it a positive addition to the crew, especially seeing as the Faiclori are generally liked by most of the other galactic races. Zori was quick to accept the offer.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on June 03, 2010, 05:19:22 am
As the count stands, we seem to have two shapeshifters and three robots/computers. You don't think you could make something a little more... normal do you Kitkat?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 03, 2010, 06:08:12 am
Yeah, I noticed that too.



Name: Terik Dern
Role: Overzealous Security Officer
Age: 67
Species: Kratair
Terik stands at an intimidating height of 8'7", with the sleek build characteristic of his species.  He has the grizzled look of one who knows combat, bearing the scars of fights long past.

Even during calm periods, he still wears the protective body armor of the security team, a sidearm at his side.

Bio:
As with many of his race, Terik served a with the Kratairian military when he came of age, quickly discovering that he had a knack for leadership, tactics, and hurting people.  Before long he grew tired of the routine life of a soldier however, and opted to make his own way as a mercanary.

It was during this time that he really shone, developing his skill, honing his instinct, and gaining a reputation of doing whatever it takes to get the job done.  As he grew older though, the freelance jobs became harder to come by, despite no decrease in his skill.  He was forced to seek more steady employment if he wanted to continue doing what he loved.

How exactly he gained the position of Chief Security Officer on the Perihelion is not entirely known.  It could be because of his renowned skill, or his commitment to always seeing a mission completed to its end.  He is, however, a bit of a loose cannon.  He is likley to snap at any event, regardless of how small, and carry out his job quickly and efficiently.  He is not someone you want to be on the bad side of.


(http://img124.imageshack.us/img124/9117/kratairgec.png)
(http://img155.imageshack.us/img155/7950/kratairprofile.jpg)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 03, 2010, 11:08:11 am
Villain poll is up! Vote on the person you'd like to see as villain. Once we do this (should only take a few hours) we can start! :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on June 03, 2010, 11:12:19 am
Hmmmmmmm... thats a tough choice
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 03, 2010, 03:14:25 pm
As the count stands, we seem to have two shapeshifters and three robots/computers. You don't think you could make something a little more... normal do you Kitkat?
Aww... Well, I suppose if I HAD to I could just make him a normal alien. He actually isn't a computer, just so you know, just a disembodied alien.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 03, 2010, 06:03:27 pm
Right, it looks like we're good to go on this one. I'll finalize my plans and we can start this weekend.


**EDIT**
Also, Lush and Grox, you're both failing the first test. Get your bios sorted out.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on June 04, 2010, 05:35:05 am
As the count stands, we seem to have two shapeshifters and three robots/computers. You don't think you could make something a little more... normal do you Kitkat?
Aww... Well, I suppose if I HAD to I could just make him a normal alien. He actually isn't a computer, just so you know, just a disembodied alien.

You don't HAVE to, but it would be better for the RP of you did.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on June 04, 2010, 08:54:05 am
**EDIT**
Also, Lush and Grox, you're both failing the first test. Get your bios sorted out.

The way I see it, they are clearly protesting being forcibly moved.
Although, I moved on my own, why do they want to stick to the Perihelion thread if they know they've been moved.
The trick is not to hate Razonatair back. The trick is to strive constantly to earn his respect. Only then can you be above the insults.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on June 04, 2010, 09:00:06 am
That or they just have not had a chance to move their bios here yet. Or they both dropped out (hopefully not).
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 04, 2010, 10:54:29 am
We have mods for a reason. Krakow has the capability to modify one of their posts in this thread to contain the bio, then delete the bios in the other thread.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 04, 2010, 12:05:17 pm
Name: Dubhglas Hay
Age:23
Species: Phaí (Efae)
Bio: Hay was born and raised on Myrinoi, a colony with deep Rhinic roots, like all Myrinoi natives (the Phaí), due to genetic augmentation (designed to ease the transport across the sleeper ships) she has an intensely slow metabolism as well as a significantly smaller figure. To aide in travel, she uses an insectoid based hover pack, allowing quick transport across areas, her UT also contains and amplifier, so as to be heard by larger sophonts. As a genetically modified being, she has some stigmas and to counteract this she signed up for the government Enijɔta program, in which the colleted military combat strategies of several species accumulated are directly implanted into the user’s brain. Due to the harshness of this procedure, genetic augmorphs are more useful for it,, and as a result she was let in. She then spent several years working as Special Forces, where her small size worked well for espionage. After a particularly public mission on Plu2 she was resigned to a graveyard shift as Deputy Head of Security for the ship.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on June 04, 2010, 12:40:05 pm
We have mods for a reason. Krakow has the capability to modify one of their posts in this thread to contain the bio, then delete the bios in the other thread.

Anyone can delete their own posts. Don't need a mod for that :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 04, 2010, 01:38:19 pm
Well it wouldn't involve waiting. Anyway, just need grox.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 04, 2010, 09:07:03 pm
Name: Khalendin Veriames Laokkhal (lay-OH-ka-ghal)
Age: 34
Species: Bino
Bio: Khalendin, a young and cocky member of the Bino Star Force, looks and perhaps acts, as would be expected of him. He is rather proud of his captaining of a lead RAF-150 Cosmofortress squadron of the fleet, and often never takes his bomber-jacket and goggles off. Years of patrolling the stars whether off duty or on has given him intricate knowledge of the galaxy, particularly its more unsavory side. He is often full of himself due to this, and even though he has good reason, he sometimes doesn't listen to others. Despite this, he signed up for the Sidereal Hour crew for the opportunity of exploring the galaxy, a pastime he quite loves. He brought with tim a huge pack of maps and textbooks, be them computerized or good old paper. Despite his rough exterior, his study he set up in his quarters is a testament to his being better than people may think.

(I tried drawing a picture, but I'm so out of practice that I finally realized that I can't draw anything resembling a human, besides robots. Basically, I failed epicly in trying to create his picture. Maybe someone could help me? If so, PM me please :) )

EDIT: To relieve confusion, this is my replacement character for my previous one.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 05, 2010, 09:28:35 am
Superlative! Kitkat, you're awesome for doing that even though you didn't have to. You rock! :)

I'm gonna start working on the opening post right now. We'll be playing in a little bit!


**EDIT**
And look at that! We're off and rolling.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 05, 2010, 05:43:31 pm
Gonna double post this to get attention. It's okay, I accept your apology, Pat.

Since we've got some folks already over the time zone hump, I'm not going to move the story forward until tomorrow after everyone has had a chance to make an intro post with their character. It's the weekend so most of us should have the time on hand to do it. If now, don't worry. I don't think anyone will be leaving the ship until at least Monday. Happy hunting!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 06, 2010, 01:07:58 pm
I left my post sorta open so anyone could have ran into Khalendin. If you want, you can respond to it or I'll just have it be some random person.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 06, 2010, 01:19:23 pm
There's always time for some friendly chatter! :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 06, 2010, 02:30:07 pm
It took you almost an hour to write that post, Kitkat?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 06, 2010, 02:31:06 pm
I had to go to the store. >_>
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 06, 2010, 02:32:37 pm
We also don't include those things in our posts, Kitkat, the new reply things. It's like OOC in IC. We do things like "when the annoying smart ass computer decided to declare suchandsuch to be a pilot..."
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 06, 2010, 03:09:29 pm
Awww yeah! OOC in the RP is a cardinal sin, Kitkat! ;D

But your post was fantastic so don't worry one bit. I like how you stuck it to that pesky computer. Just keep the OOC thing in mind in the future.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 06, 2010, 03:46:30 pm
I just couldn't figure out how to incorporate that in normally, since I had the post made before Krakow posted. I just put that in to show that I had to add that later.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 06, 2010, 04:08:42 pm
The simple answer is... change your post. :P

Sometimes you're going to get beaten to the punch. That's part of the fun! Makes it so that things aren't always going to go the way you plan or hope. Regardless, you and everyone else are doing a fine job. Keep up the great work, guys and gal! :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 07, 2010, 11:18:17 am
So, I'm joining the fun. :)

Character Sheet:

Name: Kean Fost
Age: 31
Species: Human
Bio: Kean grew up as a middle-class citizen in a human populated area. He was always fascinated by different languages and thus spent most of his freetime playing with children of other races, much to the disconent of his family.

Later he attended to university to study informatics but rediscovered his love for linguistics when his school merged with another multi-species university. He canceled informatics and continued studying linguistics.

On the Sidereal Hour he is the Deputy Communication Officer or DCO for short. Besides serving as interpreter and mediator he is also responsible for the installation of the software aboard the ship.



IC post will follow soon.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 07, 2010, 11:19:08 am
Wingo!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on June 07, 2010, 01:55:47 pm
R5 and Inya appear to be making good first impressions on each other. Let's hope things stay that way, it could turn out to be a rather unexpected friendship. :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 07, 2010, 02:00:03 pm
Terik is making a less positive first impression on Kean.  I look forward to the situations his attitude might get him into later.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 07, 2010, 02:14:29 pm
Terik is making a less positive first impression on Kean.  I look forward to the situations his attitude might get him into later.
(http://i31.photobucket.com/albums/c390/Flisch/ngbbs4b68c6d78d7e1.jpg)

Just kidding. =P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 07, 2010, 02:17:01 pm
Get your guys in place, the journey begins! Whether you had your character walk down to the Pod Bay or not, when I get back from my business tonight I'm gonna have everyone end up there and send the team down on the planet. :D

**EDIT**
By the way, the Captain is a general use character. Feel free to add details or whatever to him. Or don't! It's up to you. I don't even know what species he is and all that. We should make a game out of his name though. Let's see if we can go the whole RP without giving this guy a proper name. :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 07, 2010, 04:44:46 pm
Lush, are you even trying? Really? At all?

Making her security rounds while the DoS was busy with his paperwork, Hay zipped through the halls. Recalling her training she scouted out, keeping a look out for any suspicious behavior or activity. Seeing a human female, she aproached her and began to strike up a conversation.

Slightly annoyed at the ignorance of the crewwomen, she gave her a slight stinging with a quick jab in the back of the neck, getting her attention.

"Hey!" "A commanding officer just spoke to you, show some respect."

There are zero human females, other than your character, as main characters on the ship. What the hell are you doing? Go talk to someone that matters instead of some idiot NPC you're pulling out of thin air. Communicate with the others. Actually do something.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 07, 2010, 05:01:20 pm
Yeah I'm gonna have to echo that, though maybe with a few softer words. :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 07, 2010, 08:46:21 pm
Indeed.  First of all, you haven't said who you're talking to.  And secondly, you're not a commanding officer to most of the crew.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 07, 2010, 08:53:09 pm
*Activates Wild Card*

(http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh153/Not_Inkling/YasCorvolo.png)
(Many thanks to Gec for the drawing, I'll be sure to pay him back some time)

Name: Yas Colvero
Age: 29
Species: Yessimmee
Bio:
A Brief History of the Yessimmee

The species that would become the Yessimmee first came to the attention of other intelligent life when they were still very primitive, having only just discovered tools and fire.  A more advanced race discovered them, and seeing the potential in the powerful creatures, captured the entire population to turn them into a race of super soldiers.  Through genetic modifications several lines were developed, with the Yessimmee being by far the most successful.  The Yessimmee eventually revolted and threw off control of their masters.  Finally in charge of their future, some returned to their home world to start their own civilization.  But many were not able to move past the lifestyle that was bred into them and took up jobs across space as mercenaries, law enforcement, security, etc.

Yas would fit into this category.  A rather scrawny individaul by Yessimmee standards, he jumped at the chance to travel the galaxy as a member of the Sidereal Hour's security detail and didn't look back.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 07, 2010, 09:12:02 pm
YEAAAAAAH!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on June 08, 2010, 05:52:13 am
"Colvero."
"Shepard."
"Colvero."
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 08, 2010, 09:39:23 am
Aww.  Did my random name generator break again?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 08, 2010, 10:15:17 am
Snap! He is Krogan! :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on June 08, 2010, 10:21:13 am
Aww.  Did my random name generator break again?

No Ink, the background of your race is just essentially identical to the background of the Krogan from the Mass Effect games.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 08, 2010, 10:38:16 am
Not completley, but similar enough.

And this pleases me.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 08, 2010, 12:40:31 pm
Me too!

Shepard.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 08, 2010, 08:29:13 pm
Um, does anyone have any idea what Lush's post was about?  Because I'm at a loss.  The fact that it's rife with made up words doesn't help.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 08, 2010, 08:34:19 pm
I vote immediate removal of Lush on the grounds of bat**** insanity.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 08, 2010, 08:36:18 pm
What! I only used two made up words. Hay was sent with the ground troop clandestinely, and is just now revealing herself at a timr when we she would be needed. Due to her small size and training, she's optimal for stuff like this.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 08, 2010, 08:38:21 pm
My bull **** meter is off the charts. You didn't even use ANY FORMATTING. Is your character talking? Apparently so, but I see absolutely ZERO quotation marks. These -> " " ".
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on June 08, 2010, 08:40:35 pm
Indeed, I'm having a hard time figuring out what you're trying to say, Lush. Are you saying you're still back on the ship? Everyone was "moved" to the pod bay and is expected to be on the away team unless otherwise noted.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 08, 2010, 08:40:59 pm
No formatting? Is the giant frikkin' line separating the narration from the dialog in my imagination?


As the ersatz jarhead talked own the janitor, only to be interrupted by a vocla sting


_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Hey guys... I mean, hey guys! And here I was thinking it would be a waste of time for the DoS to send me in as reserves in case you guys frakked the vulpamancer. This guy's fine, he'll be out for half an hour, but right now I think we need to rocket before any of his buddies show up.
[/quote]



Indeed, I'm having a hard time figuring out what you're trying to say, Lush. Are you saying you're still back on the ship? Everyone was "moved" to the pod bay and is expected to be on the away team unless otherwise noted.


No, if I was back on the ship I wouldn't be talking to everybody. Hay, did go on the way team with everybody, she was just hiding out until a proper situation showed itself (presumably on orders from the DoS)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 08, 2010, 08:42:00 pm
You. Are. Retarded.

We require formatting. That means proper usage of quotation marks to specify speech. Join or get out. This not a democracy when it comes to formatting.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 08, 2010, 08:43:17 pm
And You. Are. An *******.


The use of the Line, is a legitimate Rping technique, I didn't see any rule made against it it. If would have preferred quotes you could have said so, rather than brazenly and immaturely insulting me. (Seriously. "Retarded?" What are you, twelve?)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on June 08, 2010, 08:44:37 pm
We usually do that with just quotation marks. The horizontal line is usually just used for separating two pieces of a post that occur at different times (like a Later that day...) or different places (like a Meanwhile...) since its so drastic.

Raz, hush for a moment. That or be civil about it.

EDIT

Thanks for the clarification, I'd forgotten that your character was tiny. You may want to use the spellcheck feature in the future, and don't worry about feeling rushed. Much of the reason I was confused was probably because of typos.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 08, 2010, 08:45:08 pm
No, FAIL. We do not do lines. We do quotation marks.

And I will not be hushed in the face of such stupidity.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 08, 2010, 08:48:22 pm
We usually do that with just quotation marks. The horizontal line is usually just used for separating two pieces of a post that occur at different times (like a Later that day...) or different places (like a Meanwhile...) since its so drastic.

Raz, hush for a moment. That or be civil about it.

EDIT

Thanks for the clarification, I'd forgotten that your character was tiny. You may want to use the spellcheck feature in the future, and don't worry about feeling rushed. Much of the reason I was confused was probably because of typos.


Typos? Where? I
I'll go over it. And thanks for the understanding, half the reason I mad her that size was so I could pull things like this without breaking continuity or suspension of disbelief.


And Razon, shut it before I report you.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 08, 2010, 08:50:47 pm
You're so scary with your report button! My brittle bones are shakin'. Half the reason you made her that small was so you could bull **** your way around the RP, and maintain your current level of failure. I am done dealing with you. The others can eat you alive, and they will, if you don't stuff it and shape up, ASAP. Either get the time to post properly, or don't post at all and get out.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 08, 2010, 08:52:01 pm
And now I am officially ignoring you.


To the others, I'll go over my pots. I got my comp fixed so I'll be on more from now.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 08, 2010, 08:54:28 pm
What! I only used two made up words.

Erstaz
DoS
Frakked
Vulpamancer

I will give it to you that Erstaz is a real word, though it is german, and we speak english here.

In addition to this, you have a horible habit of using pronouns without a precident informing us of what you're refering to.  Who is "This guy"?  And why is he out?  When did this happen?  When did you say your character was being covert?  Why are they being covert in the first place?  When did you specify your character was small?  As I recall I asked for more information as far as a description goes and you did not provide one.  Granted, I may have missed it.

Lush, think of it this way.  For the formatting of your posts, pretend you're writing a book.  Format it like that.  Or, if you'd like, you can just look at what everyone else is doing as an example.

Quote
The use of the Line, is a legitimate Rping technique, I didn't see any rule made against it it.

This is because we thought it was obvious.  There's also no rule saying that a dog can't play basketball, but that doesn't mean it's a good idea.

And while Raz is an ass, he does have a point.  You need to try a bit harder or we won't let you play anymore.  You have potential, you just need to follow the rules and be a team player.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 08, 2010, 08:59:13 pm
DoS-Director of Security

Ersatz is usable in English,


(see: The Ersatz Elevator)




When Hay said "this guy", she was talking about the armed janitor she just stunned. And Hay was detailed as being small in her Bio. Hay also said that she was being covert as a form of backup. I stated all this information quite clearly. I've seen the line used before if you dont use them here you could've just said so.  I'll modify it for you, you just have to give me a heads-up on these sort of things.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 08, 2010, 09:04:22 pm
So now you're godmoding and stunning another player character?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 08, 2010, 09:05:15 pm
As the erstaz jarhead talked own the janitor, only to be interrupted by a vocla sting


_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Hey guys... I mean, hey guys! And here I was thinking it would be a waste of time for the DoS to send me in as reserves in case you guys frakked the vulpamancer. This guy's fine, he'll be out for half an hour, but right now I think we need to rocket before any of his buddies show up.
I'm afraid this was what induced the Whiskey Foxtrot Tango in the first place. The grammar is completely incorrect, and the copious spelling errors make the whole thing unreadable. What Raz was getting at with the made up words was that fact that NO ONE gets what you meant by "erstaz jarhead" or "vulpamancer" (I mean seriously, WHAT THE HECK?), and not to mention not to many people use "frack" as an expletive normally. You never explained who was "This guy", or what happened in the first place. There was no narration to explain anything, and it all came out of nowhere. Overall, it appears to be a post containing nothing but random bilge (Which you could kindly elaborate on.)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 08, 2010, 09:06:12 pm
Quote
Ersatz is usable in English,

In my 20 years, I have never heard this word used.  Ever.

Quote
armed janitor she just stunned

When did this happen?  Also, God modding.  You can't just take someone else's character out like that.

Quote
Hay also said that she was being covert as a form of backup

Where?  Show me.

Quote
Hay was detailed as being small in her Bio
You're right.  My mistake.


EDIT:
Please don't take this the wrong way.  We're not trying to gang up on you  (Well, Raz is, but most of us aren't).  We're trying to help.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 08, 2010, 09:07:19 pm
That's what I was afraid of.  The armed janitor is ON OUR SIDE, he's one of the crew.  Everyone from the crew is currently covert, under those disguises that make them look like the natives.  If Director of Security means Martyk's character, he was doing a good job leading the team.  And those lines are used very rarely to mark large passage of time or scene change, almost always after a long section of writing.

EDIT:
I don't want you to feel like we're all ganging up on you or anything, but that post is going to require major work before it fits with the rp.  You might want to just delete it and start over.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on June 08, 2010, 09:09:43 pm
Look, all we have to do is go back, edit the post, and we can get on with our lives. You two are expending way too much energy over a simple matter that can easily and quickly be fixed. If the guy can't make any mistakes, how's he going to learn from them?

*sigh* I knew something like this was going to happen eventually...

Also, Lush, who did you down? It sounded like your character knocked out an enemy. As far as I can tell, they haven't arrived yet, and we're just avoiding them.

Nevermind.

As far as the line goes, we do use it, but only when we separate two different pieces of narrative, indicating that we're either talking about a new place or a new time.

A little tip I may add: You seem to be a little minimalistic on your responses. Thoughts, feelings, observations, little motions and gestures, even a simple "a tiny voice whispered, virtually unheard before she realized she hadn't turned on her vocalizer. When she spoke again, she was audible to the rest" really helps things along and makes the story feel more like a story, rather than a "I did this, he did that, then I did this sort of thing", if you get my meaning.

And, yes, I have to agree with Raz that stunning another player character probably wasn't the best choice. A non-paralyzing, but nonetheless painful poke in the neck works fine as a substitute.  :)

EDIT #25: Gah! What a clusterbomb!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 08, 2010, 09:13:13 pm
Quote from: Wikipedia
Ersatz is a German word[1] literally meaning substitute or replacement. Although it is used as an adjective in English, Ersatz can only function in German as a noun on its own, or as a part in compound nouns such as Ersatzteile (spare parts) or Ersatzspieler (substitute player). While the English term often implies that the substitution is of unsatisfactory or inferior quality, this connotation does not necessarily exist in the German context.
I hope this resolves some stuff. It did for me... Kinda... Not really...
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 08, 2010, 09:13:21 pm
Look, all we have to do is go back, edit the post, and we can get on with our lives. You two are expending way too much energy over a simple matter that can easily and quickly be fixed. If the guy can't make any mistakes, how's he going to learn from them?

This isn't about just the post.  This is about fixing a problem so we don't need to go through this every time.  (And I do mean every time.  With every post Lush has made we have had to comment.)  This is an intervention.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 08, 2010, 09:17:25 pm
Quote
Ersatz is usable in English,

In my 20 years, I have never heard this word used.  Ever.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Ersatz_Elevator
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ersatz
http://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/ersatz#English

Quote
armed janitor she just stunned

When did this happen?  Also, God modding.  You can't just take someone else's character out like that.

Just now, the "take out" was just an opening attack, the PC is free to respond. Hay only thinks that he's out. Whether he is or not is up to the PC

Quote
Hay also said that she was being covert as a form of backup



Where?  Show me.

"And here I was thinking it would be a waste of time for the DoS to send me in as reserves"

Quote
Hay was detailed as being small in her Bio
You're right.  My mistake.


EDIT:
Please don't take this the wrong way.  We're not trying to gang up on you  (Well, Raz is, but most of us aren't).  We're trying to help.


Whevs, I'll expand my post, I'm a chronic minimalist, so expect often tweaking until I get size down. These are my first RPs here, so excuse me if it takes a day or so to adjust to the dynamic.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 08, 2010, 09:18:02 pm
Minimalism is distinctly bad for RPs, or generally any form of writing.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 08, 2010, 10:23:52 pm
Your interest in the Sidereal Hour RP is much appreciated, Raz. But please, the players of this game will deal with any issues that come up. You don't need to get yourself worked up over it, we can handle it ourselves.

Onto you, Lush. There's no way I can make this sound good. I like you and want you to succeed but you're just not paying attention. This is the post I read...

As the ersatz jarhead talked own the janitor, only to be interrupted by a vocla sting


_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Hey guys... I mean, hey guys! And here I was thinking it would be a waste of time for the DoS to send me in as reserves in case you guys frakked the vulpamancer. This guy's fine, he'll be out for half an hour, but right now I think we need to rocket before any of his buddies show up.

It's abysmal. You show no sense of the language you're writing it in. Continuity, pacing, and general plot adherence is out the window. There's not even recognition of the patterns that everyone that posted before you followed (no quotes and very little exposition). And worst of all, you've shown no respect for the guidelines that we've spent years working on and more recently, spent a week boiling down into something we can all agree upon. Lush, I have to ask... what have you been doing?

All of your excuses come down to "well you didn't tell me I couldn't do that", or you're taking an extremely literal interpretation of the advice people are giving you. Both are things that I find unacceptable and insulting. You're right, I've also seen a line used to separate speech from exposition. But I haven't seen it once in this RP or any other that I've taken part in here. What makes you think that things suddenly changed? Moreover, you're doing the same sort of thing you've been doing down in the Steampunk RP. Your posts are following their own thread and you've been operating outside of the main story. Yes, your character is with the away team but the way you went about it is taking place on a level entirely removed from everyone else that is playing.

You need to play the same game we're all playing. If you don't, you're not going to be allowed to play. That means using the same formatting styles we all use, using the same language we all use (no made up words), and that means following the same guidelines that the community agreed upon. The RP isn't something you can just phone in. You need to keep up with it and pay attention and work... you need to read every line of every post. And through that work you and everyone else will create something that one of us alone could never do.

I'm going to stop there. I have a solution for you, but I'm not sure how you're going to like it or if you'll accept it (but I hope you do). You answered this question for me a little while ago...

Answer one question for me, Lush. Do you want to learn (and I mean really learn) how to RP?

Yes.

Are you being absolutely honest, and will you accept my help if I give it to you, no matter what?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 08, 2010, 10:37:48 pm
Yes, I edited the post a whiles ago.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 08, 2010, 10:50:19 pm
It's still very difficult to follow and isn't much better than before, unfortunately. And just to nitpick on the acronym for a moment, DoS has a lot of other connotations. I thought it was Denial of Service when I first read it. You need to clarify the meanings of such acronyms before using them in the future. Now, my idea for you is this...

I want you to pull out of every RP you're in right now and do a two-person RP with me. I'll walk you through all the steps you need to take to make a good character and a good post. I will teach you what a good narrative is supposed to look like and even let you take a swing at playing the antagonist if you'd like. The only condition is that you don't play any other RPs until you're done. The process could take a few days if you're really good or it could take a few weeks. Whatever the case, I'm willing to take the time to help you get this stuff right. And when you've reached a level that I deem satisfactory, you can come back and play in the RPs again. It will not be easy and it might not be entirely fun at some points. But if you do it and come out the other side, you're going to be a better RPer for it.

If you want to do it, I'm happy to help you. And if you don't want to do it, that's fine too; however, I can't guarantee how much longer you'll be in the RPs if you refuse.


**EDIT**
And by the way, don't rush into the decision. Sleep on it if you have to.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Cyst on June 08, 2010, 10:54:28 pm
And that is why Pat is the coolest
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 09, 2010, 03:26:57 am
So, do we continue by ignoring Lush's latest post?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on June 09, 2010, 04:43:54 am
YES.

(http://i48.tinypic.com/2js57m.jpg)


Edit: Deleted the post since it didn't get changed all day.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 09, 2010, 01:30:49 pm
Did I mention Yas has four arms?  Because he totally does.  I have a sketch of his race somewhere, I'll try to upload it.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 09, 2010, 09:38:47 pm
Yeah, Khalendin got knocked out by a bolt to the head. He may need some help...
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 09, 2010, 10:26:17 pm
Lush, I haven't heard from you.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 10, 2010, 01:38:50 pm
Just a heads up, guys. I've gotta be away this weekend (leaving Friday). Going to go visit my Mom.

We're off to a great start so I'll be sure to leave you guys with enough so that you can post a bit on Saturday. I'll be back on Sunday to pick things up.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on June 10, 2010, 02:02:32 pm
That works out great; I'll be gone for the weekend too.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 10, 2010, 02:31:17 pm
In that case, why don't we just put the RP on hold for this coming weekend? That way we don't need to worry ourselves with when we should post and what's going on.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 10, 2010, 04:30:55 pm
Works for me too, this weekend is going to be chaos for me starting...

*checks watch*

11 hours ago.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 10, 2010, 05:25:31 pm
On hold? Cool. Left a parting post so I would have a foothold.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 10, 2010, 05:26:58 pm
It's still very difficult to follow and isn't much better than before, unfortunately. And just to nitpick on the acronym for a moment, DoS has a lot of other connotations. I thought it was Denial of Service when I first read it. You need to clarify the meanings of such acronyms before using them in the future. Now, my idea for you is this...

I want you to pull out of every RP you're in right now and do a two-person RP with me. I'll walk you through all the steps you need to take to make a good character and a good post. I will teach you what a good narrative is supposed to look like and even let you take a swing at playing the antagonist if you'd like. The only condition is that you don't play any other RPs until you're done. The process could take a few days if you're really good or it could take a few weeks. Whatever the case, I'm willing to take the time to help you get this stuff right. And when you've reached a level that I deem satisfactory, you can come back and play in the RPs again. It will not be easy and it might not be entirely fun at some points. But if you do it and come out the other side, you're going to be a better RPer for it.

If you want to do it, I'm happy to help you. And if you don't want to do it, that's fine too; however, I can't guarantee how much longer you'll be in the RPs if you refuse.


**EDIT**
And by the way, don't rush into the decision. Sleep on it if you have to.

You never said anything about Pat's offer, Lush.

And that post was done in three minutes. It's still a sloppy job, but at least it's coherent. You've improved, slightly. Still need to try writing more, and longer, instead of making some less than three minute haphazard thing.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 10, 2010, 06:13:35 pm
On hold? Cool. Left a parting post so I would have a foothold.

I'm taking that as a no. Best of luck to you, Lush. I hope it works out.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 11, 2010, 08:52:44 am
Right, this RP is on hold for the weekend. There are no posting obligations. If you want to post, feel free but don't wait around for the narrative to be push forward because it won't be.

Be back Sunday! *hugs*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 11, 2010, 09:27:09 am
I'll miss you Pat.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 15, 2010, 05:11:13 pm
Made it back and managed to do it with... negative 48 hours to spare!

Celebrate good Obama come on! Woo woo first place!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on June 17, 2010, 09:33:13 am
As you guys can tell, Irkkuf does not do well with ambushes.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 17, 2010, 09:44:43 am
Oct, did you read any of the previous posts? Now's not exactly the time to be talking... especially if your character is scared crapless by ambushes. Make sure you are reading everything. Because you just glossed over something that cannot be glossed over.

Start here (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17260.msg793875#msg793875) and read everything to the end. ;)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 17, 2010, 09:46:03 am
Beat me to the punch Pat, but yeah.  Octagon, we are currently in a crashing shuttle.

On the topic of the shuttle, I had a post in mind but I didn't follow through with it because I'm not clear on the description of our shuttle.  How big is this thing?  Are we walking around or seated?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 17, 2010, 09:46:46 am
I dunno... feel free to design the shuttles however you'd like. We can use your description for all future Sidereal Hour shuttles.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on June 17, 2010, 10:15:05 am
Oct, did you read any of the previous posts? Now's not exactly the time to be talking... especially if your character is scared crapless by ambushes. Make sure you are reading everything. Because you just glossed over something that cannot be glossed over.

Start here (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17260.msg793875#msg793875) and read everything to the end. ;)

Oh. Hold up, I'll fix later. Gotta go.

EDIT: Fixed. Maybe.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 17, 2010, 02:09:39 pm
Is the part in the double brackets a signal from the device in his head or just offtopicness?

If it's the latter, you might wanna take it out, if you don't want Pat bite off your head. >_>
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on June 17, 2010, 02:12:38 pm
Dangit. Fixed. Again.
Well, is it good?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 17, 2010, 02:15:37 pm
It's fine but it doesn't do much to acknowledge the post that came before it... which is a semi-important post considering it moves the story forward in a significant way.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on June 17, 2010, 02:18:31 pm
Darn subtle plot advancement...  :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 17, 2010, 02:26:21 pm
You realize ADVISOR is on the ship? It isn't going to be hurt one bit in the crash.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on June 17, 2010, 03:36:02 pm
Yeah, ADVISOR is a computer program running on the Sidereal Hour's systems.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 17, 2010, 06:08:41 pm
Right, well if Dr.Oct is going to be away for a while like this post (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=5685.msg794086#msg794086) says, just ignore his previous post in the RP and keep things rolling.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 17, 2010, 08:00:57 pm
Or, you know, call in Krakow. Cause he's a mod and stuff.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on June 17, 2010, 08:45:19 pm
Do we have any sort of energy shields or advanced armor on us? Or did we just come prepared for Stridurban-level tech?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 17, 2010, 08:55:38 pm
The away team's suits are fairly tough but the high-tech weaponry will probably break through after a shot or two. Don't worry, your characters have an extra layer of plot to help keep them relatively safe. Get creative. ;)

Also maybe you brought something from the armory.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 18, 2010, 06:27:18 am
As I interpreted it, most of the team is only very lightly armed.  Terik, however, as the head of security, is significantly better armed and protected.  I believe I mentioned this earlier.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 18, 2010, 09:48:20 pm
As a fellow security officer Yas has a few fun tricks up his sleeve, too.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on June 19, 2010, 04:43:40 am
Kitkat, you should really pay more attention. The whole party has already found out/ been told that the locals are being supplied with modern technology :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 19, 2010, 06:55:59 am
As a fellow security officer Yas has a few fun tricks up his sleeve, too.

Security 4 life!  :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 19, 2010, 08:42:12 am
...Wait, a ranged stinger?  How does that work, Lush?  Are you shooting poison at them?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 19, 2010, 10:01:59 am
My Energy Stun stinger, it's her primary weapon.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 19, 2010, 10:13:47 am
Huh, this whole time I was thinking it was an organic weapon that was part of her, like a wasp's stinger.

In other news, I updated Yas' profile with an awesome picture from Gec.  I also added a tiny bit more about Yas himself.
http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17259.msg792695#msg792695

I'll just say this on Gec's behalf, don't all go bug him for a drawing.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 19, 2010, 11:01:08 am
My Energy Stun stinger, it's her primary weapon.

Do us a favor and write up some exposition on this weapon. Things like "laser pistol" and "stun gun" are fairly self-explanatory. But this Energy Stun Stinger begs for description to prevent it from becoming a godly weapon.

Also, I'll get a post in after I eat.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on June 20, 2010, 01:34:55 pm
If anyone has a problem with my post I will gladly change it. At the word perch I assumed that the Stridurban in red was exposed enough and visible enough that say a machine or a sniper (or both) could locate him and take the shot.

Also I am not saying no one can notice the fact that the nonviolent protocol droid just picked up a sniper rifle and tried to take someones head off. Though I would rather keep it at the "suspicious" level rather than the "He made the shot I am certain!" level
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 20, 2010, 01:47:58 pm
The post is fine. Since the Stridurban in red is a semi-important character (which you should be able to tell by now) he has some of the same protections that the heroes have. Basically he doesn't die unless I say he dies (as he has plot significance). But you went about dealing with the situation expertly, Necro. :D

As for the shot on the gun, that's a gray area. I don't really mind that you wrote in that it got hit, but some people may have a problem with it. Just be mindful of the player that created the asset. Usually I won't care so feel free to fire away.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 20, 2010, 06:07:08 pm
My Energy Stun stinger, it's her primary weapon.

 "laser pistol" and "stun gun" a


That's it. Think the Teen Titans Bumblebee or The Avengers' Wasp.
And also, is it okay to attack him as long as we allow you to RP the result (he dodges, survives, absorbs it etc.)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 20, 2010, 09:44:08 pm
I don't know Teen Titans or Avengers or whatever so you're going to need to write up YOUR OWN description. You can't rely on preexisting source material.

Otherwise, yes, you can do what you want however you want as long as you give the owner of the character you're attacking control over the result. But don't make it stupid, it has to be logical.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 20, 2010, 10:06:35 pm
A. I'm going to ignore the fact that you dont know about either Teen Titans or the Avengers

and

B. That's why I quoted you, it's basically an electro-stungun.

I'll have to come up with a situation in-game that will result in Hay plausibly explaining it. Maybe next post...
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 20, 2010, 10:11:07 pm
A. I'm going to ignore the fact that you dont know about either Teen Titans or the Avengers

Unacceptable. Explain it or don't use it.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 20, 2010, 10:33:57 pm
I said that I'd explain it in-story when the opportunity presented itself. It wasn't mandated for a weapon description to be in the bio, which leaves in-story exposition as the only method. Now, would you rather have me intrusively describe how my weapon works or wait to do so until it actually serves to advance the plot?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 21, 2010, 04:36:40 am
Yeah seriously, Pat. Who do you think you are? >:(
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 21, 2010, 06:38:06 am
Now, would you rather have me intrusively describe how my weapon works or wait to do so until it actually serves to advance the plot?

OOC thread?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 21, 2010, 09:36:45 am
Now, would you rather have me intrusively describe how my weapon works or wait to do so until it actually serves to advance the plot?

Yes I want you to include a description of the weapon in an OOC post or in your character bio. Since it seems to be some sort of proprietary weapon that only your character has, an amendment to your character bio seems most-logical.

The reason I want you to do this is so we know what Hay's weapon is capable of. It already seems to have two firing modes and who knows what else. You've got to get that capped.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 21, 2010, 12:32:30 pm
It's only one mode; she just put it on Auto, most guns of that type have that, but fine you win I'll type it up quickly.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 21, 2010, 12:49:17 pm
Hey Kids! It's time for a


SIDEREAL SIDEPOST


Hay's Stinger


Hay's Stinger is an artifact of her work in the Enijɔta Program. Acting as an agent bulky energy weapons were loud, obvious and impossible to carry. The stinger was the answer of that. A minute form of a Tesla coil, the Stinger exists as a form fitting wrist band. Despite its size it can deliver a strong electric shock at close range (enough to stun an average sized sophont) or can be fired rapidly from a distance. The Stinger is not a lethal weapon however, and the most it can do is cause an eye to pop out, and maybe fry few mechanical systems , best case scenario. However as hay is more of a stealth fighter, it suits her personality and battle style well.

Weaknesses.

As a fully charged electric coil, water contact on any of its inner systems can be disastrous. A full release of the stored static energy could easily fry someone as small as Hay alive and repeated use in a series could compound this.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 21, 2010, 01:11:17 pm
Phew! You must have typed that really fast. But aside from that and a few more made up words, it looks solid. Thanks for doing that, Lush.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on June 21, 2010, 03:23:34 pm
Fix those damn typos!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 21, 2010, 03:54:48 pm
Fix those damn typos!
Typos?

And I was wondering what language it was written in. >_>
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 21, 2010, 05:18:34 pm
Hey, like you said I did type it pretty rapidly.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 21, 2010, 05:56:16 pm
That's still no excuse, though.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 21, 2010, 06:02:01 pm
I know, it was a joke.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 21, 2010, 06:03:24 pm
You're really not in a position to be cracking jokes about your performance. <_<
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 22, 2010, 02:02:23 am
We just cut through into the main building right? The post was pretty  vague.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 22, 2010, 09:10:52 am
Not at all. If I railroaded the team into the mansion I would have said something to that affect.


**EDIT**
Just wondering... did you even read the post?

Your path to the mansion is clear so feel free to make your way up at your leisure. Try not to dawdle for too long, though.

I think the answer to your question was actually very clear and not that vague at all. You're beginning to wear thin, Lush. Every post seems to bring a new problem or expose another deficiency. You need to shape up.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 22, 2010, 09:29:29 am
Pat, as always, is right.

Also, though this is purley semantics and my personal opinion, you may wish to put more thought into your descriptive verbs.  Hay is miniscule, and therefore it is rather nonsensical to use the word "boomed", which is generally reserved for very loud, large and powerful sounds, which I cannot imagine her making.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 22, 2010, 02:25:26 pm
Name: Asglot el'Irk

Age: 199

Species: Vitraxi

The Vitraxi are a proud race, perceived by many as intelligent and strong. Despite a checkered past and minority status in terms of representation, a Vitraxian has held the position of Galactic Minister more often than not. Some attribute this to their mental prowess, though the Vitraxi are hardly the most intelligent species around. Whereas others say it is because the Vitraxi are strong and virile, despite being relatively weak, comparatively speaking. In the end it comes down the the ability of the common Vitraxi to talk and persuade. They are very good speakers and tend to draw crowds. Plus, it doesn't hurt to have a set of razor sharp claws and enough leg strength to flatten an average human torso with ease.

Bio: Asglot considers himself far-superior to the common criminal... and most other people. As such, he has no problem speaking publicly about his crimes and infrequently appears on nightly news programs and daytime talk shows. His life is as well-documented as they come, which makes the government's inability to capture him particularly infuriating. Asglot was born the son of a Senator and spent much of his childhood surrounded by the movers and shakers of galactic government. The Galactic Senate was his playground and from an early age Asglot had a sense of the sheer scale of his world. He was a smart child and groomed to be a civil servant, maybe even someone that could be Galactic Minister one day. Unfortunately, Asglot's ambition led him in a different direction altogether. As he grew older, kleptomaniacal tendencies began to present themselves and being able to access vast portions of galactic trade and finance didn't do much to help.

His first crime involved the theft of several billion credits worth of stock from the Main Vitraxian Bank. He promptly returned it, having been able to pull off the heist without being caught. Next came a series of increasingly brazen assaults on trading vessels and finally the capture of an entire Faiclori aid flotilla. That last one gained him far-reaching recognition as it was the first time a name had been put to the crimes. It was, of course, done entirely at Asglot's discretion. He wanted to be known far and wide for his deeds and so Orbznak Veldigar was born. Things continued for several decades with each crime being more daring and extravagant than the last. It wasn't until Asglot attempted to take the official seal of the Galactic Minister that he was finally caught. He'd managed to take the GM's private vessel and infiltrate the capital building but a traitor within his own organization meant that a team of armed commandos met him in what was supposed to be the Minister's empty office.

Asglot (Or Criminal #9, according to his processing papers) spent the next few decades in solitary confinement on board a maximum security prison station until escaping in time for his 120th birthday. The means by which Asglot escaped are still debated to this day. Regardless, the time spent in prison had changed the Vitraxian and his crimes became violent. Asglot's triumphant return was marked by the complete destruction of the P'nib homeworld, which crippled the emerging race and pushed them to the brink of extinction. Following that, Asglot began stealing things far bigger than bits, bytes, and shiny vases. Resources such as those found in planetary cores and atmospheres hit the top of his list. Public outrage became so great that plasma extruders were outlawed entirely. Since those days, Asglot has mostly fallen back into the shadows. Nobody is entirely sure why, though some speculate that he was killed in a criminal uprising of sorts. Still, every now and again something valuable goes missing or something important blows up, causing Asglot's name to resurface. Whatever the case, Vitraxi males are known to live for five to seven centuries. So until a body is found, Asglot remains a permanent fixture to the galaxy's most wanted list.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 25, 2010, 04:41:40 am
Pat, as always, is right.

Also, though this is purley semantics and my personal opinion, you may wish to put more thought into your descriptive verbs.  Hay is miniscule, and therefore it is rather nonsensical to use the word "boomed", which is generally reserved for very loud, large and powerful sounds, which I cannot imagine her making.
Due to her size, she has to boom to be heard as audible.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 25, 2010, 10:37:51 am
To her it would be a boom. To the others, not so much. And your most recent post still sucks, majorly.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 25, 2010, 11:22:15 am
Please, PLEASE, REFRAIN from using such gratuitous amounts of meaningless jargon!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 25, 2010, 11:25:34 am
There also three typos and formatting issues, major ones.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 25, 2010, 11:35:19 am
I'm slowly getting the feeling, that Lush is, infact, trolling us...
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 25, 2010, 02:46:53 pm
Indeed. It is bothersome now.

I'd like to initiate a vote to have Lush City removed from the RP. In order to move forward I'll need an active member of this RP to second the motion. If nobody seconds it there will be no vote. Providing someone does second the motion, I'll begin the vote procedure immediately.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 25, 2010, 02:57:20 pm
I think that may be advisable.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 25, 2010, 03:12:37 pm
Right then. Kitkat seconds the motion to remove Lush City from the RP.

This vote will be a simple majority vote. Eligible voters are active members of this RP. If you are not an active member of this RP, you cannot vote. You are asked to observe quietly. Our list of eligible votes includes the following people:

Darth Grievi
Dr.Octagonapus
Flisch
Inkling
Kitkat
Krakow Sam
Martyk
PatMan33
SimplyNecro

There are nine voters which means five votes in either direction will render a decision of either YES or NO. Each member that has been listed gets one vote. Voting will take place up in the thread's vote section; however, you are also asked to post your decision to avoid outside intrusion. When we reach a majority decision the vote will stop, even if some people have not had the chance to give their opinion.

YES or NO - Should Lush City be removed from the Voyage of the Sidereal Hour RP?
This vote has been initiated for the following reasons: poor post quality, poor attention to detail, general rule violations, and failure to act cooperatively with other players.


Should a verdict of NO be handed down, the RP will continue uninterrupted.
Should a verdict of YES be handed down, Lush City will be removed from the RP and it will continue. Lush City will be given a chance to appeal (providing he has someone to sponsor him) but he will be barred from reentry until sufficient proof can be shown that past offenses will not be repeated.

You may now vote. Feel free to include any opinions you feel should be taken into account by your fellow voters. For the duration of the vote it is asked that all parties remain respectful. And remember, if you aren't in this RP, you have no say in this matter and you will remain silent.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on June 25, 2010, 03:24:38 pm
As much as I'd love to give him another chance, I'm going to have to go with "YES".
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 25, 2010, 03:25:44 pm
I'm going to have to vote yes, too.  It seems like every time Lush posts the game grinds to a halt and we have to patch it back together again.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 25, 2010, 03:27:54 pm
We've given Lush more chances than most and have shown a great deal of patience. And yet our advice seems to have fallen on deaf ears. I guess the time just isn't right but hopefully that will change in the future!

YES
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 25, 2010, 04:30:54 pm
I think the worst is that she is actually refusing ours/Pat's suggestions and offers.

-> Yes.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 25, 2010, 07:04:00 pm
I have yet to see what you mean by that Flisch. I kept with the format you chose, I stopped using made-up words and I kept with the flow of the story, I explained the weapon I spell check what exactly have I done wrong?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 25, 2010, 07:07:59 pm
"Righty-o Cap'n" Hay said. "I suppose we'll be using the Bull Formation then?" ((1)) "I hope you make a desiscion quick though, becuse unlesss we have a trap sweepr made out of nanotubes ((2)) I don't think my nickers are going to be the only thing in a twist."((3))

1. What?

2. What.

3. No-one says that anymore.

Anything marked in red has a spelling error.

EDIT: and have you noticed that you're the only one who consistently posts only one an a half lines of dialog?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 25, 2010, 07:18:53 pm
1. Bull Formation, It's a Military tactic first used by Shaka-Zulu

2. Nanotubes. They are really durable; she’s saying that unless we have some kind of indestructible sweeper those traps that I was told about would likely kill us. I was responding to information about the surroundings given by another player, isn't that what I am supposed to do?

3. Hay speaks like that because her planet has Anglo-Germanic roots (Lost Colony World or Fantasy Counterpart Culture) so she talks with antiquated British Slang. It is part of her charter.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 25, 2010, 07:22:43 pm
1. You really shouldn't assume that everyone knows things like that. until you told me I had absolutely no clue you were referring to a real-world thing (are you?)

2. I know what a nanotube is :P But again, you didn't explain at all what this was referring to, and while often times it may simply be a matter of courtesy, often people need a bit of clarification on the meanings of some stuff.

3. Thank you for explaining that for us! (Although it may have been good to post that in the original bio, again, explaining stuff is good.)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 25, 2010, 07:25:48 pm
So how does this go? We just wait a set period of time until a majority of the players vote against me?


Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 25, 2010, 08:06:14 pm
More or less. So far only Darth, Flisch, Ink, and myself have voted.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on June 25, 2010, 08:34:33 pm
I voted no. I truly just do not believe Lush deserves a full blown, forcefull removal

I'm going to have to vote yes, too.  It seems like every time Lush posts the game grinds to a halt and we have to patch it back together again.

I think thats a little exaggerated...

Plus, made up words and strange ways of speaking are things I consider quirks of Lush's character.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 25, 2010, 10:12:27 pm
Surely you've noticed the issues that keep cropping up when Lush posts. And I know you haven't cried foul yourself, but almost all of the other players have. That has to carry some weight.

I'm not saying you're wrong. Lush has been given a fair number of chances and has had very clear direction; however, nothing has changed. Post quality is till lacking and someone always has a grievance whenever a post is made. Maybe it's just a fluke. Several attempts have been made to help Lush but they've all either been ignored or refused. But maybe the suggestions aren't being given in a meaningful or understandable way. Necro, you clearly see something in Lush that makes you think he is worth keeping in the game. Can you help me understand your point of view? And do you believe there is anything I can do (I can only speak for myself) to help resolve this situation in a way that sees Lush continue as a member of the game?

And can you help those of us that voted to remove Lush feel confident that he will be able to continue the game in a proficient manner?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 25, 2010, 10:17:03 pm
I've been "coaching" Lush in a way, lately, and if you look, there's been some edits made to her most recent post. I think that we should give her a second chance; I can see some definite improvement on the horizon.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 25, 2010, 10:31:20 pm
There has been improvement, yes. However, a good portion of the edits you mention are happening after the fact. And while it is good that Lush is able to go back and fix bad posts, many of the mistakes shouldn't be happening in the first place. Things like spelling mistakes and continuity errors boil down to carelessness, not a lack of skill.

I'll list out what I see in Lush's posts. These are the things I look at and think need to be fixed.

Spelling mistakes
Continuity errors
Needless jargon
"Look at what know" types of things - this is when a writer includes very specific details that don't add much to the story other than to illustrate to the others that they know something about something (the Bull Formation thing is a prime example of this)
Dialog-heavy posts
There is very little for the next poster to work with
A general disconnect between the character and the main plot

I think if these issues can be worked out we can reach an agreement to let Lush stay. Most of it can be remedied by simply proofreading and paying attention. The more complex ones may be fixed somewhat by Lush taking the focus off of Hay and writing more for the group and Hay's play within it.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 25, 2010, 10:42:40 pm
Spelling mistakes-Concede
Continuity errors- Explanation Needed  
Needless jargon- Explanation Needed  I used once instance of "Space-Slang" the rest had actual purposes. (Highlighting Hay’s Anglo-Germanic heritage for example.)
"Look at what know" types of things - this is when a writer includes very specific details that don't add much to the story other than to illustrate to the others that they know something about something (the Bull Formation thing is a prime example of this)-Explanation Needed This I don’t get, I originally just suggested that we use the Bull Formation, because that’s what a Soldier would do in a military situation, suggest a method of battle, when "Bull Formation" was classified as "Needless jargon" I was made to put an explanation of it in the post. Both possible methods were met with equal criticism so I'll need some more explanation on this.
Dialog-heavy posts-  Explanation Needed  Didn’t you explicitly tell me that minimalism is always never a good idea?
There is very little for the next poster to work with- Disagree This I just don’t get. Out of all my posts the vast majority have been dialog or actions to other Player Characters, so I cannot see how this gives "little for the other poster to work with"
A general disconnect between the character and the main plot- ???
I'll have to talk with you about this one.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on June 25, 2010, 10:54:50 pm
Maybe I am too forgiving, maybe I just think he deserves one more chance. one.

These are issues Lush could probably fix if he truly tries.

Also the thing is Lush is nooby but not: "*yawn* Man what a beautiful day! I am going to go on the internet and be a jerk today!" nooby

At least I hope he is not...

But my votes been cast and I will concede with the results either way.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 25, 2010, 11:52:21 pm
This post ended up being fairly long compared to what I had hoped... but sometimes that happens. I've given you evidence and my reasoning. Hopefully that will suffice. I recommend that everyone read this. It never hurts to refresh yourself on some of the basics.


Continuity errors...

Slightly annoyed at the ignorance of the crewwomen, she gave her a slight stinging with a quick jab in the back of the neck, getting her attention.

"Hey!" "A commanding officer just spoke to you, show some respect."

This one is a tad sketchy for several reason and is probably a fairly light error in continuity. But in this case we've got Hay and a random NPC (which is fine). Problems arise in the fact that you neglected to give the NPC any detail other than a sex and apparently some sort of rank. But you also mention stinging which may relate to your weapon or may relate to Hay's physical structure. Either way, neither reconcile with anything in your character bio because the detail is absent. This is more a sin of omission than anything else.

Her small size mitigating the impact of the crash, Hay was shellshocked all the same. The enemy fire wasn't helping either. "Guys!" she yelled" Khal's got the right idea, use th ship as cover." She switched her stinger to ranged mode, took up behind a bulkhead of scrapmetal, and launched some suppressing fire.

Going back to the stinger once more... in the previous example it was used to jab at a crew member (you didn't explain either bit very well at all so I may be wrong but... it's still tough to tell) and now it has a ranged mode that lays suppressing fire. And is this the same weapon you used to sting Marty's character? It's a gun and then a pen-knife and... what else? It keeps changing and lacks continuity.

"Yas!" boomed hay. "Let me fly ahead through the tower. I can give recon through the communicators."

This error has more to do with perspective but when read you give the implication that Hay is speaking in a booming voice. And your excuse wasn't very good. It might be wise to give us a definite size comparison... let's say Hay's size versus a normal human.

And in your most recent post...

One of the mines that the C.O. had just warned her about

Both Ink and Marty have characters that could be described as commanding officers and neither of them mentioned anything about mines. Also, I didn't mention mines either in any of my antagonist posts. And when I do a search on the word "mine" in the entire RP, I get four results. One is your post and the other three are snippets of the words "imminent", "determine", and "examine". That's a pretty big continuity error right there.


Needless jargon...

The general point with this and all extra detail is that the extra detail needs to serve a purpose. If it expands the mental image or depth of character that's one thing. But if it confuses people it's doing the opposite of what detail is supposed to do.

Making her security rounds while the DoS was busy with his paperwork

In many of your early posts you threw around the acronym "DoS", but you never explained what it stands for. When you use an acronym you always have to spell out what it stands for before you start using the abbreviation. It's also very wise to put the acronym in parenthesis after the long version so that there is no confusion. You can't be busting out acronyms without proper explanation first.

And to go along with jargon, there's a good rule of thumb when it comes to characters that have unique accents. When playing as a character with an accent, being able to understand them is your primary goal. Sometimes it's better to just let the reader add the accent in their head. But if you do want to use verbal flourishes, you should make sure you're getting so deep into the language that the rest of us are lost. To be fair though, you've gotten better at this. But some of Hay's dialog is needlessly choppy.

"Righty-o Cap'n" Hay said to her burlesque superior

The use of the word "burlesque" in this post was a little odd. Maybe somewhat distracting. I'm not sure if it was the word you intended to use but it's definitely an odd choice and really doesn't do much except raise question about your intent. I might be mistaken on this one, but you may want to look the word up. Were you trying to go for something like "burly" or a similar word? Because burlesque is something entirely different.

And later on in this post you go on to mention trap sweepers and nanotubes.  It's the first mention of such things in the entire RP and there is no explanation of what they do. To that end, it's jargon. The trap sweeper bit was passable on its own until you mention the nanotubes. What does "tougher than nanotubes" mean? Suddenly I'm not so sure what this device does... is it a detector? Is it a brute force instrument? What is it? In the end it's confusing.


"Look at what I know..."

I always love these because people bust them out often and instead of adding to their post like they intended, it just distracts everyone.

"I suppose we'll be using the Bull Formation then?"

The Bull Formation. And I know you tried to explain it in the sentence after this one but really, it doesn't add anything to your post. It's needlessly distracting. And okay, you may not have had the intent to show off what you knew. But when oddly specific sorts of details like this show up it tends to look like the poster is trying to show off. There is such a thing as too much detail and this post fits the bill fairly well.


Dialog-heavy posts...

Minimalism is a bad path to follow; however, dialog isn't a substitute for exposition. Dialog tends to move your character along but it doesn't move the story nearly as much as you'd think. Additionally, and this ties into the next point, dialog almost exclusively means another dialog response. Sometimes dialog leads to exposition but most of the time the character ends up staying in place. They don't move forward, at least not as far as the story is concerned. You, specifically, need to find a balance between dialog and exposition. Additionally, your characters need to have more meaningful dialog. What you have now are fairly short posts made up mostly of dialog that doesn't even develop your character or their situational being. And spouting information doesn't really do a ton for your character. Dialog is a way to convey a character's feelings and desires, not just their next action. You can detail action in the exposition portions of your posts.


There is very little for the next poster to work with...

To continue from the previous segment, many of your posts do detail actions but they're very individualistic actions. You do a decent job of playing off of me. And that's fine, you should be keeping the antagonist in your sights; however, oftentimes you're neglecting the team. (Let me say that you're not the only one doing this, a few other players do it as well. But right now we're on you.) You need to be interacting with your fellow players as much as you are with me and that includes more than just idle dialog.

Let's look at your most recent post as an example.

"Righty-o Cap'n" Hay said to her burlesque superior . "I suppose we'll be using the Bull Formation then?"  "One up front, four centered in the corner, two behind, and two on either side. We'll have to adjust for numbers but-" BOOM!  One of the mines that the C.O. had just warned her about had just sent out a small kinetic pulse, luckily her size minimized the damage but the point was still made. "I hope you make a decision quick though, because unless we have a trap sweeper tougher than nanotubes I don't think my knickers are going to be the only thing in this Company that’s in a twist."

As far as the action in this post is concerned, you were off to a good start. You introduces the detonation of a mine (which, had it been there, would be fine). And then you close out that action sequence a sentence later by mentioning that nothing came of it and make no mention of how the other members of the team may have felt this. And in the dialog segment your character suggests using a formation of sorts to traverse the path to the mansion. That's fine, but then you sort of leave the topic behind and start talking about the nanotubes and then end on a flourish. And nothing is really accomplished other than... Hay suggested a formation. But in this type of setting the formation doesn't really matter all that much. It does add to the believability of the world and the depth of the situation, but in the end it doesn't add nearly as much as perhaps a description of the hallway or area the team is walking through.

Remember, just because Ink or Marty is "leading" the group, that doesn't mean that they have a monopoly on describing where the group currently is. Anyone can move the team forward and into a new place as long as they do it in a logical way. Heck, if you wanted to you or any of the other players with characters on the team could have the group walking into the mansion. It's not forbidden ground and it serves only to enrich the experience when everyone is playing a role in how the world looks and where we are in it.


A general disconnect...

This kind of thing was especially prevalent in the beginning of the RP. The bits where your character was reprimanding NPCs and whatnot was totally disjointed. Your more-current posts are better but they're not quite up to snuff. A lot of this was mentioned in the last two sections, but your posts are still very character-centric. Hay is with the rest of the team, yes, but the posts with Hay in them are very isolated and only discuss things that impact him. Mentioning the actions of other characters and reacting to other characters is fine, but it doesn't impact anyone but Hay. You should be trying to throw curves at your other players and advancing the action IN ADDITION to responding to it. I'm trowing the big guns at you guys but it's up to you to tell me how they land and where they land. And in that sense, you can take control of some of the antagonist's actions. Maybe you deflect a shot but it goes flying towards someone else. Or perhaps you describe a blast going off near both your character and another character. It's not all about you, despite the fact that you are telling your character's story. You're telling your character's story, but you're telling it in the context of their adventure with everyone else.

I'll say again that this point is one that isn't exclusive to you, Lush. Others have this problem as well, but it's been very pronounced with you. It's a pet peeve of mine. Getting people to lead in an RP rather than follow is a constant struggle. And when people start following habitually, they tend to drift into their own world that runs parallel to the story but has very little to do with it.


So... that's about that. Went longer than expected but those are my thoughts, more or less.

Look, I know you can do it but I just think you need to be a little more open to your flaws. You're always coming back with excuses and it doesn't do anything. Everyone has strengths and weaknesses. You have a lot of creativity and you're able to be there when we need you. But you have several issues when it comes to the quality of your work. If you can reconcile the two, I think you'll be great.

I try my best not to be condescending or a jerk because I put the game above all else. I'm doing this because I like to be in charge of a group or because I want to subjugate people. But I do know that I know a good bit about how these games work and how to play them well. And I know I have my own flaws but (and I don't want to sound pushy or obnoxious) you have to trust me at least a little bit. I know what I'm talking about and I want to see you and everyone that plays be as successful as possible.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 26, 2010, 01:38:51 am

Her small size mitigating the impact of the crash, Hay was shell-shocked all the same. The enemy fire wasn't helping either. "Guys!" she yelled" Khal's got the right idea, use the ship as cover." She switched her stinger to ranged mode, took up behind a bulkhead of scrap metal, and launched some suppressing fire.

It doesn’t change ,its one weapon with one function used in different ways . To "Jab" you'd give a quick thrust, and thus small shock, to stun you'd send out enough wattage to physically stun a person and to make suppressing fire you’d just shoot it rapidly at a far range. It’s all the exact same effect just at different ranges and power levels.

"Yas!" boomed hay. "Let me fly ahead through the tower. I can give recon through the communicators."

It wants an "excuse." Hay "booms" because she has to be to be heard (and with them being in a Battle Zone, even more so)

One of the mines that the C.O. had just warned her about

Here I have to make a point, what did it matter? The post was on the same page, all you had to do was scroll up to see who was last talking to Hay, and the "mines" in question were fleshing out of the Traps that Hay had just been warned about.


"Righty-o Cap'n" Hay said to her burlesque superior

A Trap Sweeper is device or method by which you would clear traps i.e. the ones that I was just told the building had

Naontubes are a well-known type of artificial material that are notorious for their strength

Thus,  "tougher than Naontubes" means "a good trap remover." Not very hard to put together. Both of those words are real world items (as was the Bull Formation) so I did not think I was required to explain what they were.


"Look at what I know..."

This wasn’t an attempt  to "brag" . I seriously doubted that anyone here knew what the Bull Formation was(as Kitkat confirmed) so I listed it  like that to spare the expense of having to be "called out"" on "making stuff up" or having to  bulkily explain it in OOC
"I suppose we'll be using the Bull Formation then?"

The Bull Formation wasn’t a "distraction" it was a direct request to the in-game authority to do something. If I was the leader for example  I would have said "everybody get in the Bull Formation!"It was meant to be a significant aspect of how we were to avoid the traps that building was stated to have.




There is very little for the next poster to work with...

Out of all my posts sense I got to the planet all of them were direct callings to other characters. Suggestions for strategies, efforts at moving through obstacles and the "creation" of incidents to react to. (The mine for example)

Let's look at your most recent post as an example.

"Righty-o Cap'n" Hay said to her burlesque superior .[1] "I suppose we'll be using the Bull Formation then?" [2] "One up front, four centered in the corner, two behind, and two on either side. We'll have to adjust for numbers but-"[3] BOOM!  One of the mines that the C.O. had just warned her about had just sent out a small kinetic pulse,[4] luckily her size minimized the damage but the point was still made.[5] "I hope you make a decision quick though, because unless we have a trap sweeper tougher than Naontubes I don’t think my knickers are going to be the only thing in this Company that’s in a twist."[6[

Here's where I don’t get you. Let me Break it down.

1. A response to dialogue given by another character, recognizing their role

2. A proposal of a method of attack to be implemented by the rest of the group. Realistically directing the Rp through my character and suggesting a way to get through an obstacle presented by another player.

3.   A necessary explanation for those who don’t know what the Bull Formation is.

4. A callback, presenting one of the traps alluded to by another player, thus reacting to their intent. Somebody says there are traps,  so a trap goes off.

5. A sentence revealing the result of the above event on my character while giving open space for others to show what happened to their characters

6. An in character call to urgency. "Unless we have a really good trap-sweeper this is going to be pretty difficult" Not disjointed at all. A trap just went off and that is pretty much a completely logical thing to say after getting caught in the blast.

Outside of length I really don’t see what I did wrong in this post.

A general disconnect...

As I've said I was trying to lead. Over the course of the RP I've Proposed a strategy involving a stun grenade, suggested that I do recon through the mansion, suggested a military method of attack to the team,  suggested  to everybody to get in cover(with a piece of the environment that wasn’t outright stated to be, but obviously existed) when we were being surrounded AND fleshed out a detail sated by a previous player (Traps to mines) I really don’t see how I lack "leading initiative."




Really didn’t know the best way to respond to the strange structure of your post, so I just replaced your words with my replies. If it doesn’t show up, assume I agree with you for ease of use.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 26, 2010, 09:53:54 am
On the first point, the stinger gun keeps changing and doing different things. It has a full compliment of lethal and non-lethal abilities and while it does have a weakness, its multipurpose nature is too forgiving. The way you've been writing it, it has an application in every situation.

The booming voice is more perspective than anything else and we can ignore it; however, in the future be away of which perspective your post is in. I think Raz more or less summed this point up.

The mines and "traps" that you mention may well be a product of quick reading. Simply put, it was never said or implied that the building had traps. When Inkling's character mentions "traps", he's saying it like this (word for word): "This is clearly a trap." He is not saying "there are traps", those are two entirely different things. It's an archetypal "come and face me" type of setup.

Someone mentioned this before (I think it was Kitkat) but in regards to the nanotubes and the trap sweeper, you're not explaining anything. You're throwing words and names out there with no clear explanation as to what they do. And again, using "nanotubes" as a modifier for "trap sweeper" is very confusing. I don't know what nanotubes are, the first thing that comes to mind is vacuum tubes. And if the OOC is any indication, I wasn't the only one that was lost on the reference. I went and looked it up and found carbon nanotubes. And I have a vague understanding of what they are. They talk about them on the news every now and again. If you'd said "carbon nanotubes", maybe we'd have had a better time with it. Without the extra clarification, the word is as good as jargon. Bull Formation falls under this description, too.

Here's the thing with your "callings to other characters"... they all start and end with you. It's not teamwork when you're asking or demanding something of someone else. Hay asks for a stun grenade and to be allowed to leave the group to scout. That's not something you can build much off of. The only real response is yes or no. And this may be very subjective, but in my own mind a lot of the suggestions Hay makes are pretty nonsensical. They're downright suicidal. You aren't taking into account the rest of the team. All of your efforts either take Hay away from the team or they are solely centered around Hay with little input from other characters of an affirmative or negative response.

I'm not saying you don't have the spirit. You do. But in your attempts to lead, you have so many errors and other problems that the group can't follow Hay's direction. I'll go over your last bit using the combined points above.



"Righty-o Cap'n" Hay said to her burlesque superior .[1] "I suppose we'll be using the Bull Formation then?" [2] "One up front, four centered in the corner, two behind, and two on either side. We'll have to adjust for numbers but-"[3] BOOM!  One of the mines that the C.O. had just warned her about had just sent out a small kinetic pulse,[4] luckily her size minimized the damage but the point was still made.[5] "I hope you make a decision quick though, because unless we have a trap sweeper tougher than Naontubes I don’t think my knickers are going to be the only thing in this Company that’s in a twist."

Here's where I don’t get you. Let me Break it down.

1. A response to dialogue given by another character, recognizing their role

2. A proposal of a method of attack to be implemented by the rest of the group. Realistically directing the Rp through my character and suggesting a way to get through an obstacle presented by another player.

3.   A necessary explanation for those who don’t know what the Bull Formation is.

4. A callback, presenting one of the traps alluded to by another player, thus reacting to their intent. Somebody says there are traps,  so a trap goes off.

5. A sentence revealing the result of the above event on my character while giving open space for others to show what happened to their characters

6. An in character call to urgency. "Unless we have a really good trap-sweeper this is going to be pretty difficult" Not disjointed at all. A trap just went off and that is pretty much a completely logical thing to say after getting caught in the blast.

Outside of length I really don’t see what I did wrong in this post.

1. Your first point is acceptable. Hay talked to another character and gave general recognition about who they were.

2. Again, you're right. Hay proposed a method of making it through the situation. Unfortunately, it is based on entirely nonexistent and wrong information. There are no traps, you read that sentence wrong and so there is no foundation on which this point can stand.

3. You explain the Bull Formation... somewhat confusingly. The description wasn't very technical but involved a large sense of spatial awareness, more than is usually required in this type of game. This is a case of too much description. You never really mention clearly that Bull Formation is ideal for navigating traps (which aren't there) and the description you do have is still confusing to people that don't know what you're talking about. If you want to use detail like this, you need to give us the core bits of info. Why use Bull Formation? Because it helps navigate traps. But again, there are no traps.

4. Nobody said there are traps. They said "IT'S A TRAP!".

5. There's no foundation in your character reacting to traps because there are no traps.

6. Same as the last few.


The post isn't terrible in its own right (save for a few bits of missing detail); however, the very ground the post is sitting on is based on false or misunderstood information. Your good intent is there but you're missing all of the real details and so the detail you eventually come up with isn't fact and doesn't help. I notice that you tend to type things very quickly and I'm going to guess you also read things very quickly. Take your time. There's no rush whatsoever and I think (and I said this during Steampunk) most of the problems you're having are due to you moving too quickly. Slow down and see if it helps.

And let me reiterate that you should be proofreading. Even your response post had a number of spelling mistakes... more than would be normal for a post of that size. Take your time.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 26, 2010, 12:01:09 pm
He's wasting a good chunk of your time, Pat, time taken from the RP. And Lush, you're lucky I'm not in this or I'd have been an instant yes. You might be better off walking away now to save face and come back when you can make good posts.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 26, 2010, 01:00:25 pm
That's what we're DOING, Raz, trying to help her improve her posts!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 26, 2010, 01:01:32 pm
Then do it once you've removed him/her, instead of letting the post block the progress of the RP.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 26, 2010, 04:44:07 pm
So is the voting over? A time table was never given. (I'm using a cellphone right now so forgive me if my numbers are off). Last I checked there were five votes aginst me, with Kat recanting that makes four. One short of the 5/9 majority needed to expulse me. Did I get that right?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 26, 2010, 07:42:58 pm
Nope. Kitkat never voted.

Instead, what I'm doing is putting you on probation. You get another chance but you need to improve your posts. I've given you my own opinion on your posts and I'm sure others will do the same if you ask them. You may continue posting in the RP for now, but I want you to note the votes against you. This is not just some conspiracy to have you kicked out of the RP. The majority of people feel that you need to show major improvement in your posts. And I think you can do it if you try.

Lush, you can keep posting in the RP but I strongly recommend you try to improve in the areas that have been pointed out in you. Since public opinion is that you be removed from the RP, if you do not improve, you will be asked to leave if you fail to show that you've taken our advice to heart. There will be no further vote and there will be no further warnings. You need to shape up or you will be asked to leave. If you must, please feel free to send me your posts before you post them and I'll be happy to go over them for you.

And remember, for all intents and purposes you lost this vote. But since I initiated the vote I am going to forgo following through with the result. You get your next chance but this is the last one.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 26, 2010, 08:45:44 pm
What? Yes I did!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 26, 2010, 09:11:36 pm
Oh, okay. Kitkat voted. Woops! ;D

>_>

But yeah. Lush, you're on double-secret probation. If you want, I'm more than happy to look over your posts before you post them.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 26, 2010, 09:52:43 pm
No thanks Pat. But thanks for the offer. So does the poll get taken down now?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 26, 2010, 09:55:26 pm
I highly recommend you take his offer. Highly recommend. As in do it, or you're just a troll.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 26, 2010, 09:59:45 pm
I'll take the poll down but you should be aware that there will be no poll in the future. Since the majority of players have already voted to have you removed, if you cross the line or make an inexcusable mistake in the future you will be removed. But I don't think we'll have to worry about that.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 26, 2010, 10:07:31 pm
I highly recommend you take his offer. Highly recommend. As in do it, or you're just a troll.

Seeing as how you're not even in this game, you're the biggest "troll" here, Raz.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 26, 2010, 10:09:07 pm
Actually no. I think everyone pretty much agrees you are. And I've seen your Spore RP posts, why can't you pull off quality like those on a zero-edit basis?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 26, 2010, 10:11:12 pm
Right... that's enough of that. Let's get back to the game.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 26, 2010, 10:48:02 pm
Alright, moving things along.

I honestly didn't know what to do with your post, Lush, so I skipped over it.  There are no mines, no traps, as was previously said.  It's an ambush, not a minefield. 

If your character has an anglo-german heritage, as you keep saying (which doesn't make sense), she should have used the more european and generic term Pincer movement, instead of the African inspired term.  I suppose that since there are humans in our universe, your character knowing about a combat strategy named after an earth animal is possible, but it feels out of place.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pincer_movement

And again, look up the meaning of the word burlesque.  I do not think it means what you think it means.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 26, 2010, 11:06:46 pm
Wait. They're aren't any earth animals? I thought the rule was "don't talk about Earth, it's long-lost or something, but it still exists." Wouldn't there be Earth animals who got to the other planets the same way the Humans did?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 26, 2010, 11:30:20 pm
Like I said, it's possible for an alien to know such a term in our rp universe, but there was a better option.  That's really the least of the issues I brought up.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on June 27, 2010, 07:21:52 am
Hey, guys, I will only really be available on weekends. And maybe from 8-10 PM at times. Just so you know.
Irkkuf got a concussion and is still at the crash site.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 27, 2010, 12:39:39 pm
Isn't it like Summer?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 27, 2010, 12:49:01 pm
Yeah, I thought the same thing.

Maybe he's got time limits or something. *shrug*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 27, 2010, 01:08:24 pm
I decided to give a little atmosphere, I hope you dont mind  :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 27, 2010, 01:13:51 pm
Nice post! I like it a lot.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 28, 2010, 06:26:35 am
Oct, I don't know why you keep making posts like that. They're totally out of place. Just because you're not around to say that your character walked with the group doesn't mean that he didn't do it. Your last few posts have been nothing more than your character catching up or saying hi or some combination of both (for the most part). That's not how it works.

Furthermore, the group is now in an inaccessible location. Your character can't get in unless he's already been with the group the whole time. Don't make things more complicated than they need to be.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on June 28, 2010, 06:32:53 am
...well, that makes things easier. I can now delete two pointless posts.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 28, 2010, 06:46:26 am
Nice post! I like it a lot.

I agree.  You've made quite the improvement Lush.  Keep up the good work.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 28, 2010, 06:29:36 pm
I really didn't expect such a choice to have to be made...

To me, that's a testament to all of us coming together and making a really great game experience! So... it looks like the heroes have a decision to make and I don't know how it's going to go. Stop the criminal with a history of genocide and thievery or save the planet of innocent (?) creatures? I'm REALLY interested in seeing how this all pans out because I have no plan at this point! Hah!

Yay!! :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 28, 2010, 07:04:12 pm
I SWEAR that I didn't just make the rifle up out of nowhere. I originally just intended for it to become a tinker toy of Khalendin's, but it seems that it may be significant!

...I hope...
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 28, 2010, 08:34:39 pm
AH! I HAD AN IDEA!

What if we did a poll to decide how the heroes react? Option A is something like "Asglot is captured and HGG-743-22401 is destroyed" and Option B is "Asglot gets away and HGG-743-22401 is saved". What do you guys think of that? If we made it a poll would you guys be happy with that? Or would you rather deliberate it in-character? I can see pluses and minuses to both. On the one hand we can keep things more or less rolling along and not bog the RP down in dialog that could potentially end up as a rambling segment which logic would say has Asglot get away AND the planet get destroyed (since they would probably end up talking much longer than three minutes). On the other hand we have the potential for very deep character expansion, especially if there's disagreement in the ranks.

Either way, the decision will get made; however, I think it's an interesting thought to consider. What do you guys think?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 28, 2010, 08:46:18 pm
I say that we should try to save the planet, because we could have Asglot come back with a vengeance in, say, Season 3?  ;)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 28, 2010, 08:48:54 pm
I say we vote in the OOC and in-game. Then each character can react to the decision based on there personality.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 28, 2010, 08:49:18 pm
I say that we should try to save the planet, because we could have Asglot come back with a vengeance in, say, Season 3?  ;)

That is most likley how it will pan out.  No reason to use up a good villain in their first arc.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 28, 2010, 08:51:35 pm
If he gets away the Bino better watch their behinds because Khalendin just went and pissed Asglot the hell off. You take a claw, he'll take the fifth planet from the orange sun. :D

As for voting or not voting, the way I see it, if we do a formal vote we can still go through reactions in-game. All it does it helps to expedite the decision process and make sure time frames within the game stay logical. It's two different ways to do the same thing.


**EDIT**
Secret hint, if he is captured I imagine he gets sent to space jail. And you know how easy it is to get out of there. Plus, you'll be putting him in jail on his 200th birthday... that'll leave a mark. Whatever the case, I'll find a way to bring him back for you. But yeah, go with your character's moral compass.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 28, 2010, 09:00:58 pm
Yay! A chance to punch each other!  :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 28, 2010, 09:10:37 pm
I say we take a vote, especially since Sam is on vacation, so ADVISOR won't be making the call.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 28, 2010, 10:06:43 pm
Hmm. If we do the vote, could the minority go off and try (and fail) to do the losing option? Like, if we vote to save the planet, a small group will follow him into the ship and ultimately fail to capture him?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 28, 2010, 10:08:56 pm
If we did anything like that it would have to be quick.

Hmm... this will require significantly more time and consideration (the actual process and ramifications of a vote) so let's just keep going with the story for now. When we finish the arc up maybe we can try to reinvent the wheel. Let's just do it right before we try to do it better. Sorry for the inconvenience, guys.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 28, 2010, 10:23:47 pm
So uh... What now?  ???
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 28, 2010, 10:47:33 pm
Hm? Nothing's changed. We keep going as planned. If you guys want to discuss what you (as the heroes) want to do, go for it. But otherwise keep on posting!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 28, 2010, 10:55:55 pm
Okay. But it seems like we're all taking a break for the night. If it's okay, I'm going to hold off until tomorrow.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 28, 2010, 11:00:29 pm
Oh absolutely yes. I've got a client to deal with tomorrow morning and I probably shouldn't be up now as it is. But yeah, post when you feel like it. That's the nice thing about doing this on a forum. See you tomorrow!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 28, 2010, 11:02:07 pm
Cue rampant speculation on Pat's job! Lol but cool. G'night Pei Mei.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 28, 2010, 11:05:42 pm
To quote Dante... I'm not even supposed to be here.

I do computer repair but I really don't want to. But it's a war of attrition. I don't have any other job right now and if one of my old clients calls me up I'm not going to say no. E3 showed me that I'm going to be spending a lot of money this Fall. :P

Or... if you'd rather. I'm a call girl. There, my secret is out!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 03:15:36 am
Please, at this point there's hardly any difference.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 29, 2010, 06:20:05 am
I do computer repair but I really don't want to. But it's a war of attrition. I don't have any other job right now and if one of my old clients calls me up I'm not going to say no. E3 showed me that I'm going to be spending a lot of money this Fall. :P

I did computer repair for a while.  While I'm pretty good at it, I really don't enjoy it.  I'm finally starting to get into some programming jobs, but I'm still a ways from where I want to be.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 07:42:06 am
I did computer repair for a while.  While I'm pretty good at it, I really don't enjoy it.

Yeah man... it blows! I've grown to hate computers. They're absolutely illogical.

What languages do you know?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 29, 2010, 07:52:18 am
Well, let's see here...

VB
Java
Javascript
C#
C++
C
Assembley
French
GameMaker
HTML
XML (Not really a language though)
CSS
ASP.NET (Again, not really a language)

I feel like I'm forgetting something but I can't for the life of me figure out what that would be.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 10:27:48 am
Neato!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 11:59:49 am
How many rouge Antiviruses have you taken down?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 29, 2010, 12:11:01 pm
And this discussion is seriously off topic guys, I read this stuff too, would like for it to be back on-topic, mkay?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 12:18:59 pm
Shooting the breeze and talking about life makes the group more cohesive. The RP is better for it.

Besides, it's interesting hearing about what everyone else does. :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 29, 2010, 12:21:11 pm
We can talk about that stuff in mIRC if you guys want, but otherwise, you guys are avoiding the point  :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 29, 2010, 12:25:56 pm
Yeah guys.  We need to get back on topic so we don't bore Razon.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 12:28:08 pm
Ironically, you just being here is off-topic. As you're not in the RP.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 12:34:35 pm
Ironically, you just being here is off-topic. As you're not in the RP.

This.

Also, OOC spam is like, a quarter of my posts. It's the role player's bread and butter. kekekekeke :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 29, 2010, 12:37:43 pm
Yeah guys.  We need to get back on topic so we don't bore Razon.
Shhh, you'll only anger him.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 12:39:20 pm
*cowers in the corner*

Oh, and if someone wants to post in the RP that'd be cool.

*continues to cower*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on June 29, 2010, 12:48:26 pm
Ironically, you just being here is off-topic. As you're not in the RP.

You, shut the hell up, jack ass. You're already in bad standing with me and doing everything in your power to get worse. Doc. Oct, however, is now in okay standing with me through effort.

Need to take that vote.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 29, 2010, 12:50:32 pm
Now now, play nice, Raz. Maybe it would be best for you to go back to the Perihelion >_>
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 29, 2010, 12:51:22 pm
Ironically, you just being here is off-topic. As you're not in the RP.

You, shut the hell up, jack ass. You're already in bad standing with me and doing everything in your power to get worse. Doc. Oct, however, is now in okay standing with me through effort.
Yeah well, it's too bad nobody gives a dump about who is standing how with you.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 01:05:28 pm
Your behavior is unacceptable, Raz. You need to leave this thread now. You're distracting us.

Do not come back unless you're going to apologize to Lush for snapping at him.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 01:07:20 pm
Uh... her. But thanks for the support guys.  ;D  :'(
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 29, 2010, 01:18:45 pm
So what's the best way to stop the drill, or whatever it is about to blow up the planet?  Should we have someone just shut it down, or blast the site from orbit?  I kind of like the running from a building that will explode in a few seconds scenario.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 01:20:05 pm
I can fit in an explosion if you guys want. No problem there!

The best way to do it would be to do what Asglot said. Shut it down via the computer terminal. Also, don't forget your mission.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on June 29, 2010, 01:20:15 pm
I think its more than just the building thats going to blow...

On that note R5 may be able to hack it and shut it down.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 29, 2010, 01:22:10 pm
Oh right, I forgot we had a walking computer with us.  Done and done.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 01:22:57 pm
I thought we were going to have the ship blast it, while sacrificing the chance to stop the escape craft. The whole "moral choice" thing.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on June 29, 2010, 01:32:42 pm
Ah, whatever you guys decide, I can change my post to fit. However, as you can tell, I like the whole moral choice thing. Maybe have R5 delay the timer so we can get the power source, then have Sidereal nuke the equipment.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 29, 2010, 01:34:56 pm
I think this way makes more sense.  Like Asglot said, the drill is automated.  Blowing up the control panels won't stop the device, but an order from the controls will.

EDIT:  But ending with an explosion sounds fun, yeah.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 01:36:00 pm
Perhaps while this is going on a small detachment could chase after Asglot on his ship (they wouldn't win of course.) It'd be a nice fight showing just how powerful Asglot is as well as giving a "fear the reaper" aspect to our villain. We could probably use the escape pods after he kicks are collective asses.


@ Ink


But I thought we were talking out the surface equipment. A drill-bit cant work without it's head.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 29, 2010, 01:36:28 pm
We should nuke the planet, so the stridurbans don't die to Asglot. J/K#

Aaaanyway, dunno really what to do at this moment except running around hysterically like a beheaded chicken. >_>
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 29, 2010, 01:38:28 pm
(http://facepwn.com/posters/NukeOrbit.jpg)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 01:40:08 pm
Thought I'd remind everyone that Asglot is still in the mansion.(Until Pat posts otherwise) So we still have the option of  (an attempt at) sending a B-Team onto his ship.

Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 29, 2010, 01:40:47 pm
Thank you, Martyk.  That's what was in my head, too.

Lush, it's a remote control drill, it's not directly connected to the controls. ...I think?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 01:46:02 pm
Correct. There is no physical connection to the drill.

And even if they could nuke the control room, Asglot sealed the room right after they entered. Plus there's very little time. The team wouldn't be able to escape the blast. :D


*calls Ben Kenobi*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 01:47:45 pm
Can we set it to self-destruct?


(The Controls not the drill, that would probably blow up the planet.)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 01:49:05 pm
You could... but then where are the members of the team going to go? They're locked in the room with the controls.

BWAHAHAHAHAH!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on June 29, 2010, 01:51:52 pm
So should my next post be like

R5 haxs console= R5 shuts down big drill gun thing?

or...

R5 haxs console= Pat responds to weather it is huge success or failure?

(I am writing the post as we speak.)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 01:53:27 pm
It wouldn't be much of a story if I killed everyone off in the first arc. Although...

*flips a coin*

Bah. Yeah, go with your first choice. I'd still like to respond though after you finish it.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 01:53:48 pm
R5 Hax Console-Succeeds, but makes it blow up in a few minutes?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 01:55:34 pm
Don't worry about that. Stop the drill.

I'll work on giving Ink his explosion.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 01:58:42 pm
Nice! ;D  Oh, and Hay's talking to a dead body. YAY!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 01:59:54 pm
*slow clap*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 29, 2010, 02:02:27 pm
So should my next post be like

R5 haxs console= R5 shuts down big drill gun thing?

or...

R5 haxs console= Pat responds to weather it is huge success or failure?

(I am writing the post as we speak.)
Leave something to me, I don't wanna feel all worthless. >_>
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on June 29, 2010, 02:50:32 pm
If the drill is sitting at the core, sizing it up to destroy it (as I understand), then it must have some kind of shield protecting it. If we shut off the drill remotely, it may drop the shield, overloading it, causing it to blow? Distance from the core may give the team a narrow time frame to escape.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on June 29, 2010, 02:57:46 pm
So should my next post be like

R5 haxs console= R5 shuts down big drill gun thing?

or...

R5 haxs console= Pat responds to weather it is huge success or failure?

(I am writing the post as we speak.)
Leave something to me, I don't wanna feel all worthless. >_>

Whoops... I can edit that! And even then you still have plenty of arcs to take the spotlight
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 02:59:21 pm
If the drill is sitting at the core, sizing it up to destroy it (as I understand), then it must have some kind of shield protecting it. If we shut off the drill remotely, it may drop the shield, overloading it, causing it to blow? Distance from the core may give the team a narrow time frame to escape.

I had the same idea, but with its cooling system.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 03:02:48 pm
You guys sure are coming up with really complicated solutions.

Nicely done, Necro! :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on June 29, 2010, 03:03:58 pm
Thanks, I was going for a "OMG THE BOMBS GOING TO GO OFF!" type feel.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 03:10:53 pm
:D

I'll get my post in real quick and we'll be good to go!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 29, 2010, 03:11:56 pm
So should my next post be like

R5 haxs console= R5 shuts down big drill gun thing?

or...

R5 haxs console= Pat responds to weather it is huge success or failure?

(I am writing the post as we speak.)
Leave something to me, I don't wanna feel all worthless. >_>

Whoops... I can edit that!
Nah, it's alright...

...

*jumps off a roof*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on June 29, 2010, 03:13:09 pm
NOOOOOOOOOO! Thats not the way to go Flisch!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on June 29, 2010, 03:14:16 pm
NOOOOOOOOOO! Thats not the way to go Flisch!
Don't worry, I can fly, I'm a flying fish, you see? Omg, this was awful. I've got all unfunny over me. D:
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 03:19:40 pm
I love you, Flisch.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 29, 2010, 03:39:18 pm
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!



Asglot's evil rating just hit 3.35 kilonazis. Who's he even going to sell the fuel to? Isn't he basically Public Enemy Number 1 at this point?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 03:45:14 pm
It's fuel. There's always someone to buy it.

And I guess since the mansion is exploding it worked out well. All of the natives that knew about the alien stuff will probably die and the rest can just say it was a day when weird stuff happened. It'll probably spur a religion and that means nothing bad will ever happen to them ever again. <_<
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 29, 2010, 08:55:36 pm
Alrighty guys! That's about the end of the main action. Get working on closing posts and whenever we're good to go we can formally end this arc and start working on the preliminary stuff for number two! :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 30, 2010, 12:51:11 am
It's fuel. There's always someone to buy it.

And I guess since the mansion is exploding it worked out well. All of the natives that knew about the alien stuff will probably die and the rest can just say it was a day when weird stuff happened. It'll probably spur a religion and that means nothing bad will ever happen to them ever again. <_<


Didn't we evacuate (and shut up) the council?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 30, 2010, 06:37:40 am
Quote
he imagined one of these beings getting hurt….

24….23….22….21….20….

He seemed to gain no perverse satisfaction from it…

19….18….17….16….

Except with Irkkut

Awesome.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on June 30, 2010, 09:58:49 am
Didn't we evacuate (and shut up) the council?

Time constraints would have made it illogical. It was already getting a little close to being too much when people were spouting off several sentences while also running from a fireball.

Also, who thinks they want to take the helm for Arc II? I seem to remember Darth showing an interest. Anyone else? We'll put it to a vote.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on June 30, 2010, 12:32:41 pm
Aye, I'm still up for Arc II.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on June 30, 2010, 12:36:24 pm
I can perhaps do an arc furthur down the road.  I kinda have an idea, but it needs work still.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on June 30, 2010, 01:57:39 pm
I've thought about an arc or two, but my schedule probably wouldn't give me enough time.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on June 30, 2010, 03:06:20 pm
So yeah, Hay just pledged on the sacred tree of her ancestors that she would kill Asglot.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on July 01, 2010, 03:46:12 pm
So... yeah. Arc II, here we come!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on July 01, 2010, 03:55:51 pm
I am definitely available for an arc two
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 01, 2010, 04:04:33 pm
Alrighty, well it looks like Darth is the only one  interested in being villain for Arc II so she's got the part!

If anyone feels they may be ready for Arc III, start getting your ideas down on paper and we'll talk about things once it gets closer. I am going to close out Arc I tonight. If you've got anything else to do in-character, do it soon. We'll begin Arc II whenever Darth is ready. And if the group also wants a break, we can do that, too.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 01, 2010, 04:38:55 pm
I could probably start now, but again, does the group want a break?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on July 01, 2010, 04:47:16 pm
I say we take a break for now.

The signal to begin will be the first Gym Battle in Pokemon Garnet.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 01, 2010, 04:48:13 pm
Yeah no. How about Midnight tonight?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 01, 2010, 04:50:12 pm
How about we start on Saturday or Sunday? We'll take a day or two off and then get back into it.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 01, 2010, 04:52:29 pm
Ugh. I absoultly loathe waiting. Can we do it Friday? That's always a good day to start.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 01, 2010, 05:04:16 pm
I think It might be best if we waited till Monday, if we're going to wait. I'm going to be unavailable over Independence Day weekend, and I think most others in the states will be, too.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on July 01, 2010, 05:25:40 pm
Whatever works for you guys works for me.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 01, 2010, 05:55:51 pm
Right, I forgot about the holiday this weekend.

Yeah, Monday sounds good, Darth.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on July 01, 2010, 06:04:08 pm
I'll be gone for two weeks on the Fifth.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 01, 2010, 06:11:01 pm
Which is why I said we need to start now.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 01, 2010, 06:18:08 pm
Start now and get a quarter of the way through an arc in time for Kitkat to leave for two weeks?

Thankfully, the way this RP is designed, we can swap out characters as needed. I've got a few people on retainer that may be interested in joining up in Kitkat's absence.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 01, 2010, 06:19:47 pm
Which is why I said we need to start now.

And leave it hanging/have it run without a villain for three days come Friday?

I don't think that's a good idea...

Pat also has a good point. Monday works for everyone.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 01, 2010, 06:25:11 pm
The July 4th Weekend is this coming one. But I doubt we'll all be at some 72-hour cookout ton the point where we cant make a handful of posts a day.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 01, 2010, 06:28:15 pm
I'll be out in the desert. Camping. Until early Monday (which is mid to late Monday for you folks on the East Coast/Europe).

The plan I've got will require some set up, and the first few days will be crucial. Even if everyone else is available, they won't have anything to do but putt around and wait for something to happen.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 01, 2010, 06:38:24 pm
I'm going to be busy and/or indisposed, as well.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 01, 2010, 07:55:10 pm
I'll be out in the desert. Camping. Until early Monday (which is mid to late Monday for you folks on the East Coast/Europe).

The plan I've got will require some set up, and the first few days will be crucial. Even if everyone else is available, they won't have anything to do but putt around and wait for something to happen.

Than why'd you offer two hours ago. *sigh* Oh well. Who spends the Fourth of July camping in a desert?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on July 01, 2010, 08:01:50 pm
People who like camping in arid areas, or the children of those people.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 01, 2010, 08:10:31 pm
Oh how cute! :3 How many do you have?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 01, 2010, 10:34:06 pm
And we're done! Woo woo!

Now, feedback time! How's everyone liking the RP so far? Anything you guys would like to see more of and is there anything you'd like to see change?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 01, 2010, 10:43:30 pm
I'd like more violent murder.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on July 01, 2010, 11:44:57 pm
Quiet Lush. That was perfect.

I just read the whole RP from start to finish. Absolutely loved it. Makes me wish I wasn't on the slug-boat Perphelion!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 01, 2010, 11:48:12 pm
Vote for me for Arc II! :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 02, 2010, 12:43:13 am
I could tell!  ;D I was just over there and I saw how we had over twice as many posts. Oh well. But thanks for the compliment, we here at Sidereal Hour do our best to present the optimal role playing experience.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on July 02, 2010, 03:16:33 am
ADVISOR's Report

The Stidurbian Affair

Team performed adequately given unexpected resistance and unorthodox team assignments. Combat situations handled well, stealth not a strong point. Four out of Five of the DiRossi success tenets satisfied. Recommend crew involved receive psychological evaluation to gauge the effects of the mission's distressing conclusion and develop a course of mitigatory action.

Notable Team Members:

Custodian Irkuff performed as well as could be expected given that he has no training at all and should not even have been assigned to the mission. A request has been filed for information regarding this crew assignment. If Irkuff is to be sent on further away missions he should at least be promoted to able crewman.

Deputy Security Chief Dubhglas Hay did not perform as expected, being impulsive, hotheaded and unwilling to listen to orders and advice. Officer Yas Colvero will not be punished for breach of protocol in dealing with the deputy chief and will in fact be recommended to replace Hay in the event of another display of poor performance.

Protocol Droid R5 seemed rather more capable in combat that one would expect of a beurocratic model. Scans are also showing anomalous energy readings inconsistent with R5 models. No doubt another unorthodox crew assignment form corporate. Nevertheless, performed above and beyond the call of duty, was instrumental to shutting down Asglot's contraband technology.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 02, 2010, 03:51:36 am
Yay for Meta-reviews!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on July 02, 2010, 05:25:05 am
ADVISOR's Report



Notable Team Members:

Custodian Irkuff performed as well as could be expected given that he has no training at all and should not even have been assigned to the mission. A request has been filed for information regarding this crew assignment. If Irkuff is to be sent on further away missions he should at least be promoted to able crewman.



LOL.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on July 02, 2010, 05:54:05 am
Yeah, thats just the character though. You did fine O :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on July 03, 2010, 05:09:37 pm
So I made a stridurban concept by request. >_>

Enjoy:

(http://i31.photobucket.com/albums/c390/Flisch/Artwork/Stridurbanconcept04.jpg)

Don't know yet if I will ever colour it.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 03, 2010, 05:12:48 pm
Nice! I love that!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Cyst on July 03, 2010, 08:34:36 pm
Name: Alexandre A. Archambault
Species: Human
Physical Description: Blonde hair and blue eyes. He is about 5'9" and 210 lbs. He is fairly muscular and his hair is crew cut.
Age: 30
Bio: Born on a small planet, Alexandre left home after failing to graduate from High School at the age of 22. He wandered the massive mountain ranges of his home planet and four years later signed himself to the planet's military. In the military he saw no action and quit on his 30th birthday. He was dropped off on a nearby planet and was lucky enough to become a crew member of the Sidereal Hour.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on July 03, 2010, 09:08:09 pm
Badger, the Sidereal Hour isn't picking up tourists.  You can't just "get on" it.  The entire crew is hand picked.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Cyst on July 03, 2010, 09:12:13 pm
Will fix.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on July 03, 2010, 09:30:20 pm
Well, there's still the problem of why he would be picked.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 03, 2010, 10:51:11 pm
$$   The Galactic Profit   $$
---

GalSen Inquiry: "Corporations Are OUT OF CONTROL"
Several Leading Companies Implicated

A recent inquiry by the Galactic Senate has singled out several of the largest corporations and labeled them as "out of control". This inquiry was launched by senior Senator Ivotek el'Irk of the Vitraxian Consortium. It is believed that his actions were in response to the destruction of a DiRossi research facility at the hands of Siaco mercenaries. Unsurprisingly, both organizations are at the top of the list of the galaxy's most irresponsible companies. And of course both are tied for first. Taken as a whole, the list is nearly a carbon copy of the TGP200 aggregate of top-performing business organizations. But what does it all mean? When reached for comment, Senator el'Irk's spokesperson said the following:

"The Senator believes strongly in ratcheting up corporate oversight in light of recent and past transgressions. It's a constant battle to keep regulations at a level that protects the public while allowing the corporate sector to flourish. Very few of the current Senators remember the last major market disruption and so this has of course led to the current lack of oversight. The Senator's goal is to help prevent the normal cycle of boom and bust from continuing. He wants to regulate before the crash, rather than after. This, he believes, is in the best interest of his constituents and the corporations serving them. The inquiry has made several recommendations that should help keep things at a manageable level and prevent any sort of crash. Continued prosperity is good for us all. And that is what the Senator will deliver."
~Savaad Tek (Spokesperson for Senator el'Irk)

We took some time to look over the inquiry's recommendations. First and foremost were several pages of friendly competition rules, the types that would prevent what those in the uninformed media see as open warfare between companies. We at The Galactic Profit think we speak for everyone when we say that this is a bad idea. How else will corporations be able to protect their assets from people and groups wishing them harm? The rest of the recommendations only get worse. Major cuts to salaries and huge boosts to benefits serve only to stifle corporate growth and the proposed tax hikes would kill fledgling businesses. To get a better read on how the major players in our industry are reacting to this inquiry, The Galactic Profit contacted Rejidad Ho of Siaco Investment Contractors (SIC) and Frederika Laas of the DiRossi Experimental Science Concern (DRE).

"Personally I think the Senator is getting a little out of touch with the way things are done nowadays. The years are obviously catching up with him. Did you see him at the GM's inauguration? He barely made it to the top of the Rotunda. Anyway, I don't think these new 'recommendations' are going to do much of anything. Really, if the Senator wants to make a difference he should be going after corporate criminals. Government has been asleep at the switch far too long. DiRossi has been running afoul of the law for over seventy years and the do-nothing government does nothing! Surprise! You want to stop the problems? I'll tell you how. Put Frederika Laas, Seffan Dretch, and that bucket of bolts Terry into a maximum security cell and throw away the key! It'd be paradise!"
~Rejidad Ho (SIC)


"No no no... it's all just a misconception. These 'conflicts' between corporations really have to do with lack of police enforcement on behalf of the government. Piracy has become a severe problem across civilized space and because the government does nothing, our vessels end up getting caught in the crossfire. Worse, sometimes that crossfire is from a competitor. It's a tragedy, plain and simple. There's nothing we can do about it unless government steps up and begins enforcing the law. Right now they want no part of it. Though, to be fair, some companies and their operators do less to keep these incidents from happening than others. Of course I mean companies like Siaco and managers like Rejidad Ho. They're only motivated by profit and not by what's best for their customers or employees. That's why for the next week, two percent of all proceeds from sales of Hazzazaf Energy Supplement will be going directly to our valued couriers that help get wonderful DiRossi products to our savvy and good-looking consumers as quickly as possible. It's something that I and both of my partners believe in. DiRossi; our concern is your concern."
~Frederika Laas (DRE)


Clearly these proposed changes are something that our industry is ready to fight. Just as the honorable Senator will do everything in his power to see these regulations pass. The next few years look to be very interesting and you can rest assured that The Galactic Profit will be there every step of the way to give you the news that pays. Until next time, invest wisely and keep your lawyer on speed dial.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Yuu on July 04, 2010, 12:09:31 am
Them corporate bodies and their power struggles...

Makes for excellent plot. :)


Makes me wish I wasn't on the slug-boat Perphelion!

Ouch.

/jk


In any case, you guys are awesome! I really loved the flow of this arc, 'twas fly! 8)

Good luck on the second arc! :)

Here's hoping Perihelion also manages to do a second one. Or at least finish the first... : p
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 06, 2010, 11:06:16 am
Alright! I'm back! Let's get this started! ;D

Also, in anticipation of future questions, yes, I have discussed using Lush's planet as a backdrop. The focus will move away quickly, but I wanted to help expand some back stories.


((Darn you, Pat, and your excellent worldbuilding / plot-developing techniques  ;) ))
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 06, 2010, 11:16:39 am
 :D

Let's get this show on the road! And if anyone needs any assistance or a proofreader, feel free to shoot me a PM or contact me in some other way.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 06, 2010, 11:48:57 am
Errr...

Unlock topic please?  :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 06, 2010, 12:07:40 pm
Sorry about that, my bad. All taken care of.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 06, 2010, 01:18:08 pm
Is the Galactic Ministry different than the Galactic Senate?

Otherwise, looks great!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 06, 2010, 01:23:11 pm
I don't know...

I'll just switch it to Senate to avoid confusion.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 06, 2010, 01:25:02 pm
Alrighty. Just wanted to check.

I'll get a post started now.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 06, 2010, 01:37:39 pm
God that sucked! Yeah guys, I'm back, and trust me I did not plan to be MIA for all that time. Hope you guys had a good weekend let's get in this !
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on July 06, 2010, 06:35:18 pm
I feel like ADVISOR, being a humble ship computer, probably won't have much of a role in this arc, so I'm going to play a different character for a change of pace if that's all fine and dandy.

Name: Ambassador Dapplings of Heliotrope
Species: Macaclo
Physical Description: Rather like a root vegetable crossed with a centipede crossed with a crustacean
Species Bio: The Macaclo are a capricious and advanced species. Despite being in posession of some advanced technology they are not a major power in the galaxy, mainly because it does not suit their interests. They do not usually set much store in planets, most of their population lives on large spaceships, which has allowed them to avoid getting involved in messy territorial wars. The Macaclo home-world had an absence of predators when they were evolving, but its ecosystem ensured sluggishness or being overly cautious would quickly lead to starvation, this, coupled with the fact that strictly speaking, from egg-sack to grave the Macaclo never physically develop beyond the level of juveniles means the Macaclo are largely fearless, easily bored, and insufferably childish.
Macaclo have used science to improve their natural bodies, expanding their natural ability to change colour to garish effect. Their senses are also enhanced, as is their capacity for experiencing pleasure and other emotions. A quirk of Macaclo culture is that they expect everyone they meet to name them, instead of the other way around. Ambassador Heliotrope adopted a single name mainly for convenience when dealing with other species and their bizarre self-naming practices.

Bio: Heliotrope grew up a typical Macaclo on a typical Macaclo mother-ship. He devoured several of his weaker siblings while still in his egg-sac, he hatched and spent a carefree few years swimming in the nursery mires with the other hatchlings, underwent a brief education in which most of the knowledge he was to require as an adult was subliminally inserted into his brain while he played funroms, frolicked in the various environments on board his ship for a few years, then he got bored and decided to be an ambassador. Why he is on Myrinoi is anyone's guess, since the Macaclo are not part of the Galactic Senate and have no vested interest or formal relations with the Phai.
(http://i111.photobucket.com/albums/n125/Krakowsam/onewholaughs.png)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 06, 2010, 06:37:00 pm
It's beautiful...

@_@
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on July 06, 2010, 07:05:06 pm
Querry!  When Zori is mentioning a trio, is she refering to the robot, the lady and the kratair?  If so, how does she know about them and should the rest of our characters know about them too?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 06, 2010, 07:08:57 pm
<_<

Yes! Read my first post of Arc II. She just read the lore that I posted in the OOC. ;D

Some people may already know. But she didn't.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on July 06, 2010, 07:18:43 pm
Oh, right.  I forgot about that.  I sort of Tl;Dr'd it since I was just skimming though the forum at work.  I'll have to give it a quick read then.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 06, 2010, 07:37:44 pm
Yeah I know how that can be sometimes. Lore is optional, after all.

>_>

Which is why I put all the answers there. kekekeke

*runs away*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on July 06, 2010, 08:05:33 pm
Irkkuf is going to be here soon, but I need more time. PM me when you guys need me.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 06, 2010, 08:22:40 pm
You need to be able to keep up with the game, Oct. We can't tell you when we need you. You have to put your character into the game yourself.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 06, 2010, 08:59:30 pm
Likewise when it comes up, do remember Hay's Stingers got a boost at the end of Arc I. How much exactly will be thought of when the time comes, bu just know that if they seem slightly more powerful, it's not an Ass Pull.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 06, 2010, 09:10:10 pm
Did they need to be more powerful? Whatever, as long as they aren't godmoddy it's cool. And you're good for it. Don't worry about it.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 06, 2010, 09:38:55 pm
Well seeing as how this is the murder arc, I wanted to see some more murder.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 06, 2010, 09:39:37 pm
I don't know what that means.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 06, 2010, 09:45:07 pm
Let's just say there will be bloodshed. I'll see to that personally.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 06, 2010, 09:49:58 pm
Word.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 06, 2010, 11:08:53 pm
Let's just say there will be bloodshed. I'll see to that personally.

And seeing as how the last villain wiped out three planets...
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on July 07, 2010, 03:19:56 am
Well, I won't have access to the computer for maybe a day or two. And I don't know if I can get around to make a post today, so... I'll jump in later. Don't blow up the ship while I'm away. :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 07, 2010, 12:58:58 pm
Just to chime in, because I hear a few things that are setting off red flags (though I'm probably wrong)...

Try not make the entire point of your arc to one-up whatever happened in the previous arc. There is definitely a certain level of "I've gotta do better than the last arc", but if body count is all you're using to determine that your arc is going to be lackluster. And I only say that because the whole notion of bloodbaths and piles of bodies is all that you guys seem to be talking about.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on July 07, 2010, 01:42:37 pm
Any chance I can join in on this? ;D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 07, 2010, 01:47:28 pm
Absolutely! Write up a character and hop in.

It'll be nice to have someone to talk to who is also doubling up. :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on July 07, 2010, 02:37:06 pm
Ok, I'll be playing a freelance journalist.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 07, 2010, 02:47:08 pm
Cool! Can't wait to see the bio!

And we can just say he didn't get randomly picked for the first mission but that he or she had been on the ship the whole time. So don't fry your brain trying to figure out how they got there.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: MetallicDragon on July 08, 2010, 09:04:11 am
I would like to join in as well!

I'm thinking of playing a human technician, with some psionic abilities to augment his technical prowess ( like telekinetics, weak reading of surface thoughts or emotions, stuff like that). How does that sound?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on July 08, 2010, 10:40:13 am
Oh well. It had to come up sooner or later.

*braces for argument*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: MetallicDragon on July 08, 2010, 11:14:00 am
Oh well. It had to come up sooner or later.

*braces for argument*

Are psionic powers a no-no? I was having second thoughts about them myself...
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 08, 2010, 11:15:48 am
IMHO screw it. If it gets to godmoddy we can nerf it or tack on some drawbacks. Let it ride;you seem cool enough.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 08, 2010, 11:36:47 am
No magic in a world without magic. That is all.

However, I thought of doing an arc on a planet where somehow the magnetosphere intersponds with the whosits-layer of the outer hard crust and it causes the people on the planet to get what could be called superpowers... but only while they're on that planet. So don't throw away your superpower ideas yet, I've got something in the works for you. :D

But yeah, nobody has special powers otherwise.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: MetallicDragon on July 08, 2010, 01:10:11 pm
Name: Isaak Turend
Age: 27
Species: Human
Bio: Born on a small colonial world on the edge of civilized space, Isaak's childhood world was one of eking out what food he could from the meager crops that were grown there. Traders rarely came to this desolate planet, and all the colony ships had long been transformed into various structures and refineries. His parents long dead, Isaak was facing a dull life as a farmer. He hated everything about this planet. Since he was very young he would spend whatever he could spare on various items from the traders: little gadgets, books, stories from other worlds. In this way, he taught himself many things, mostly of a technical nature. When he was 13, luck struck and he found an old, wrecked ship and spent the next 5 years finding the necessary parts to repair it, and finally get off the forsaken rock he had known as home.

He spent the next few years wandering from planet to planet, barely managing to acquire enough money for food, let alone parts to keep aged his ship from falling apart, until finally it just couldn't fly anymore. He found himself on a relatively populated planet where he developed a reputation as being able to fix nearly any piece of technology, no matter how advanced or alien it was, from fusion cores to laser rifles and everything in between. Rumors said he could take an object apart, reassemble it and understand almost perfectly how it functioned. His drive, once again, became to acquire enough money to either buy his own ship or attain passage to a better world. Once again luck struck, and he was chosen to be a crew of the Sidereal Hour.

Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on July 08, 2010, 01:32:46 pm
Interesting.  I like it.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 08, 2010, 01:33:11 pm
Looks fantastic, Dragon! You're free to jump into the RP whenever you're ready. :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 08, 2010, 03:20:50 pm
I hope I accurately described the Drill-thingy correctly. It works by sucking out the innards of a planet and shooting them into space for easy harvest right?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 08, 2010, 04:06:30 pm
Hey Oct... what are you doing? The story is going this way and you're going that way.

All you've accomplished so far is to totally isolate your character from any of the goings on. It's all about him and not about how he fits into the story. You need to write the larger story, not just your character's story. And really, the way he's acting is just plain annoying. Normal people (or aliens) with any sense of social constructs don't just blurt out random things like that. It sounds like he's drunk or trying to bug people.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 08, 2010, 04:17:42 pm
Darn. Oh, and in a bit of world building here PD is what powers anti-gravity, it's pretty much a cross between Unobtainium from Avatar and Nth Metal from the DCU (Only it mostly occurs in dust form.)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 08, 2010, 04:18:27 pm
He actually comes off as autistic.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 08, 2010, 04:22:09 pm
Shock and/or awe.

Also, is that what PD does? Good to know I guess. But... I still have no idea what Hay just said. And the post looks very rushed. Come on, Lush, you were doing really well for a while there. Don't let up now. I've seen your other RP work. You're not skimping out on us, are you? :P


**EDIT**
Who has an energy crisis? Why is it happening? How many are impacted by it? The last arc just flooded the market with fuel.

Maybe write up some lore for the things you can't really say in-character.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 08, 2010, 05:14:43 pm
It was a continuation of the same thought from the previous post, breaking up the quote would just be egregious but hey FREESTYLE.





MYRINOI



Founded: 1806
Independence Day: December 31th (13/31-IFC)
Primary Import: Weapons
Primary Export: PD (Solid Forme)
Racial Demography: 93% PHAI-6% HUMAN-1% DRASIL-0.5%-OTHERS (VANIR not included)


Inhabited for centuries by the native Drasil, Myrinoi was first colonized by the great generation ships X12 years ago. The genetic augmentation that was given to the immigrants (short stature, modified melanin, over sensitive ears) being the first in a long line of deliberate post humanism in Earth-based colonization efforts. Myrinoi, when it first joined the Galactic Senate, the first Phai who was appointed a seat in the Galactic Ministry would go on record as having said, "Hwa isti withr alnaz þa þakjan unda skit?”** The highly Nordo-Germanic culture of the Phai can be seen as brooding towards some though comedic do to their small size and violet skin tone. Myrinoi played a significant war in the Unification Wars as dust-form Pyske Dūst was the only economical way to preserve stable anti-gravity tech, which was the primary mechanic of the age (Modern Ship propulsion, kinetic weapons and the domestic application of Gravity on space -Ships all originated in this era.) As result Myrinoi gained a lot more economic pull in the Senate, whilst still being severely abused by several companies most notably Dos-Iris Clemency Expert INA and it's nigh-dictatorial CEO/CFO Trinyous Sequentius. As a result there has been much stress between the planet, the people and corporate developers with tensions rising to the point that the recently flooded energy market has caused a bout of deflation and renewed interests in "transferring" over to PD. With this new position of power there is no telling what my happen…



* The 31st day was part of an extended holiday celebrated on Myrinoi, December has only 29 days and 30 on leap years.
** "What's with all the togas and ****?" in native Phai.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 08, 2010, 05:54:14 pm
Hold on hold on...

You're saying that the Phai are the only source of this dust that powers anti-gravity? And that, despite the Galactic Senate having already been in place (which implies years upon years of established galactic travel), there was no other cost-effective way to conduct space flight? Is that what you're saying? Because that's really stretching it. It's absolutely illogical. Though, to be fair, I'm not entirely sure if that is what you meant to say... because I can barely read your post.

What are you doing Lush? I can't figure out why your writing is so articulate in The Message, Galdeen First Contact (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17312.msg795497#msg795497) and yet so lacking in this RP. You need to explain this.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: art_is_a_mathform on July 08, 2010, 06:32:38 pm
Accepting new participants? Maybe a Reen?
Don't mean to intrude...
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 08, 2010, 06:47:10 pm
Absolutely! We've just started Arc II so there's still time to jump in.

Check the first post of the OOC topic (this topic) for the rules and the character submission template.  The one big thing you need to know is that if you're using an old race, you have to bring them in with a blank slate. Also, no OOC chatter in the in-character topic. Otherwise, submit your character and we'll take a look at it and you'll be good to go! :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on July 08, 2010, 06:47:53 pm
Name: Keel
Age: 35
Species: Komodile. A large crocodillian species derived from Earth, spliced and modified to give them their partial albinoism, ridiculous antennae, and bioluminescence. They were introduced into normal society after their approval for racial independence, releasing them from their captivity from genetic experimentation, which was deemed illegal in most interracial systems and colonies.

Bio: Keel was born and raised in the largest interracial cities in the galaxy. Evidently he lived quite a colorful life in the short years. He took up journalism in the recent years after rehabilitation. He was once a rowdy drunkard, now he lives as a freelance journalist. He wasn't quite sure why he picked it, but he felt that a career in journalism would allow him to see the galaxy, and pry into the world of conspiracy and secrecy. He tends poke in on anyone's business, always taking notes on his tablet. But all in the interest of finding the truth. His career went off on a shaky start, but once he got the call to be aboard the Sidereal Hour, he hoped he would find the story of his life. He always likes to keep on a pair of sunglasses, perhaps as a way to conceal his emotions. He never tells anyone why. And he does occasionally smoke a cigarette. Though he's not too happy about Sidereal Hour health regulations.
(http://img18.imageshack.us/img18/4935/keelclred.png)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 08, 2010, 06:51:14 pm
APPROVE A THOUSAND TIMES!

But yeah, looks fantastic. And the bio is pretty great, too! Just to point something out that Gec did really well. The way he used Earth is about how we should use it. You can mention it and whatnot but otherwise we're not going to go there in-depth, at least not yet. So nicely done, man. I think Keel and Zori may get along very well, as they both seem interested in pushing through all the secrets and lies.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 08, 2010, 07:15:48 pm
Hold on hold on...

You're saying that the Phai are the only source of this dust that powers anti-gravity? And that, despite the Galactic Senate having already been in place (which implies years upon years of established galactic travel), there was no other cost-effective way to conduct space flight? Is that what you're saying? Because that's really stretching it. It's absolutely illogical. Though, to be fair, I'm not entirely sure if that is what you meant to say... because I can barely read your post.

What are you doing Lush? I can't figure out why your writing is so articulate in The Message, Galdeen First Contact (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17312.msg795497#msg795497) and yet so lacking in this RP. You need to explain this.

No, the dust was just the popular resource of the time, like coal or oil. The Senate existed before then but it was in the midst of a PD based technological revolution very recently so Myrinoi's importance gained a boost.


And Kwik-ass pic Gec.  8)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on July 08, 2010, 07:29:59 pm
Cool.
That 'gator is awesome. I cannot describe its full power in words.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 08, 2010, 07:52:10 pm
Hold on hold on...

You're saying that the Phai are the only source of this dust that powers anti-gravity? And that, despite the Galactic Senate having already been in place (which implies years upon years of established galactic travel), there was no other cost-effective way to conduct space flight? Is that what you're saying? Because that's really stretching it. It's absolutely illogical. Though, to be fair, I'm not entirely sure if that is what you meant to say... because I can barely read your post.

What are you doing Lush? I can't figure out why your writing is so articulate in The Message, Galdeen First Contact (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17312.msg795497#msg795497) and yet so lacking in this RP. You need to explain this.

No, the dust was just the popular resource of the time, like coal or oil. The Senate existed before then but it was in the midst of a PD based technological revolution very recently so Myrinoi's importance gained a boost.

And what of the second half of my complaint? Do you have an answer? Much of this could have been avoided if you retained the same level of competence you appear to show in other RPs.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on July 08, 2010, 08:27:23 pm
"Hmm, I didn't know they allowed journalist here, and aren't your kind the more party hardy type?" Snarked Hay. "Well, in any case I'm Deputy Director of Security Hay and I'l be free to answer any of your questions." "Within reason." She  quickly amended.

Lush, if you could, delete this portion in bold. I think it's best that you leave out the preconceived nature of the Komodile, given that this is a new universe and a fairly new face.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 08, 2010, 10:49:57 pm
In regards to the picture Gec put into the RP topic.

He's the only person allowed to do that. :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on July 09, 2010, 06:22:31 am
Awesome Gec.  Awesome.  Also, that picture of Keel is your new forum avatar.  Make it so.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: art_is_a_mathform on July 09, 2010, 04:14:40 pm
Name: Obfuscated Beneficence (OB for short)

Age: Freshly manufactured (as long as a Reen is under 30, age is largely irrelevant)

Species: Reen. A machine species governed by a super AI. Reen drones such as OB appear as long metallic cylinders with sic crab-like legs protruding from the bottom. The sides of the cylinder open up to reveal small hands attached to the body via thin cables. The hands hover around, but need the cables for power and control. They have three red triangular eyes on the front of the cylinder and two wiry antennae on the top left. A drone can also store quit a few tools. OB would likely contain various medical implements and supplies.

Bio: Constructed solely for the purpose of accompanying the Sidereal Hour. His primary function is as a doctor/surgeon for organics, primarily to gain new information on organic biology that may be disseminated through the hive upon his return. He has some skill in electronics and software, though only as a side effect of his own mechanical nature. OB himself is extremely rational and curious. Interests include conversation with organics, observation of organics, inspection of organics and repair of organics. He is fascinated by all the problems with organics, and has a slight superiority complex. While most Reen have no gender, OB is defined as male to make it easier for organics to relate with him.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 09, 2010, 08:28:21 pm
Looks good! See you in the game.

We don't really have a doctor yet that knows alien biology so OB will be a very logical addition to the away team. Especially after the crapfest that was Mission One. :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 09, 2010, 08:30:30 pm
 :'( Better than that other [CU] Rp was was it's name again? Voy...





















...age...







of something?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: art_is_a_mathform on July 09, 2010, 09:30:38 pm
Looks good! See you in the game.

We don't really have a doctor yet that knows alien biology so OB will be a very logical addition to the away team. Especially after the crapfest that was Mission One. :D

Yep, I specifically picked an unfilled role so that I wasn't that guy, trying to horn in on someone's job. That and I liked the irony of a machine that repaired organics.

EDIT: How do I introduce myself? Do I just appear, or dock in a personal craft, or, or...?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 09, 2010, 09:38:29 pm
We can just assume that OB has been on the Sidereal Hour the whole time but that he wasn't chosen for the first mission. There are probably a lot of people on board so it's not unlikely that the team haven't met him yet, since it's still very early on in the trip. We'll say that due to some of the complications of the first missions, OB was chosen to join the team for the second mission because he has knowledge of xenobilogy. Or something like that. :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 09, 2010, 10:03:25 pm
Ah the retcon, where would we be without you?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 09, 2010, 10:28:03 pm
It's not a retcon at all.

There's probably over 100 people on board the Sidereal Hour and they've only been out for about a week. Maybe less.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 09, 2010, 10:34:59 pm
Sure.  ;)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 10, 2010, 12:08:02 am
 :)

You're absolutely right!

And hey, I wanna see your next post equal to or better than your work in The Message, Galdeen First Contact. Alright?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on July 10, 2010, 01:42:57 am
Now I must bring up something with Dr. Octagonapus, this post (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17260.msg797886#msg797886) in particular. Now it is my understanding that a key important part in good story-telling, you need to have good character development. Moments where one character must interact with another privately to create a mood or intimate setting. That which I tried to create with Pat and his character Zori. We directed the story as though they left the rest of the group, on an entirely different side of the ship. And none of the others could have preconceived that the two of them would be in a private, uninterrupted one-on-one dialogue.

(http://img22.imageshack.us/img22/8117/siderealmoment1.png)

At this point, me and Pat were hoping this was a way to deepen our characters, foreshadowing the mysterious events to occur, give them story goals, and allow them to get to know each other. These were the things I hoped would flow in this particular part of the story. A part that me and Pat would close up ourselves without anyone getting involved. That is until Irkkuf shows up. Without warning, without any explanation how he knew they were there, or knew what we were talking about as he barged in the room.

(http://img268.imageshack.us/img268/7973/siderealmoment2.gif)

The moment was ruined of course, which is disappointing to say the least. Now I know I really haven't been reading up on any of the other RPs here to be honest. And I rarely ever do. I mean, this is actually the first time I am playing a major, long-term role in any RP. This is my first serious RP. And I have to tell you, this is no way to tell a story. That's not how it's done.

I really don't know what you were trying to accomplish Doc, whether you just wanted to drive your character into any moment at any time. But I think it could have handled without the interruption. I think you could have still interacted with those in the cafeteria. There's nothing wrong with having two dialogues occurring simultaneously. I think it would have been better if the other players had someone to talk to while Zori and Keel were gone. You don't have to tag along anywhere were there is active dialogue.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: art_is_a_mathform on July 10, 2010, 01:59:37 am
Gec drew an entire scene in five colors.

It reminds me of those old noir movies. The black and white ones, where some detective with a fedora and a gruff voice talks to some lady wearing sequins and long white gloves and a boa while she takes a puff off one of those long cigarettes and a piano plays in the background. That's amazing.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 10, 2010, 02:50:58 am
Gec, you have to stop doing that, you're making us blush.  :-[
Gec drew an entire scene in five colors.

Four  by my count.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on July 10, 2010, 04:28:44 am
Quote from: Gec
-snip-
1. I see your point, and truthfully, I didn't know that's where you were going with it. I'll fix the post.
2. That flash animation was just...  ;D :D ;D :D You should get a win for that.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 10, 2010, 04:44:53 am
1. 'S'okay Doc. I've been there you'll get better.
2. Sorry dude,  it doesn't work that way. Believe me I've tried.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on July 10, 2010, 08:08:54 am
It's a step in the right direction Dr.Oc. Thanks for undertsanding! ;D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 10, 2010, 08:55:01 am
Hey, anyone seen Darth? We need an infusion of plot, stat.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on July 10, 2010, 01:06:11 pm
I love you Gec.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: art_is_a_mathform on July 10, 2010, 02:11:24 pm
Four  by my count.

Five by my count.

Black, grey, white, brown and blue.

I even double-checked my math on my fingers.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on July 10, 2010, 02:27:59 pm
I see numerous shades. Five colors they are not. A color is something like 100-100-100. Those are many variations  :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: art_is_a_mathform on July 10, 2010, 03:36:43 pm
I see numerous shades. Five colors they are not. A color is something like 100-100-100. Those are many variations  :P

No need to get artsy. There are numerous shades of five colors.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 11, 2010, 02:05:42 pm
I counted Grey as Black/White; primary colors only you see.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 11, 2010, 02:09:41 pm
:)

Yes, there are many colors. Uh... but not many story posts. In fact there's only been one and it was six days ago. We need to find Darth.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 11, 2010, 08:19:38 pm
I'm here! I'm here! Left for the weekend, sorry.  :)

Writing things up now.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 12, 2010, 09:01:26 am
Erm... nobody knows that Zori smokes except for Keel. It was kind of supposed to be a subtle indicator of her extreme distress over the situation she is in. You know, a crack in the facade of perfection that she puts up?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 12, 2010, 12:40:17 pm
Ugh! Subtext reading, the bane of RPers everywhere.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 12, 2010, 12:41:34 pm
<_<

What? No that's totally wrong, Lush.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Haseri on July 12, 2010, 12:43:29 pm
I thought subtext was good.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 12, 2010, 12:44:53 pm
IT IS! It's very good!

It's our bread and butter!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 12, 2010, 12:46:22 pm
Oh non subtex is good. It's just reading it properly that can be a pain in the ass.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on July 12, 2010, 01:45:06 pm
No, not really.  I have never had that problem.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on July 12, 2010, 03:15:18 pm
So yeah I'm back.
Looks like I didn't miss much anything. ;D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: art_is_a_mathform on July 12, 2010, 03:34:38 pm
Erm... nobody knows that Zori smokes except for Keel. It was kind of supposed to be a subtle indicator of her extreme distress over the situation she is in. You know, a crack in the facade of perfection that she puts up?

Okie dokie, it's been fixed.

I just figured such a thing would be hard to hide from a robot space doctor.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 12, 2010, 11:53:28 pm
I just figured such a thing would be hard to hide from a robot space doctor.

(http://img37.imageshack.us/img37/474/ttrytorun.jpg)

Mr. Eastwood thinks robot-anything is a poor excuse to know everything.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: art_is_a_mathform on July 13, 2010, 12:05:48 am
Mr. Eastwood thinks robot-anything is a poor excuse to know everything.

Well to be fair, it is a medical condition!

I remember when me and some friends watched Gran Torino. For weeks, the standard response to any question was either a straight-faced, "Bang," or an agitated Eastwood grumble.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 13, 2010, 12:38:27 pm
Lush, now's your time to shine!

Also, I hope the description of Myrinoi was what you were looking for.  :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 13, 2010, 01:26:26 pm
*fingers crossed*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 15, 2010, 08:15:51 pm



Okay so I think I got it right, sorry about the abnormal entrance but I thought it was appropriate given the species, Shea is the kind of desk clerk I’d think would be our guide during this so DG you take control of him, this is your plot after all. I also hope you don’t mind me naming the senate in full, I thought the name gave it a “Classical “feel.” Oh well whats’ done is done. Take us away!


*The literal translation of the Germanic text there is “Blessings to your blood.”
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 16, 2010, 08:17:45 am
Ohhh! Fun fun fun, Lush!

Though I'm not calling it "the People’s Quantum Republic". Not in this lifetime. :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Haseri on July 16, 2010, 08:19:05 am
Pat, are you just deleting your then reposting?

Why not just edit?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 16, 2010, 08:26:22 am
I'm trying to get the wording right on my post. And I hate the "edited by" line. It's distracting and looks messy. Plus, posting up a new message means the people that need to see it will probably see it. Editing does reapply the "New" tag to a post, but I find that it gets ignored since it tends to be down the list.

Besides, I've been doing it for years and nobody seems to have a problem with it.


**EDIT**
Looking at my planner... you haven't posted in the Perihelion RP in two weeks. That's a long time to be inactive. Everything alright?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 16, 2010, 09:30:16 am
And people think I'm  an egomaniac. :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 16, 2010, 10:37:07 am
Hrm... can you please stop taking shots at the RP and the people in it? Please?

I'm trying not to slow down the RP every time you post but you keep making mistakes and doing poor work. And now I'm the one that's now slowing things down. You know how I solve that problem? I follow through with the group vote that was put on hold and have you removed. Stop jerking us around and play the game to the level we know you can play it.


**EDIT**
What can I do to get you to write with the same eloquence that you've done in other RPs? If you're going to take a leading role in this along with Darth you've got to be at your best. Or you can let her do it and you can play a leading role when you're ready (which is when the players vote for you to have a villain arc) instead of co-oping another person's.


**EDIT EDIT**
You know what, am I the only one having a problem here? The rest of you tell me if I am and I'll be quiet. I mean, I'm sorry that I'm now slowing the game down. If I'm making something out of nothing please tell me.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Krakow Sam on July 16, 2010, 10:56:41 am
No, I agree Pat.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on July 16, 2010, 12:03:13 pm
Well, in all fairness, Lush was given a second and even a third chance. Apparently he didn't use it, so I guess there is only one reasonable solution.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 16, 2010, 02:02:57 pm
What are you talking about? I explained my reasoning, gave you a heads up first and used my knowledge of the setting to help out DG and move the plot along. You even said "fun" what is the problem?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 16, 2010, 03:06:38 pm
I honestly don't know what everyone's getting worked up about. Is it due to Lush's latest post having formatting problems?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 16, 2010, 04:41:19 pm
It's not so much formatting issues, as it is the repeated disregard for our advice and a general sense of Lush taking advantage of the chances we keep giving. Lush improves and then it drops off again. Moreover, many of Lush's posts from other RPs have been making the rounds and they clearly show MUCH better performance than what we're seeing in the Sidereal Hour RP. It gives the sense that either Lush doesn't care about the game or the players enough to make a change, or that Lush is messing with us. Lush has said that there is no nefarious activity going on, that it's all on the level. And I believe that. I do not think Lush is messing with us, though sometimes it seems like it.

But the issue is very frustrating and harmful to morale. It's tough to write when you're dreading what someone's next post is going to do to the story. This is not a campaign against Lush, though I know some people aren't exactly big fans. What this is about is making improvements to noticeable and serious flaws. And really, the changes aren't that difficult. It's not hard to read and write more slowly and it's not hard to proof read.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 16, 2010, 06:16:09 pm
I really don't see what you're talking about. I haven't gotten any major complaints (aside from you and just now Flisch)  since the vote.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on July 16, 2010, 06:55:09 pm
I really can't see what's going on either. I do recognize Lush's need to improve, but I saw nothing that really stood out to me why it was a bad post. It seems to me you're putting higher expectations.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 16, 2010, 10:16:47 pm
It's not just one post. It's the spectrum of posts and attitude.

The reason you're not getting complaints, Lush, is because people don't want to talk to you. You ignore them and you've been doing so for quite a while. People aren't just telling you stuff to bug you. They're trying to give you advice, some better than others, so that you can continue to play. And they do it because you have promise. But when you ignore them you not only fail to heed good advice, you spurn the people you're playing with. Your reputation is all you have. You have to keep it good or else you'll be dogged for the rest of your days.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: art_is_a_mathform on July 17, 2010, 12:22:32 am
As Hay's personal craft landed, she reflected on her mixed history with her people; this would be her first extended contact with her own race since she was made to guard the Galactic Chancellor. The resulting fallout of her not-so-graceful removal from the program was encouragement for an early retirement.

As she came down to the central plaza, Hay happened upon another member of her species: one Shea M-kaan. An aid to the current representative of the Phai to the Galactic Senate, he would be providing the escort to the main entrance.

"Blōdum tō iwwaz blodam, Sister Hay. I trust your commute was pleasant?" he stated with an air of faint regality.

"Blōdum tō iwwaz blodam, Brother Shea, and you know it was far from it."

"Ah yes, a bit of turbulence, what with your estranged home world declaring independence, wouldn't you say? Fight for the freedom of the Phai, hmm?"

"More like the freedom to manipulate an energy crisis by withholding the Dust and pushing your luck."

Irked at Hay's comment, Shea avoided brushed it off. "Well then, shall we meet your party?"

Zipping through the annals of the great arboreal forest, Hay and the diplomatic entourage approached the main party, to which Shea announced his greeting. "Ahem! By the order of Raudaz the Red, Gelwaz the Shining and Blaewaz the Blue, you are all cordially invited to the administering of the negotiations between the Free Planet of the Phai and the Senate of the Galactic Republic, to be given posthaste."

Removing his formal tone he amended, "Follow me."

FTFY

Alright, so, I'm the new guy and don't want to step on anyone's toes, but I made some changes. I took care to format and space properly, as well as correct spelling. I removed the special characters from names that may come up frequently for ease of use. I'm not an English major, but I think I cleared up some of the grammar. I simplified some confusing phrases (although I couldn't really understand the intent of a few). I also tried to give the dialog some "oomph" with punctuation and rearrangement. I tried to keep my own writing "style" out of it as best I could.

Sorry if I'm being mean...
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Raz on July 17, 2010, 01:04:00 am
Spacing it like that is unnecessary, I don't write like that. Just needs much more substance.

edit - And I already told Lush to stop putting quotes next to quotes with nothing in between. Doing like /"I did this" "You did what?!"/ is BAD.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Haseri on July 17, 2010, 04:38:39 am
art's post is easier to read, if from a formatting point.

But that's porbably just me, as I have proper paragraph formatting drilled into me.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 17, 2010, 09:14:27 am
Yeah we probably all learned different ways to format. And each one is definitely better than a big block of text. They always told me to start a new line whenever someone speaks.

Also, one thing we need to be considerate of is that Darth has called upon Lush to help her out with the arc. At least that's how it seems. Now, it's not a get out of jail free card, but it can't be ignored. But on the other side of the coin we're now considering a third second chance. And that's almost comical.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 18, 2010, 02:16:34 am
I don't know. At this point both Darth Gec and art have given the same "Iffy but not atrocious " attitude. I respect you Pat, but I'm just not getting what you're talking about.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 18, 2010, 08:57:12 am
To be fair, they probably have not been let down as much as I have. I've set aside a lot of my own time to help you, only to have you ignore me and backpedal on the work we've done. Just three days ago I extended my hand to you again trying to help, offering up whatever I can to make this right and you totally ignored me and instead went on to insult me and the people we work with. Look, I'm trying to find as many solutions as I can that will let you stay in the game... but you're going to have to actually make some changes for that to happen. And so far most people I've spoken to has agreed with me on that point (the others want you out). They don't want to kick you out, but you make it very difficult for them and myself to keep working to that end.

And the biggest issue you have (and this came out of one of my discussions with another player) is that you're too ambitious and unwilling to listen to critiques. Here's where the buck ends... you're in our house and so you're going to play by our rules. I know you have tons of ideas swimming around in your head and all sorts of ways you like to do things, but until you've earned the clout to be able to try to change things, you have to play by our rules. And that's the same in just about every other thing you're going to attempt to do in life. The system isn't designed to work against you but until you've proven yourself, you can't change the system. And some of the stuff you try to do is simply outside of what you're able to do. And this is because you haven't proven yourself to the community to be able to call the shots. At least not yet.

And just to add, the people who can make stuff happen didn't just walk into that position. I've got over a decade of experience with these things and at Gaming Steve I've been doing RPs almost non-stop for the last five years. I'm not always right but I have a good idea about what I'm talking about and I like to think I'm probably the nicest and most forgiving authority figure you're going to meet. I'm doing everything I can to keep you in this game so forgive me if I'm a little ticked off at you for the way things have gone.

You know... if you'd accepted help the first few times it was offered the story would be different. And if you'd abided by the terms of the deal we made, things would be different. It's just very hard to find the will to give you yet another chance when you've shown that you aren't going to play the game. So look, I'll give you another chance. But if you accept it you're going to do the work. I know you love the RPs. In fact you probably love them as much as I do. But you're going about it the wrong way. We've had members in the past that are exactly like you you, Lush. They love the RPs so much and have such a strong drive to play them that sometimes they found themselves being blinded but their own desire to play and it ultimately destroyed them. You don't want your name up on the wall of shame and I don't want your name up there and I doubt most of the other players want you up there because it's just more annoyance. Do it right before you try to do it better.

You're free to continue posting and doing your thing. If you need to, I strongly encourage you to send me your posts before you post them. I'll gladly look over them and proof them for you.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on July 20, 2010, 08:39:59 pm
I just got back from vacation. Hey! Looks like I missed a lot! O_O Would it maybe be possible for someone to give a quick summary of the goings-on in this RP?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 21, 2010, 12:09:11 am
Ah you didn't miss a ton. Basically the team has been sent down to the Phai homeworld to act as a neutral party in a Senate negotiation. Zori got in a fight with one of the diplomats... and now we're walking! :D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 21, 2010, 03:31:59 am
One of those diplomats was what would of  happened if The Joker and Chthulu had a baby who grew up to be a  masochistic child molester.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on July 22, 2010, 04:22:44 pm
There we go, lets kick this back into gear!

Description of the grand meeting hall taken lovingly from Lush, with some edits.  :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 22, 2010, 07:50:13 pm
Nice work, Darth! Let's get this party started! Woo woo!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 23, 2010, 09:52:57 pm
Heading out to the beach! I'll be back on Monday or Tuesday. Keep up the great work, guys. :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 29, 2010, 11:50:07 am
Dohohoho! Nobody posted!

That means someone dies. ;)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on July 29, 2010, 12:39:12 pm
Please don't kill me! *hides under a box*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 29, 2010, 12:41:52 pm
Nah it's cool. We just need to reaffirm who's playing and maybe send out some reminder PMs. That should get the game back on track.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on July 29, 2010, 12:43:39 pm
Well I am still in thats for sure
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on July 29, 2010, 01:23:11 pm
I was incredibly busy the last few days, but now everything's over, so I should be able to make some posts. =D
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on July 29, 2010, 02:36:23 pm
I'm still in. I just was going to wait until delegations began so my character can start asking questions.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on July 31, 2010, 03:59:11 pm
Yo folks! Check this post (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=8297.msg802599#msg802599) and tell us what you think. It directly impacts players of this RP and the Perihelion RP.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on July 31, 2010, 07:01:51 pm
Kean and Kel? Greayt refernce! When portraying the Phai just thin Celtic Beserkers crossed with Nordic Viking Raiders, only they're little purple fairies.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 01, 2010, 01:55:38 pm
Hey Darth! You really have to post more often. Like right now. :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on August 01, 2010, 02:25:24 pm
Dun dun dun....

Sorry about the wait.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on August 01, 2010, 07:06:01 pm
So when will this episode be over? I've been gone for a while, and now I can post for a week or two.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 01, 2010, 07:06:40 pm
This current episode is just starting. You're still good to insert your character if you want. This is literally the last opportunity to do so for this arc though.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on August 01, 2010, 08:31:03 pm
Where exactly does it start?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 01, 2010, 08:39:54 pm
If you go to the Information Station (link in the first post), you can find the beginning of Arc II (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17260.msg797345#msg797345) without much fuss. :)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Kitkat on August 01, 2010, 08:43:04 pm
Six pages!? Oh dear. I really don't think that I can keep up with the RP if I don't get to it immediately. I really want to, but at the rate it's going, and by the normal run time, I'll probably have to disappear during the climax anyway, what with me going away for a week again in a week, for two weeks.

Man, having a life is tough!  ;)
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 02, 2010, 06:06:19 am
Who's playing the attackers? Or are they player controlled NPCs?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on August 02, 2010, 08:08:32 am
I'm playing them for the most part, since they are the villains *spoiler alert*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 02, 2010, 10:30:21 am
What are they going to do to us? *cowers*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 02, 2010, 05:18:14 pm
As a note on the weapons, since Dust has antigravity properties, mixing it to a weapons ore makes it lighter.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on August 02, 2010, 05:25:05 pm
Um... Lush, while its good that you're moving the story along, and I don't mind having a few of my guys killed, could you delete your post for just a moment so I can bring them in properly and give them a better introduction. You can save your post, it honestly won't need much re-working plot-wise, but I want to be the one to introduce them, as they aren't just random assassins.

EDIT: In the meantime... ah, crud... um... assume the Phai and the enemy are staring each other down? It might just be better if we wait for Lush on this.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on August 02, 2010, 05:53:15 pm
I'll save Lush's post here.

As the enemy forces swarmed in through the Senate gaurded entrances through the tree a large force of internal gaurds fell. As the sparse defense fell the attackers flooded into the meeting hall. But as the assassins soon learned, the Dust-laced weapons of the Phai were far from ceremonial. A full swarm of a hundred Phai swarmed there sacred hall: acting as a storm of pain and death. Exposed eyes were flown clear throughn microblasters popped out brains through the eardrum, temples were bypassed like butter with spears.

" I iwwaz Dust screamed the cheifs. Under this coil of blood Hay made her move.

"Come on guys let's move it,move it you to stretch!" As she cleared her group safely to the escape, she noticed the clingly diplomat from early under an upturned table. "Oh ****."
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 02, 2010, 06:22:29 pm
Yeah, I thought the ball was a bit early;its why I asked Patn but this is awkward. Why don't we just pretend we did the thing until I can get to a Laptop or a Mod to do it.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 02, 2010, 06:55:49 pm
its why I asked Patn but this is awkward.

Huh? Did you want to ask me something or was that a reference to something else?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 02, 2010, 06:57:34 pm
Seven posts ago.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on August 02, 2010, 08:27:57 pm
Curses! Why doesn't the English language have a gender-neutral pronoun that doesn't imply non-sentience and isn't normally used as a plural!?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on August 02, 2010, 08:53:21 pm
I have done it once again through the use of the illusion of motion and graphic portraits!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on August 02, 2010, 09:10:29 pm
Oh Gec, you rebel you.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 02, 2010, 09:39:12 pm
Oh how I wish I could see what you guys are tallking about.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on August 02, 2010, 09:56:25 pm
Do you not see the animated GIF image in this (http://www.gamingsteve.com/blab/index.php?topic=17260.msg803067#msg803067) post? :(
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 03, 2010, 03:58:19 am
Cell Phone.

:(
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on August 03, 2010, 05:13:34 am
I don't want to sound like a whiny bitch, but... is everyone ignoring my posts on purpose? I talked to Hay, no response. I tried to help Keel, no mention of it. I shouted something to Heliotrope, he doesn't say anything back. It's as if Kean is air. I don't want a fullfledged dialogue or a reply of twenty lines of text, but just some sort of reaction to something Kean did would be great, so that I know if the others are even noticing him.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: MetallicDragon on August 03, 2010, 10:58:19 am
Maybe he is a ghost?

<directed by M Night Shyamalan>

But for seriously, it's easy to miss a line or two when posting. I almost had my character grabbing the fallen gun when someone else already had. I had the post typed up and everything :P
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on August 03, 2010, 11:59:49 am
I think you might be over-analyzing it. Keel did answer Kean's question earlier before delegations started.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 03, 2010, 12:02:33 pm
I'm posting conservativly until I can get to a full computer. Sorry.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 03, 2010, 12:13:05 pm
I don't want to sound like a whiny bitch, but... is everyone ignoring my posts on purpose? I talked to Hay, no response. I tried to help Keel, no mention of it. I shouted something to Heliotrope, he doesn't say anything back. It's as if Kean is air. I don't want a fullfledged dialogue or a reply of twenty lines of text, but just some sort of reaction to something Kean did would be great, so that I know if the others are even noticing him.

Also, you need to take into account the situation the characters are in. High stress and very little time. It may be out of place for someone to be saying so much, let alone expect a complete answer.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on August 03, 2010, 01:32:09 pm
I don't want to sound like a whiny bitch, but... is everyone ignoring my posts on purpose? I talked to Hay, no response. I tried to help Keel, no mention of it. I shouted something to Heliotrope, he doesn't say anything back. It's as if Kean is air. I don't want a fullfledged dialogue or a reply of twenty lines of text, but just some sort of reaction to something Kean did would be great, so that I know if the others are even noticing him.

Also, you need to take into account the situation the characters are in. High stress and very little time. It may be out of place for someone to be saying so much, let alone expect a complete answer.
As I said, I don't want a full answer or anything. All I want is a reaction or at least a mention so that I know the people have noticed my post. You could even say something like "Ignoring Kean, Keel went to..." but just leaving me hanging there is just... Unprofessional. >_>

I mean, I don't even know if Heliotrope or Keel even heard Kean. Same goes for Hay. That kinda annoys me.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: martyk on August 03, 2010, 02:01:59 pm
Same goes for Hay. That kinda annoys me.

Well, it is Lush.  She sort of just does her own thing half the time.  She's getting better though.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 03, 2010, 02:48:24 pm
As I said, I don't want a full answer or anything.

Then you shouldn't have asked. ._.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on August 03, 2010, 03:27:06 pm
As I said, I don't want a full answer or anything.

Then you shouldn't have asked. ._.
I don't think I did:
I don't want to sound like a whiny bitch, but... is everyone ignoring my posts on purpose? I talked to Hay, no response. I tried to help Keel, no mention of it. I shouted something to Heliotrope, he doesn't say anything back. It's as if Kean is air. I don't want a fullfledged dialogue or a reply of twenty lines of text, but just some sort of reaction to something Kean did would be great, so that I know if the others are even noticing him.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on August 03, 2010, 04:10:04 pm
I don't want to sound like a whiny bitch, but... is everyone ignoring my posts on purpose? I talked to Hay, no response. I tried to help Keel, no mention of it. I shouted something to Heliotrope, he doesn't say anything back. It's as if Kean is air. I don't want a fullfledged dialogue or a reply of twenty lines of text, but just some sort of reaction to something Kean did would be great, so that I know if the others are even noticing him.

Also, you need to take into account the situation the characters are in. High stress and very little time. It may be out of place for someone to be saying so much, let alone expect a complete answer.

Pat also explained what I had in mind. We can assume that a character acknowledged what one said. But when there is so much action, it's pointless to nudge characters along (even slightly, as you are suggesting I do) until something more important forces them to take actions that actually need narration. Otherwise it's just a boring storyline. The continuity starts to drag out trying to give a response and it makes the opponent seem like they are on a time-out.

Now in the case of Keel, he didn't just get off the floor and throw a chair in reaction to Heliotrope. Keel heard Kean and got up. As he was taking cover, he reacted to Heliotrope's actions. In these two instances, I chose to omit the former for the sake of condensing narrative and making it more interesting by assuming Keel heard Kean.

I do this because I don't like narrating a half-stride action unless the majority of the story reaches a discernible checkpoint that I can reach so I can make that mini-arc interesting and worthwhile.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: art_is_a_mathform on August 04, 2010, 03:18:49 am
Blegh, I had completely forgotten about the RP board, but I'm back with attack and a rocket-man pack.

As I understand it, the delegations were cut short when a group of ruffians burst through the door, and we beat a hasty retreat out the back door. Correct?

Fear the Reaperman.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 04, 2010, 06:29:40 am
Pretty much. Oh and some killing was involved. Never mess with a room full of armed Celtic Viking Faeries and expect to come out unscathed.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 10, 2010, 02:24:58 pm
Darth oh Darth... where are you?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 14, 2010, 12:48:07 pm
Lush, you have a general sense of Darth's plot, right?

Do you think you can direct the action a bit in her absence?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 14, 2010, 01:29:12 pm
Yeah, I think we're splitting up though. Half escorting the diplomats and half fighting the invaders. Who's going to go where?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Flisch on August 15, 2010, 02:10:25 pm
`How come we have the time now to do silly smalltalk? >:/
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 15, 2010, 02:24:24 pm
Because there's not much else to do. :(
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 16, 2010, 07:33:12 pm
Hrm... we need more direction. I'm not sure what to post about and I can't ad-lib anything from the attackers' point of view because I don't know what they want.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: SimplyNecro on August 16, 2010, 07:59:28 pm
I'm little stunted on which way to go (which is why I haven't posted), mainly because I have been trying to see if maybe this is the arc where I reveal R5's true nature, preferably to a select few, one maybe

I also need to edit his bio, as he's way different then I originally made him, at least personality wise.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Darth Grievi on August 16, 2010, 09:11:01 pm
Ay... I'm rusty at this.

And I just now realized Inya had pretty much fallen off the face of the Earth. *facepalm*
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 16, 2010, 09:27:54 pm
Perhaps we should have a "hunted in the jungle" theme for the escort part and a classic towere defense for those back at the summit.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: MetallicDragon on August 17, 2010, 12:05:32 am
Ay... I'm rusty at this.

And I just now realized Inya had pretty much fallen off the face of the Earth. *facepalm*

Don't worry about it. I think this is going great so far!
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 17, 2010, 12:30:24 am
Can that be our battle cry now? I mean, it's no "Titans Go!" But its still pretty schwey.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 24, 2010, 03:02:50 pm
Time to be honest with ourselves. Is this RP going to limp its way to the finish line or are we better off putting it on hold for now and coming back later?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on August 24, 2010, 03:15:35 pm
I think we should come back later. We are too busy with other RPs and if we limp our way the story becomes flat and rushed. I think we all could use a writer's retreat and come back when the demand is there to finish it.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 24, 2010, 04:00:51 pm
Good enough for me. RP closed till further notice.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on August 25, 2010, 02:09:17 pm
If you're wondering why I haven't posted lately, just you wait until everybody gets back to the ship.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on August 25, 2010, 02:13:52 pm
That's odd. The other RP in the Unionverse went pretty much at the same pace as ours. Did it have a hiatus as well?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on August 25, 2010, 04:37:17 pm
Yes. Both Space RPs are on break.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Gnoll on September 26, 2010, 03:33:51 pm
Anybody for starting this back up?
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Lush City on September 26, 2010, 04:39:16 pm
Seems to be enough a lul.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: gec05 on September 26, 2010, 09:56:43 pm
Well you still need to take into account the rest are still involved with the other RPs. And even if they are done, they still need a break from that.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on May 12, 2014, 08:29:52 pm
*sigh*

This is depressing.

So many neat ideas for this game and we couldn't make it happen because of our egos. A lot of the topics I go to seem to follow this thread. Was it my fault? Maybe I had tunnel vision. I dunno I feel like it's my fault a lot of these games failed.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: Inkling on May 12, 2014, 08:47:18 pm
Hey, I remember this one!  I even tricked Gec into drawing something for me.

At a quick glance, it was a lot of Lush and Raz yelling at each other.  Beyond that, I don't really remember.  I wouldn't put all the blame on you, Pat.
Title: Re: Voyage of the Sidereal Hour OOC
Post by: PatMan33 on May 12, 2014, 08:55:20 pm
But I know I have caused a lot of our problems in the past. And I know a lot of our players also kept things private and in discussions with everyone but the person they needed to be talking to.

Is it a lack of communication that has done us in? Is it taking things too personally? Maybe it's both.

My personal gripe is one that came up again in the Dawn of Worlds game, and that relates to feedback. Players and GMs that only dispense negative feedback are a terrible risk to the game they take part in. Worse is when you get someone like me that really desires feedback, especially negative feedback. My desire is to try to fix any problems that people have with what I do.

But the lead is lost a bit when positive feedback is eschewed for negative feedback only. I know with my personality, I get very upset when the same person or people only tell me bad things without thinking to have the courtesy to soften the blow a bit with something kind. As they say, if you have to put **** in someone's bag, make sure you try to take a little out before you put your own in.